I love this chapter. And I hugely appreiciate what you've done and pointed out in this story.
Firstly,
Harry may be one of the most famous wizards in the world, but the level of neglect he’s accustomed to – seems to expect, even – makes my skin burn. Sometimes, I feel guilty for what we’ve always had and I took for granted.”
I agree with that and it's so sad .
Secondly,
“They weren’t invited,” Bill replied, his lips narrowing into a thin line. “In fact, Dad was pointedly told to stay away.” “What?” Both Ron and Ginny screeched indignantly. “They’re the parents of the groom. How could Percy do this to them? Poor Mum, her heart must be broken. She’s dreamed of a wedding for one of us for so long now,” Ginny cried. “Yeah, well…Percy’s got pretty good at breaking Mum’s heart lately,” Ron said, nearly growling. “Mum took it really hard; she’s always held on to the hope he’d come around,” Bill said. “She’s been obsessing over it since that day at King’s Cross, but now…with this…she’s resigning herself to the idea that she’s lost him."
That's so sad . I can't beleive you'd do that.
Thirdly,
It suddenly occurred to her as she thought of her mother’s fussing over Ron, and her father taking time to play chess with him, that Harry was acting in much the same way as Ron, yet there was no one there to take those extra steps. In fact, Harry’s behavior his entire fifth year could be classified as a desperate scream for help that all the adults in his life – adults sworn to protect him – had missed. They were all so focused on the big picture that no one had taken the time to notice Harry slipping through the cracks. Not until Sirius had died, anyway.
So Dudleys coming round.. hmm, I've read this done before and it never really fits, or doesnt seem to really, makes the whole story feel sort of anti-cannon, but I have faith in your work so I'll shh now and see where it goes..
Another great chapter!Love it! I am confused tho...i didn't read the last one so i was wondering if you could email me and tell me who it was...i'm to in to this story to go back! Thanx...
YAY!
Oh, goody!! I haven't been back at this site for a while now, so it was nice to see two chapters up and ready for me to read. You have a great writing style. I liked the way you have made Dudley seem more human, and I really dislike Aunt Petunia. I can't wait to get into the thick of things when your plot takes off.
I love your style. I think it's mainly the details you put in there. You follow the books, not other fanfiction or the movies. For example, you have the ride home, which I haven't seen before. The description of the room is definitely from the books instead of the movie. I like that they play football, even though I'm not sure why. I also like the pranks Bill plays. When I started reading, I was hoping Harry could stay with the Dursley's past his birthday and get some revenge, but it's still in there. I also like how you don't seem to feel the need to stick to the girlfriends from the book. Just because Bill and Fleur had a thing in the beginning of book five doesn't mean they'll be together forever. And people generally don't marry their high school girlfriends, so the change with Percy is perfectly justified. Forgive me if you've put a breakup in the previous story, which I haven't read yet. I also love how Dudley didn't have a complete change of heart and is Harry's new best friend, but is just trying to figure him out. Great chapter!
“Engaged.” Ron sounded shocked. “Who’d want to marry him?”
OMG!! The sequel!! I am a huge fan of Power of Emotion, and I usually read it over at SIYE. I'm so excited! Now I have something to look forward to until the book comes out. These chapters were awesome. I love how you depict Harry's angst misex with his feelings for Ginny. I'm all for H/G fluff, so make sure to keep it coming ! Bill is wonderful, and it's going to be really interesting to see how Ron copes with everything. For once Harry is not the only one dealing with hardship, let's see how he does. But I'm sure he'll turn out ok, Ron's one cool guy.
Everything is wonderful, and welcome back!
Melindaleo Tuesday 30th November 2004 20:19
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Keep reminding me not to forget the fluff, I get carried away with the angst of it all sometimes, particulary here in 7th year with the final battle approaching.
Ron has a lot to deal with, as do Harry and Hermione...fallout from what happened at the end of sixth year. I love Ron, too - he's one of my favorite characters.
hm why is dudley all the sudden being decent? i don't really see the switchover there.. I most likely just missed it though, love it so far.. Hope the rest goes well :)
-iheartron
Melindaleo Tuesday 30th November 2004 08:00
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Harry is still wary about what Dudley's up to. There is more from Dudley in the next chapter.
Nice chapter, setting the scene for things to come, I guess.
You've got me wondering why Dudley is being so nice (for him) at the
moment, although he did come forward with an explanation. I'm
also hoping that Percy will see the light one day - it'd be great if
Harry could be part, or a motivator, of a reconciliation between Percy
and his family.
I think you missed out on a tiny thing you could have added to increase
the poignancy of Bill's discovery of the mistreatment Harry suffered at
the Dursley's hands ... I just thought it would have been nice if Bill
had stuck his head in the cupboard and read something scribbled on a
wall like "Harry's room" or "Harry Potter is six today!" or something
like that. Instead you had it as 'eerily clean'. Oh well.
Looking forward to details on Harry and Ginny's talk the next day!
Melindaleo Monday 29th November 2004 21:34
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Oh, I like that - the writing on the wall I mean, I didn't think of it. Besides, I think Petunia would have scrubbed every remenant of Harry from there by now.
Percy has a bigger role in this story, but don't be looking for any kind of understanding or great big family reunion anytime soon. Percy is still a Fudge supporter.
I love that girl!!!! I love the way you have written her, how she treats Harry and her brothers. I have absolutely no idea where you are taking us this time yet, but I'm with you all the way!
Melindaleo Monday 29th November 2004 06:10
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Thanks, I'm glad you like Ginny. She's grown up the youngest of seven, I know my youngest is the toughest of my crew and knows how to get exactly what he wants. He's a hoot to watch!
So when is Bill going to realize that he's the reason Harry's got all
the problems? Interesting thing is, from something in the first
story, I'm actually surprised that Ginny can wrap her mind around child
abuse and Harry's response to it. If I read your section right,
it simply does not exist in the wizarding world, so it's not something that anyone raised a wizard should be able to grasp.
I feel sorry for Harry. Their efforts to drive the Dursleys
elsewhere is going to ensure that Harry simply is not up to snuff when
it comes to Hogwarts again. Personally, I'd like to see the Order
kill the Dursleys, but the good guys don't do that. I'm surprised
that they even admit that killing is a necessity.
Please, whatever you do - kill the Dursleys permanently in this story. Preferably painful over a long period of time.
Either that, or submit them to intense national humiliation that forces them to leave the country.
Melindaleo Sunday 28th November 2004 09:50
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It exists, but it's extremely rare, that doesn't mean Ginny can't comprehend what was done to Harry. She knows all the stories, and I think that it's so rare among wizards makes it all the more horrific to her.
I'm wondering about the Order and killing myself (not the Dursleys). In the battle at the Ministry, they weren't using lethal spells, it was more schoolyard curses and hexes. It'll be interesting to see what happens in the next two books.
Great chapter. Nice to see everyone's reaction to Harry's state
of being. Dudley redeemed? Explaining quidditch to dudley
...that was definitely interesting.
Really liked the paragraph about h/g on the swings too ... well done!
Hope you have a great week at Disney World. Enjoy the time off.
As always, looking forward to the next chapter ...
Melindaleo Sunday 28th November 2004 09:47
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Thanks, I can't wait to lead. I wish I could do a magic spell to get all this packing done!
Another
great chapter, I'm intrigued with what
you're doing with Duddly. Looking forward to seeing Ginny sort out
Harry in the next chapter. Once Ginny gets him alone to talk to the poor boy won't stand a chance.