I'll start with Beatrice: good introduction, well paced. You give the reader just enough without flooding us with information or telling us things not relevant to the story. The recruitement felt right to me, both being gryffindors it would make sense that Kingslay would be a little more accepting of her plea to join but still that little test.
And you brought Percy back! I'm not sure I believe that will be canon (2 days till I get proved wrong and now it's here for all to see) but you made his apology sound sincere and the Weasley's reaction to it as well.
And the little pang when he wants to hug Ginny, so cute! Does he even realise what's going on yet?
I should be working but maybe I'll read just 1 more chapter.
This is a great chapter, and it fits in nicely with the other two stories. I hope you update soon. I liked the way you included Harry with the Weasleys, and the developing bond between Harry. And the "wanted to hug her himself" thing is a nice touch. Can't wait to see the next chappie! Oh, and could you possibly mention in an authour's note how many chapters this will have? I'm just curious.
