I've been frightfully long in reviewing and deserve a thwap. But perhaps I will leave a sufficient review and I will not need said thwapping.
Ron, looking more enthusiastic. "It must be hard for him, not seeing his father all summer. He might even be stupid enough to try and attack us again!" A bright smile now was evident on his face.
Hee. Typical Ron for you. And typical Hermione reaction.
Neville and Luna? Yay! Glad they're in on this ride as well. But, of course, they'd have to be, wouldn't they? And:
"Can I not sit next to the window? I find it's easier to think if I don't."
Great Luna line. It fits her perfectly.
Exploding Chocolate Frogs? Those sound fun! I want one!
The idea of Malfoy, with a sadistic smile on his face, slaughtering small animals was a grim one. Even Hermione, for once, did not disagree with Luna. The six just sat there mutely, avoiding each other's eyes.
Oi. That's a happy thought, now isn't it?
Mark Evans!!!!!!!!!!! ;lka;fklajs;dkfj Yay!!!!! That's all I have to say on that subject.
"You ruined my fun," Ginny complained, pouting and looking like a cat seeking attention. "My Bat Bogey's no use if he can't react to it. What should we do with them?"
Nice. Probably my favorite line in this chapter.
Glad the Hufflepuffs came to help. I like how you've written them.
Ginny looked up from petting Crookshanks. "Better yet, why don't all of you boys go and change next door?" Deliberately, she pulled off her jacket and started to undo the buttons on her shirt, staring meaningfully at each of the boys.
Hmm, well, maybe that's my favorite part. Ginny cracks me up.
With a flicker, the lights went out.
Nice ending. But I want more!
Cheers, Beth, you've done a lovely job, as ever. I'm enjoying this story a lot and am looking forward to the next chapter.
On to the review...
Wonderful. The typically well-researched, thoroughly planned and beautifully executed work that I've come to expect from you. Your characters are behaving in a canonical fashion and the inclusion of minor characters (such as the Hufflepuffs, and members of the Order) are perfect.
I'm looking forward for more.
And it would appear that I've forgotten my password. And I don't think I can access my registered email address because it was my uni one. Poo.
This is really interesting! I love how you put Mark Evans in here, I find his character especially interesting. Are you going to have his last name be part of the plot in anyway? I can't wait until Harry actually meets his parents and Sirius, who should be going into their 6th year. I love time travel fics, and you are a great author, so this should be a great story! Please update soon!
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