Wow! Great start. I really like your writing style. I thought the interrogation in his head was a very clever idea. I'm not sure about the letter Harry writes to Moody however. I guess that you were trying to give Harry a place to demonstrate his feelings about the Dursleys, but I don't think that Harry would ever have written such a personal letter to Moody. This is the guy that called him 'strange' 6 months ago at St. Mungos... Maybe if he wrote the letter to Remus or Ron or Hermione it would seem more logical and canon. Great start though. I hope that you will update regularily!
Aragog Monday 6th June 2005 19:06
2: A Long Night (Author Response)
I'm not sure about
the letter Harry writes to Moody however. I guess that you were
trying to give Harry a place to demonstrate his feelings about the
Dursleys, but I don't think that Harry would ever have written such a
personal letter to Moody. This is the guy that called him
'strange' 6 months ago at St. Mungos...
This is the value of fan reaction. I didn't think of that
either until you brought it up. As a result I've altered the story,
though not the version on this site.
*Chokes* Ohhhh my gosh! Harry's letter to Hermione! I was in genuine hysterics!
This review is odd, because I only read up to Hermione's letter, and THAT is because I clicked on the link to Chapter 2 and randomly started reading. So. Back to Ch. 1 it is- see you when I've finished!
Wow... I find this story line to be very exciting! And very unique! Specifics: I really like how you worked the Department of Mysteries inverview, and I loved Fred and George's bubble gum!
wishing you more inspiration and plenty of time to write!
