She wiped her eyes on his robe and pulled back. Snape was giving them an odd look and stood up. "Let's get working, Harry," Hermione said quickly. "We'll talk more later."
Aww I wanted to hear Snape say something stupid in an attempt to embarass them and really humiliate himself!!! lol
oOh cliffhanger! Luckily I started reading after the next chapters were put up lol. Great chapter and can't wait for the next page to load which is like 5 seconds... but still...
'"Yeah,
Miss Patil, it means that should you pursue it, you have the ability to
become an Animagus." McGonagall was scribbling something on her
clipboard and then said, "You may have a seat."'
Ummm... Since when would Minerva actually say "Yeah"? That's the only thing.
I must congratulate you. Your stories are some of the few that I
can read for extended periods without getting frustrated with the
inanity of them. You are a wonderful writer, with a brilliant eye
for detail. I get frustrated by extended descriptions of things
that are not central to the plot simply because the writer is
interested in that particular thing (how many cropped tops and low-rise
jeans does Ginny have to wear before I close a story?), but every
detail in your stories seems to mean something, and your ability to
portray canon characters accurately is amazing! Please, write
on!!!
CQ
Mr. Intel Wednesday 23rd March 2005 13:02
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I'm flattered by your praise, CQ. It has always been my intention
to write good stories, but moreso to write unique stories, where the
same thing that's been done in a hundred others doesn't show itself
once. I will continue to write, and I hope that you will continue
to read.
Was hoping for more on the "chaming muggle objects" but, oh well.
Liked the confrontation with the other girls. I expect Harry's going to have to beat them off with a stick even more so. I hope we'll see Ginny doing it to. I do so love the cat fights ... :)
Hrm. I think I'll catch it from my wife on that statement. I'll rectify it by saying that Ginny is a smart witch, you're doing well by her by letting her develop on her own. I like the fact that she's not a "Mary Jane" and you're not painting her with the "Miss Perfect" brush that so many authors do.
Very good start. I can see that Cho and Parvati are going to cause
trouble with Harry and Ginny. I would love to see Ginny show them what
she can do. After all she did hold her own against the boy-who-lived
and leader of the DA that taught them what they know.
Love Ginny and Harry's easy relationship so far.
Hermione never said that she couldn't see a form. She just said that it
would have been nice to have been a cat and that the training would
have taken a lot of time. On the other hand, Harry did see black and
mist. He also thought he saw glimpses of a dog and cat. Parvati didn't
even mention seeing black. Is that a sign?
Somebody needs to see their name in lights, I see.
Yes... Kokopelli is the great pre-beta of this story and has oh so
humbly taken on the job to make sure I get all my it's/its and
your/you're issues straightened out.
And the story has begun. I was thinking of waiting to read this chapter, so that I didn't have to wait a long time in between chapters (you don't take long... but you know what I mean). I liked being able to read the entire story (as with the previous one). Of course, that's a crummy idea, as I want to know what happens now. Now that I've explained why I haven't reviewed until now... I'll just get on with it.
Good opening chapter. I can see quite a few subplots forming, from the animagus issue, Pavarti (silly girl), Ron and Hermione, Cho, the spell, etc. It'll be interesting to see how things progress with each of them.
As for Harry.. he's such a studmuffin! I really liked his reaction to Pavarti, nervous and a bit frightened. I was getting worried that he wasn't going to mention Ginny right away, and then I'd have to get angry at the poor boy.
Harry and Ginny's relationship is really nice. I like that Harry noticed the first time that she called him her 'boyfriend'. People do notice those things... at least I would. He hasn't had that before, so everything that happens with Ginny is going to be significant.
"Harry's hand was in hers and she smiled when he gallantly helped her onto the steps, as if she would have trouble keeping her balance. Not wanting to bruise his ego just yet, she didn't say a word."
This part seemed very Harry-esque to me. I can see him taking care, especially because he would feel so strongly for Ginny. I like her reaction too. She would understand about boys and their easily bruised egos.
Ron and Hermione aren't together yet, are they? I don't think so, but I'm wondering what's going to happen on that front.
The spell. Interesting, interesting. Trust Dumbledore to only give part of the information. You seem to be skilled at inventing magical-type spells and things, so I'm confident that it'll be a good one. Hopefully, in the next chapter (which I'll read as soon as it's posted).
That said, it was a great chapter! You broke right into the story well, without running around. I'm looking forward to more.
Sarah
Mr. Intel Thursday 4th November 2004 16:33
1: Beginnings (Author Response)
Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I love to hear what
my readers think and feel from my pitiful attempts at writing and
you've done a bang-up job of telling me!
I address R/Hr in chapter two (but it's just a hint or two) as well as
more on 'the spell'. Chapter three is where the spell actually
happens, so you'll have to bear with me until next week! BTW,
chapter two just went to beta.
This story seems to start with a bit of foreboding, then moves rather smoothly into the events of Harry's sixth (?) year. Harry's relationship with Ginny seems to be a key to the "power that the Dark Lord knows not." I am enjoying it so far, and look forward to events and enjoyment.
Thank you for your story!
Owen (ohboehm@aol.com)
Mr. Intel Wednesday 3rd November 2004 18:18
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Thank *you*, Owen, for reading and reviewing my story. Yes, Harry
and Ginny share something special that will help Harry fulfill the
prophesy. It's his love that Voldemort doesn't understand and
will never, until he is destroyed. Well, that is to say, in *my*
version of HP year six and seven. :P
Cheers! Looks like a good start. Hope it's as good as the last story. Are all the girls at Hogwarts going to be irked at because she was finally the one to "snag" ? I wonder what the spell Dumbledore wants to try that requires permission from their gaurdians? Keep it up and update OFTEN!
Mr. Intel Wednesday 3rd November 2004 07:59
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Obviously Parvati isn't too pleased that Ginny has claimed Harry.
She's going to be dissapointed again, though. As to other girls,
there are a few who idolized Mr. Potter and will be forced to look
elsewhere for their amorous needs. :D
A whizz-bang way to start a story! I loved the pacing of this chapter, all the difference scenes ran smoothly into each other, and the scene with Harry and Parvati, and then Harry and Cho actually made me laugh out loud.
I also am really impressed by how you just started the chapter without any of the serious background information of the prequel. We've all read it, after all
All that Harry and Ginny-ness was superb
Looking forward to more!!
- Katie
Mr. Intel Tuesday 2nd November 2004 10:07
1: Beginnings (Author Response)
Thank you so much for reviewing. On the background info, I
figured that a) it's a trilogy and b) It's much more fun to just dive
right in, don't you think?
There's more H/G in chapter two (which is coming along just
swell). And chapter three, and... Well, you get the picture. :D
I really liked his reaction to Pavarti, nervous and a bit frightened. I was getting worried that he wasn't going to mention Ginny right away, and then I'd have to get angry at the poor boy.
Cheers! Looks like a good start. Hope it's as good as the last story. Are all the girls at Hogwarts going to be irked at 
because she was finally the one to "snag" 
? I wonder what the spell Dumbledore wants to try that requires permission from their gaurdians? 
Keep it up and update OFTEN! 
