hey! another james/lily era fanfic! this has been a really good read for me, so far(i'm implying that it will be better as the fic continues, don't misunderstand me)
what more can i say? do work on this!
I'm confused, why does Lily care if Chirs is "cheating" on her if ...
"Taking me in here and treating me as if I was your damn girlfriend! I'm not, and never will be!"+
Chris is a loser, and I'm confused.
Excellent story though! I really like it!
|Another chapter! I'm glad you updated so soon! This is quickly becoming
one of my favorite WIP, and you started it just at the right time- my
other favorite WIP is now complete. Anyway, GREAT job!|
To the story, I loved the contrast (in the beginning at least) between
James (arrogant, annoying) and Christopher (sweet, caring). Of course,
he did turn into an annoying control freak.
I liked this line for some reason:
"Wasn't there any boy out there that could see past his own bloody ego?"
It was nice forewhodowing to when James comes around.
I also liked this:
"Thanks for sticking up for me on Saturday.
It was sort of sweet, in a way, that James was thanking her. I guess I'm just a sap, but James can be such a cutie.
BUT Lauren, oh my, is she going to take a beating for that? Or is it
a misunderstandment. Because Christopher seemed to like Lily so much,
and so sincerely, and Lauren seemed like a really good friend. I wonder
what's going to happen...
So, thank you, once again, for writing one of my, no, my new
favorite WIP, and for updating so soon. So, need I say,please update
P.S. sorry about the italics, my comp. is being annoying.