First of all, I loved your Author's Notes at the bottom. Random thought lol. Secondly, THAT WAS AWESOME! The I guess you would call it possesion was really creative. I had thought of something like that for a story I am working on but your version was interesting. From where did Voldemort walk to come into the room? How were there rats there if there was nothing else? It leaves so many questions but it makes it real that he doesn't know the answers to all or most of them.
The really old book and Hermione's reaction to it was really well characterized. I also loved how Dumbledore was reluctant to hand it over and Im sad that they {dumbledore and harry} think (or know) that it will be one of the last times they see or talk to each other.
On to the next chapter.. might call it a night about halfway through but I will finish it tomorrow if I do. Great Job!!
Ooooh, spooky. And interesting. Path of light? And it has to do with Merlin? Neat. And is it just me or does Harry just keep saying the SWEETEST things to Ginny???
Great chapter Michael! The dream was very well written, and obviously well thought-out. It's obvious that you've done a great deal of planning for this story, and it shows.
I actually like the fact that Ron and Hermione's relationship wasn't known to Harry. Something like that likely wouldn't happen while he was around, and he's a bit preoccupied with himself, and with Ginny.
I think that Harry's a bit more affectionate than I would have thought. Because he didn't get much as a kid, I always saw him as someone who wouldn't give it so easily. Then again, the oppisite could be true. That's the beauty of fanfiction, you can interpret the characters as you wish.
That said, my favourite line of the chapter is:
"That Voldemort – stop twitching, Ron – that Voldemort can still get into our heads."
It's such a random thing, yet I laughed out loud as I read it. Little details like it make the story so much better.
Very interesting. I'm intrigued by the spell that Dumbledore wants to
preform on Harry and Ginny. I still think Dumbledore is hiding to much
from Harry at this point after he promised at the end of fifth year to
be more forthcoming. Harry and Ginny will need more time to process the
pros and cons of the spell before rushing into any decisions. Rash
decisions tend to make more problems for them.
Very interesting. I'm intrigued by the spell that Dumbledore wants to
preform on Harry and Ginny. I still think Dumbledore is hiding to much
from Harry at this point after he promised at the end of fifth year to
be more forthcoming. Harry and Ginny will need more time to process the
pros and cons of the spell before rushing into any decisions. Rash
decisions tend to make more problems for them.
Dun! Dun! Dun! Let the games begin! Vodie is getting a bit
more bold! Ginny and Harry's bond is very strong to have Ginny
pull Harry back. Great chapter! Kept me on the edge of my
seat! Can't wait to see what happens next!
Mr. Intel Sunday 14th November 2004 17:29
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That's very perceptive of you. Yes, their bond is quite strong
and is exactly why she was able to pull Harry back. Yet another
example of how Voldemort has miscalculated the power of love.
wow .. evil forshadowing with Dumbledore there ...
"That Voldemort – stop twitching, Ron – that Voldemort can still get into our heads"
heheheh .. hehehehe ...I can just see Ron twitching too .... lol
good chapter!! need to find out how I can get updates mailed to me or something though ...
Mr. Intel Wednesday 10th November 2004 19:11
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On the page displaying the chapter, there will be a link next to the
author name that says, "Add this author to your update list". But
you have to be logged-in to see the link.
Very nice. I have so many questions that you need to answer, but I suppose I'll just have to be patient. I'm not sure I like the foreshadowing about Dumbledore and Harry not seeing each other many more times in this life. I'm rather fond of that nutty old genius. Excellent work, as usual. Kelley
Mr. Intel Monday 8th November 2004 21:37
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Foreshadowing is my way of saying, "Don't tell me I didn't warn
you..." I'll tell you what I told another reviewer, though...
Dumbledore will be alive by the end of this story.
I made a very big mistake, huge actually... I don't know why, something made me check my email from my work pc, and saw there was the email update of this story, and OF COURSE! I have to read it! Only word I can say right now, is amazing, you made me forget that I'm a sworn public state agency employee, and that I was on a government facility, doing something I'm not supposed to be doing, (actually is unlawful if we're going to be too techical but who's doing that anyway?) and that I was using the internet to read fanfiction. Not very ethic, huh? I think I broke like, 2 laws and 3 regulations there... Aw, I really don't care, lol!
Actually, there are 2 things, #1 when I was reading Harry's dream I was kind of wondering "where the hell I've read this before, it sounds sooo familiar?" and of course, when I read your A/n I knew. And #2 the scene with the map and the broomcloset was simply hilarious, I laughed so hard I think my boss figured out I wasn't really working.
Bottom line? There's a lovely labor opinion still waiting to be finish, but I don't really care, it was a great stress reliever to read this story, tomorrow is another day.
I have to break the law more often it seems...
Mr. Intel Monday 8th November 2004 21:36
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Please don't break the law on my account! I'm flattered that you
would be so motivated to read my story, but don't get into
trouble.
I'm glad you liked this installment and hope that the rest of the story is as entertaining for you.
excellent job, I have to read 'Path of Light' again, I thought the dream seemed familiar. Congrats on your 'promotion' here at PS. Do you have a corner office now or just a bigger coffee mug?:)
Mr. Intel Monday 8th November 2004 16:59
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No office, just a ton more e-mail and a bunch of threads I have to
watch now. Path of Light has some nice elements that I'll be
taking for other stories (the replicating journal, etc.) But, it
only lives in CotM now. :D
Well, another brillaint chapter! It was really wonderul! I especially liked the part with the broom closet! Harry's so clueless! lol
by the way, on jk rowling's site, there are three chapter titles from the "Half Blood Prince" go to www.hpana.com and there you will find how to get the three titles on JK's site. Pass the message along!
Update really soon!
~Maria~
Mr. Intel Monday 8th November 2004 17:01
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Thanks for the smashing review. Harry will be learned in the ways of the broom closet soon.
As to the chapter titles. There are several posts in the forums
(called Perch on the top section of the navigation section) that talk
about JKR's bomb behind the door. Thanks for sharing, though.
More, MORE, MORE! This is what I hate/love about incomplete fics, the waiting! Great work Can't wait for more! P.S. Why are you reading this? Get back to writing the story
Mr. Intel Monday 8th November 2004 09:08
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Yeah... the waiting is tough on me, too. I still have to *write* the dang thing, so sometimes, even I'm surprised.
More, MORE, MORE! This is what I hate/love about incomplete fics, the waiting! Great work Can't wait for more! P.S. Why are you reading this? Get back to writing the story
Thank you for the next chapter.
I've got a day off work and I'm wasting with suffering from a
very nasty cold. So you've cheered me up. As ever good writing.
Mr. Intel Monday 8th November 2004 09:07
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Glad to be of service. I hope that you get feeling better!
"Oh, I'm afraid that Voldemort won't get the chance to attack you that
way again. You see, the spell that I will perform on Saturday will
prevent all access to your mind, including whatever methods he
may attempt to invoke in the future." The Headmaster chuckled for a
moment and then with warm eyes, said, "Now off to bed with you. You
classes won't be any easier with only a few hours of sleep."
All access to Harrys mind? does this include Harry and Ginny's link, and will it have consequences in their relationship?
Bart (expecting a JKR style "wait and see" answer to his question )
Mr. Intel Monday 8th November 2004 07:03
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Hmmm. Without saying, 'wait and see', I'll have to say this: The
spell is complicated, as all spells that require enormous amounts of
power. In fact, the only two wizards capable of casting it are
Dumbledore and possibly Voldemort (assuming he knows about it).
Furthermore, Harry's link with Voldemort is much different than his
link with Ginny. Though, I *did* say 'all access', didn't I?
Sufficiently confused now? You'll just have to wait and see, then.
Mmm... I'm really getting into this story. I like the interaction between the gang and especially the way Ginny and Harry relate to eachother. Despite their chronological ages, they are both so old in some ways and yet still innocent in many others and I feel you have brought this out here.
Mr. Intel Monday 8th November 2004 07:01
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Thank you. It's a tough thing to be able to figure out how these
characters would relate to each other, considering their age and
experience level. In some ways, they're 15/16, in others they're
23/24.
Ohh, I love your plot lines! This just keeps getting even more intriguing. The vision that Harry was forced in was gruesome and terrible, which I'm sure is exactly how you meant it to be. And then Voldemort, you've got him down pat - excellent characterisation there.
One thing that did throw me a little out of the chapter was Hermione saying "what gives?" It's an Americanism as far as I know, and if there was a British equivalent it would more be something Ron would say than Hermione.
The interaction between all the characters was really well written though, and I like that Ron and Hermione got to be a part of something Harry and Ginny were doing (ie Going to Dumbledore, not hanging out in broom closets )
And, once again, your Harry/Ginny-ness is superb, I especially liked this part here:
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"What?" Harry asked. "What's the matter? I thought it was a good thing."
Staring at the floor, Ginny took even breaths. "It's not that, Harry. It's just...."
"What?" Harry repeated, taking her into his arms again. "Tell me what I've done."
Ginny laughed. "It's not you, silly boy. It's me." She looked up to him again and offered a watery smile. "You could have any girl in the castle and you picked me. Why?"
Harry's mouth hung open. "What do you mean 'Why?' Don't you remember the letter I wrote you? The one that spelled out exactly what I wanted in a girlfriend?"
"Well," Ginny said and then hesitated. "I mean.... I thought that you were just being clever...that you were trying to flatter me."
"No!" Harry said and placed his hands on her shoulders. "That's not it at all . I meant everything I said in that letter. I really need someone who won't take crap from me, who loves me for who I am and not for being the Boy-Who-Lived."
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Harry being able to deal with Ginny's insecurities and put them to rest is truly lovely Can't wait for the next update!
- Katie
Mr. Intel Monday 8th November 2004 06:59
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Well, I suppose that my Americanized-self will get one or two phrases
to slip through every now and again. Though we avoided 'eye
candy' and 'D'oh' in this chapter.
I'm trying to have Harry and Ginny act like typical teenagers, even
though they really aren't. It's tough to do, especially because
*I* know the right things for Harry to say to Ginny, but have to have
him *not* say them. It's not easy.
Great Job!!
I'm rather fond of that nutty old genius. Excellent work, as usual. Kelley
I don't know why, something made me check my email from my work pc, and saw there was the email update of this story, and OF COURSE! I have to read it! Only word I can say right now, is amazing, you made me forget that I'm a sworn public state agency employee, and that I was on a government facility, doing something I'm not supposed to be doing, (actually is unlawful if we're going to be too techical but who's doing that anyway?) and that I was using the internet to read fanfiction. Not very ethic, huh? I think I broke like, 2 laws and 3 regulations there... 
Aw, I really don't care, lol! 
More, MORE, MORE! This is what I hate/love about incomplete fics, the waiting! Great work 
Can't wait for more! P.S. Why are you reading this? Get back to writing the story 
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