An intriguing beginning, avoiding most of the pitfalls with the beginning and making it fairly fresh. I had expected perhaps to see some older Order-member to come and check up on Harry but as we don't know what kind of fuss Ron and Ginny have kicked up over "visitation rights" they might just have pestered themselves into a visit - since it's a Weasley on guard duty as well he might be more inclined to call on his younger siblings.
The dialogue didn't quite flow for me, it worked for Ginny and George but it felt a bit stilted with Ron - he never struck me as for explaining this to Ginny.
Looking forward to the next chapter though, there is something is the telling of the story that has got me hooked.
Very interesting premise and start. Where are the Dursleys? Will we see their reaction if Ginny goes back to Harry's things?
kaiserzacc Thursday 17th March 2005 06:37
1: Of Prophesies (Author Response)
We will learn more about the Dursley's later in the story. I originally thought about having them react to Ginny and Ron coming by but decided to keep them out of the way this time. Thanks for reading.