Great part and you have the characters down to a, 'T'. Since I am waiting to to get to the next part...this site must have alot of members, because there are to many on line for me to be able to get to the next part. If it weren't after mid-night I would scream, but then the kids would wake up and it would be like plopping harry in the middle of a room filled to capacity with Death Eaters.
Just have to say I really enjoy your writing.
Oh, before i forget....
In the preceeding fic you had Zorn and the Vampiress bowing to both Harry and Ginny. What is the significance of this action? If you would rather not say on the reviews page e-mail me at....
wonderful beginning if i do say so myself. the only problem [mind you its a not a big one. in fact i dont know if i should really call it a problem more of a concern] is the question of have they already or are they going to visit remus soon? its just that im just worried about the poor guy.
And I finally have the time to do a proper review.
First off, quite excited this is out. I love your characterizations, so I'm definitely happy to have more from you. But you already know that.
To this end she kept Harry and Ginny both busy doing housework in different rooms or at separate times as often as she could - Grimmauld Place had improved quite a bit since Harry's first visit, but it still had a long way to go before it was anything remotely resembling homey, from Mrs. Weasley's perspective.
That's definitely Molly for you. Mother to the core.
If Mrs. Weasley had known about some of Harry and Ginny's hidden activities when they found a free moment, Harry was quite sure that she'd take up sleeping in Ginny's bedroom and following her into the loo.
Hee Quite right, too.
"Calm down, mate," said Ron. "You need to learn to chill a little."
Harry's jaw dropped for a second. Over the past year Ron had taken to backing down whenever it seemed like Harry was about to tirade. "What, you pick now to get a backbone?"
"He's always had a backbone, Harry, maybe you've been just too thick to notice!" Ginny cut in.
"What is this, pick on Harry day?"
"No, that's tomorrow," said Ron.
Great exchange. Getting people to finally stand up to Harry being upset. Ron and Ginny are great there.
"Honestly, Ginny, you sound like a Slytherin," added Ron.
Which was rather what I was thinking of whilst reading about her idea. But it's actually a decent one, you know.
"Oh, you know, the usual," Bill put in. "Paperwork, tea-time, assassination attempts..."
Great line and transition into some more serious stuff. But you fired Mr. Weasley! That's sad. I could see this happening in canon, definitely, but it still doesn't make it nice. Ah well, you've got to have hardships somewhere.
Great will! I love how you had him include everyone and not just have him leave it all to Harry or all to Remus like in other fics. This is much more interesting and entertaining. Dung gets all the stuff from number 12? That's great. I'd love to see his reaction to that. And besides, this was a splendid way to get some money to the Weasleys without them being hugely uptihgt and not accepting. The side details (guitar, Weird Sisters) are great, too. Adds humor into it, which is very Sirius.
"Oh no," said Ginny. "If the git decides he wants back in, he'd best do it before our new money is public knowledge. He doesn't get to crawl back to us that easily now that we're no longer 'lacking ambition' or however he put it. And Fred and George are already rich. Or getting there, anyway."
Oh wow. That's tough, though not surprising.
The conflict with Hermione. Nicely done--having her stand up for Kreecher, but not knowing the full story...makes for an interesting reaction from Harry. All full of the anger from OotP. Obviously he's working on it (and Ginny's helping), but I would definitely expect him to lose every once and while still. He's only human, after all, and can't just poof his emotions away like that. I am glad Ginny's helping him, and I'm especially glad that whilst helping him she's still retaining herself in there and not just being sympathetic to him (like, she's sticking up for Hermione and not bowing down to Harry's anger).
Goodness, Joe, I'm so sorry it's taken me so long to get this reviewed. But better late than never, I guess.
Lovely, lovely stuff. This was a wonderful first chapter, and it was nice to move right into it.
This line made me laugh:
"Weird luck," said Moody, "is the reason I'm not on the cover of Witch Weekly. And I'd love to stay for dinner."
You do Moody so well!
I really enjoyed the part (toward the beginning) where Ginny defended Ron to Harry, saying he's always had a backbone. It made me smile.
The fight with Hermione and Harry was also very, very well done. It's very in character for Hermione to be so rational (or what she thinks is rational) about things, sometimes without thinking about individual feelings, and it's also in character for Harry to become very offended by that type of thinking. You handled that very well.
Of course, I love any and all snog sessions between Harry and Ginny (grin).
I'm so proud of you! You posted your story just in time for the summer too... It's extremely hot in my room right now, so I'll have to make this short.
You're use of characterization was great. You showed the teenage side of Harry (with his friends and Ginny) and his maturing side as well.
Oh, Sirius... Why did he have to die?
One thing, and I'm sorry to say it, but you forgot to put in the flying bike. Maybe that can be something that pops up in a later chapter
Speaking of future chapters, I can't wait for the next one.
Just FYI to other reviewers ... As Faelaern's beta and one of the admins -- I made a "technical error" in uploading the story originally, so it made it be a bit wonky on showing two chapters (although it was actually two copies of the same chapter) and so on. It's fixed now, though, and the REAL Chapter Two should make its appearance before tooooo long!
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