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gymnastgal19
Wednesday 21st November 2007 19:29
Hogwarts alumni
Num. of Reviews: 2461
| Caught in the Act |
haha that was so cute! I loved how ginny left, presumably to throw up :p
 
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| pyromain
Saturday 1st September 2007 14:05
Hogwarts alumni
Num. of Reviews: 580 | Caught in the Act |
liked the POV angle. |
| daniel_r_crazy22
Saturday 10th June 2006 12:14
Hogwarts alumni
Num. of Reviews: 1230 | Caught in the Act |
| That wa really good. I liked the way you had the story in the eyes of Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Ginny. And the watch is really cool. I want one. |
| Ashley06
Thursday 29th December 2005 23:52
1st year
Num. of Reviews: 41 | Caught in the Act |
| ROTFL! that is awsome |
| Crookshanks
Friday 2nd September 2005 09:50
1st year
Num. of Reviews: 37 | Caught in the Act |
Thought I'd return the favour for your nice review! Really cute story! Its nice for Ron and Hermy to get a bit of the limelight/action for once! Good job! |
| jeanne
Saturday 13th August 2005 12:45
Hogwarts alumni
Num. of Reviews: 508 | Caught in the Act |
| With every writer,I find myself wondering why a kiss between a couple can be a reason to upchuck your last meal .This is the norm from nearly all writers. "scarred" for life. "Blinded" ,nauseous,etc. They,re in the 90,s,give us a break. |
| Sara Bendall
Friday 15th July 2005 10:10
| Caught in the Act |
| I LOVED your story! Is there gonna be a sequel! I want to know more!!!!!!!! You ROCK! |
| Allie Kiwi
Wednesday 6th July 2005 14:43
1st year
Num. of Reviews: 40 | Caught in the Act |
I loved this story - sorry I coudn't review it for the competition, but one can't really show bias when one is an admin, you know!
I really like how you had the different points of view of the same event, especially how both Hermione and Ron percieved gestures of the other as being a sign that they were losing the argument:
“Don’t you remember what happened last year?” Hermione asked, pinching the bridge of her nose.
Ron loved when she did this—it meant he was winning.
And then here:
“Of course it is! That’s my point!” he said, using large hand gestures. He always added those when she was winning an argument.
Wonderful humour! Well done. |
Sarcasmo
Wednesday 6th July 2005 17:07 | Caught in the Act (Author Response) |
lol no prob bob... at least I know it was all fair... even if I didn't win ;) hehehe. Thanks for the review! That was one of my favorite parts too... I mean... think about it: if those two are always fighting it's because they obviously think they can win. Crazy kids.
Thanks again!
Sarcasmo |
| Shloz
Sunday 3rd July 2005 23:20
1st year
Num. of Reviews: 8 | Caught in the Act |
Just in case my earlier review didn't count, since I signed it without officially logging in.
As before: Liked it pretty much, except for the "POV" titles, which I think were unnecessary |
| Shloz
Sunday 3rd July 2005 22:53
| Caught in the Act |
Finally - a story I feel I can review, knowing what that means here ;-)
Very nice, short and sweet. Too bad you couldn't expand on what was going on with Ginny: is it just Harry, or something else?
A critique point: I think the POVs are obvious throughout the piece, and adding the title "XXX POV" is redundant, and even detracts a bit from the feel. We can figure out whose POV it is from the story itself.
Also, were there any sweets other than biscuits in the piece? Do the chocolate chips (I think British might call them "bits") count if they're part of the recipe?
Good luck! |
Sarcasmo
Wednesday 6th July 2005 12:23 | Caught in the Act (Author Response) |
I'm glad you felt you could on mine... especially since so few felt the same way!
writing in who's POV was an idea of my beta's, as she said it took her a few moments before she realized what I was doing with it. Otherwise, I would have just seperated it. I went along because it's best to take your beta's advice, since I obviously knew what I was doing and she gives a better perspective on what a normal reader would think while reading.
The other thing about biscuits is that in England they call cookies biscuits... funny eh? I didn't know that until this piece either! So that's where the sweets part comes into play ;)
Again, thanks for the reviews and I hope to see you around! |
| Astrid
Sunday 3rd July 2005 18:24
7th year
Num. of Reviews: 336 | Caught in the Act |
| Haha, cute. |
Sarcasmo
Wednesday 6th July 2005 12:20 | Caught in the Act (Author Response) |
| Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. |
| flyawayflowergurl
Friday 1st July 2005 17:29
1st year
Num. of Reviews: 8 | Caught in the Act |
| Im not a big R/Hr shipper but that was an ok story!!!! Thumbs up from me. |
Sarcasmo
Wednesday 6th July 2005 12:20 | Caught in the Act (Author Response) |
| just out of curiousity.... if you're not big on RHr why are you at this website? I'm glad you enjoyed the story none the less, of course, but that struck one of those chords with me that intrigued me to why you're over here? HG perhaps? hehehe. Thanks for the review! |
| Leah
Friday 1st July 2005 14:35
| Caught in the Act |
| I love it! I saw that pic ages ago, and loved it. You kept everyone wonderfully in-character; that's hard to do. Good luck in the contest! |
Sarcasmo
Wednesday 6th July 2005 12:19 | Caught in the Act (Author Response) |
| awwww thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it ;) |
| Arnel
Thursday 30th June 2005 23:50
Hogwarts alumni
Num. of Reviews: 573 | Caught in the Act |
I like how you looked at this situation from all four points of view. I found myself enjoying how each looked the situation just slightly differently. You’ve done a nice job on this story. |
Sarcasmo
Wednesday 6th July 2005 12:18 | Caught in the Act (Author Response) |
| why thank you! I really enjoyed getting to do each POV with the same story. It made for some meticulous editing (to make sure the convos went the same at least) but it was a lot of fun. |
| Bella
Thursday 30th June 2005 19:11
2nd year
Num. of Reviews: 77 | Caught in the Act |
Very cute! Characters were, well, in-character, and it left me with a smile on my face (and a hankering for some biscuits!). Great job!
Bella |
Sarcasmo
Wednesday 6th July 2005 12:17 | Caught in the Act (Author Response) |
| lol thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! |
| Kelleypen
Thursday 30th June 2005 16:55
Hogwarts alumni
Num. of Reviews: 416 | Caught in the Act |
| interesting technique--rather Faulkneresque with the different points of view. fun |
Sarcasmo
Wednesday 6th July 2005 12:17 | Caught in the Act (Author Response) |
| Why Thank you! I'm glad I got a few reviews, though I'm a bit disappointed at the lack of response I got compared to even those that didn't place :S Thank you for the compliment! |
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