Wow! What a great way to start a story. I bet you got a bunch of reviewers complaining about the cliff hanger, but that's not me. I love writing that gets me thinking, asking myself questions about intent and direction, and you've done that right from the start. I can't help being totally sucked in, and for being one chapter into the story, that's a wonderful place to be.
In fact, I might have been even more delighted had you stopped with Ginny at the door and made it even murkier what you're leading us into. But I can understand why you didn't; the less tolerant readers would have been calling for blood.
Anyway, I gather that somebody's been in a coma for five years. And all H/G convention points to it being Harry, but if you've bothered to set up this intricate a way of hiding the man's identity, I'm guessing the answer's not going to be that predicable. I'd love to see another dimension thrown into the story right at the start. Neville? Dean? I don't know your writing so, it's just a guess, but I'll put my two knuts on the former. And I'll probably find out in a few minutes when I start Chapter 2.
Anyway, I've sadly become a rather lax reviewer lately so I'm not sure how much you'll be hearing from me as I go forward, but I definitely wanted to thank for giving me so much to think about so quickly. I'm very intrigued to see what you do with it.
There's a very palpable tension to this chapter that makes me feel drawn in to the situation. Since this my re-reading of this story for review, I know what's gonna happen, but the build up to the next part is intense. Poor Ginny - my feelings really went out for her and Harry throughout this entire story. Great start to what I consider to be the most emotionally taut story I've read so far.
Scarlett71177 Tuesday 16th October 2007 10:00
1: The Call (Author Response)
First off, I'm flattered this is a re-read and you're taking time to re-review, it's nice to get feedback and thoughts from that perspective.
I really enjoyed writing this first chapter and setting the tone for my adventure. I wanted to make it tense, create that sympathy for Ginny- and for Harry, but make them stronger people from the experience too.
Thank you so much for your lovely words, I'm so flattered you like the story.
Wow... what a start! I skimmed through the latest update (chapter
12) and decided I would like to take the time to get the whole story
form the beginning. Wonderful description of the awakening, and
all the emotions involved - and my, am I ever so curious to find out
what's going on here. What is it they don't want to tell?
What did Ginny put in her drawer before she left? I guess I'll
find out soon, huh?
Oh my lord, this is amazing. The intensity is so well written and thoughtfully created. I now have to peel my eyeballs back, as they are quite literally glued to the monitor. Wow, this was...well, intense!
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