Loved all the fluff and Harry's reactions to her different movements and everything. Also liked Mrs. Weasley's reaction to them not coming in in a reasonable amount of time. Loved it! Kortnee
Harry freaking out over Ginny licking her lips, and Harry feeding Ginny berries, definately the makings of a wonderful first-kiss story. I adore the ending section with Mrs. Weasley... I really love her character, she's just so fun! Another great first kiss story. I also like the Ron-Ginny interaction in the beginning, very good example of a brother-sister relationship, I know I'm alot like that with my brothers and I'm sure I've said the "I'm blind!" Line multiple times ;)
I loved it. This was different, in that it actually made me,
well, blush a little. Grin. Harry was kind of smooth there,
even if he was afraid. I laughed at the second sweetest
line. I'm pretty sure that would only work on a teenaged
girl.
Great job of capturing an older brother teasing his sister about a
crush. Felt very real. Harry's reaction to Ginny in the
berry patch was funny, cute and believable. And there isn't much
better than a ripe red strawberry, especially sun warmed.
My favorite line was " Sweet Merlin. She doesn't know." Hee. Poor
Harry and his hormones. All in all, a wonderful short
story. You created a sexy feel without going into a lot of
detail. My thanks to you for sharing your imagination, it takes
courage to let others see your work. And send my thanks to your
betas as well. You all did a wonderful job. your fan, ellie
Kortnee
im lovin it like mcdonalds! keep up the good work!!!!!!!WRITE MORE
