I guess I missed the part where he did something to the slytherins. I know in OOTP, Harry sees what his dad does to Snape, but I don't recall anything more. Is this canonical (its been a while since I read HBP) or in one of your other fics? Sorry for my ignorance.
Mr. Intel Tuesday 30th May 2006 07:26
Looking Beyond the Mark (Author Response)
The relevant quote is here:
He had come to find out that Elizabeth the mediwitch, was none other than Elizabeth Jones, a Slytherin in the year ahead of him who had been the butt of one too many of the Marauders’ pranks.
It is canon that the Marauders pranked the Slytherins (and specifically Snape) I just added this non-canon character to the list of prankees to add to the tension of his visit to St. Mungos.
Nice Story. One thing that I don't think works right is the Mediwitch's asking James to take off his clothes. I don't that is how medical personnel in an ER operate. They would have him on a stretcher, and a nurse or orderly would remove the pants leg for him. Its only in doctor's offices or perhaps an outpatient unit at a hospital that you are asked to remove your clothes yourself.
Mr. Intel Monday 29th May 2006 14:07
Looking Beyond the Mark (Author Response)
Actually, that was by design. Elizabeth deliberately made James strip in front of her because of what he'd done to her and to the rest of the Slytherins. Sorry that wasn't clear enough in the text.
Hehe - lovely little backstory that gave a wonderful glimpse of the lives of Lily/James and Molly/Arthur. I especially liked the portrayal of Lily, strong, sensitive, mischievous and very much wearing the pants amongst the skirt-wearing Marauders - no doubt who's in control! The dialogue is certainly one of the highlights with your fic's - it's witty, sharp as razor and quicker than the Millenium Falcon! Well, the plot is pretty brill of course - I probably should point that out as well! It is always a pleasure to read your stories!
It's good to see a continuation/outtake on the original first chapter of your most excellent story. I think it hilarious and great fun that both men conveniently forgot to mention their off-hand bargain to their wives who seem to love them so dearly. I think my favorite section was the tender one between James and Lily, though, because we know so little of them from canon. You've put a marvelous spin on their relationship. As for the Mediwitch, Elizabeth is a riot...I bet she gave as good as she got, too!
I see you are taking correspondance courses from JKR's class on keep them guessing on what your story is about. Outakes from the bargain universe. Jes can you a little more broad in what we can look forward to. I like the first installment. The imagery is nice with a good bouget of realistic emotions.
Hehe - lovely little backstory that gave a wonderful glimpse of the lives of Lily/James and Molly/Arthur. I especially liked the portrayal of Lily, strong, sensitive, mischievous and very much wearing the pants amongst the skirt-wearing Marauders - no doubt who's in control! The dialogue is certainly one of the highlights with your fic's - it's witty, sharp as razor and quicker than the Millenium Falcon! Well, the plot is pretty brill of course - I probably should point that out as well! It is always a pleasure to read your stories!