I don't know how I missed this the previous two times I read this chapter... "If it weren’t for Ron, Harry would have been subordinate and done the very thing that Moody had warned him not to do."
Subordinate means obeying your superiors. You want insubordinate.
Sassenach Thursday 14th July 2005 15:44
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Hah...it must have leaked through on the editing stage. Thanks for the alert. And...you read this chapter three times in total? Man, it must have been a good chapter, lol. Thanks for reviewing and reading.
Such an interesting story! I can't wait to read the next chapters!
Ginny was able to aprentice under Nicholas Flammel. that's really interesting, I never would've thought of something like that. I wonder if JK will mention if Nicholas dies or if she'll mention him at all.
I loved the scene with Harry going through the waves on his broom, that would be so awesome.
Poor Harry and the dementors he must feel like such a waste! Aww!
Nice first chappie.
Like that Ron and Hermione are 'together'
Hope you resolve the Ginny thing soon.
And that Harry would play in the waves is just like him.
I sense... angst coming. Hope we don't wallow in it too long.
Good work.
Great start! I'm thinking there's more to Gypsy than meets the eye. Am I right?? Lol. Anyway, I love it so far, and look forward to new chapters (soon???)
Sassenach Wednesday 23rd March 2005 18:23
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Yup there is more going on with her. Chapter 2 will be up shortly. My beta and I are working on it as we speak!
Good start! You got all of the characters right, and Gypsy intrigued me the minute she was entered into the scene. I always wondered what would happen if Harry ever DID enter Azkaban.... Now I know! Great work! Lovely! Can't wait for more! ;) :) :D
Sassenach Wednesday 23rd March 2005 18:24
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I don't know why everyone is so intrigued by her, it must be the name or even her description. She is a fun character to write! Thanks for the review!
Hmmm - waiting to see what happens next. And, yes, I too enjoy stories that are outside of JKR's usual territory (ie away from Hogwarts or afterward). Looking forward to the next chapter.
Sassenach Wednesday 23rd March 2005 18:25
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Yeah, I kind of get bored when reading Harry Potter's life while he's still in school. I want to see what everyone is doing later in life!
It seems to be an intriguing start to your story. I hope you expand upon the Gypsy character. I especially like the bubbling milk part in the early going of the chapter. Your style is good and you seem to have a good idea going. I'm looking forward to more. Kudos.
Sassenach Tuesday 22nd March 2005 16:55
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You're definitely going to get to see more of Gypsy. She's quite the character, very daring and independent. The scene in the breakfast nook with Harry face first in the ceral, was probably my favorite in the whole chapter. I'm glad you enjoyed it too. There's more little humorous parts in the next few chapters! Thanks for the review, and I hope you continue to read!
