Ah, my dear, that was perfection. Everything was so *right*, and I just love your characterisation of Ginny. You have her down (how I hope she is, at any rate) better than anyone. Her girliness mixed with the obvious tom boy stuff that goes with having six older brothers; the closeness of her friendship with Hermione and how much she cares for her; her dealing with Lavender and Parvati - everything is wonderful. I especially liked the continuing corrections from present to past about liking Harry!
Oh, Rachel, I love this! :yourock: It's touching and funny and angsty all at the same time. Harry and Ron both need to get their heads out of the sand. The list that Ginny and Hermione had of names to call Harry and Ron was brilliant and had me laughing hysterically.
And this was great too:
[quote]Parvati looked at me in surprise. "Harry asked you?"
"He didn't. Ron offered me to him."[/quote]
:lol: It makes it seem like an arranged marriage of sorts. Harry gets Ginny, and Ron gets 50 goats in return.
Basil M Monday 27th September 2004 22:38
Of Boys and Balls Part I (Author Response)
Thanks, Tari! I'm so glad you liked it. And the arranged marriage--ten goats type thing was exactly what I had in mind!
This was kind of bittersweet. It was so sad the way Ron and Harry treated Hermione and Ginny, but it was nice because we all knew what was going to happen. Hermione had a great date with a 'stud' and Ginny got a boyfriend out of the deal. I really enjoy your work (even though I don't always review, I know, forty lashes with a wet noodle) and I look forward to more.
Nicely written - it brought back memories of how I used to think and talk at Ginny's age, and it all felt very realistic. One observation, though: melancholy is a noun, not an adjective. So "he looked so melancholy" should be "he looked so melancholic." That jarred a bit, but the rest was great.
Well done! I did like this. I can almost see the conversation between Hermione and Ginny taking place. Both girls being there for each other after the brainless gits they are in love with don't notice them yet again.