Nice scene with Harry whacking at the grass pretending its Bella, that's the sort of transference one might do in his situation . Mrs Figg tells Harry revenge isn't good and then turns around and wants to hex Dudders -- not quite consistent . Nice having Dudley turn into a pig . I like how you make the colors match the color of ink used . Nice seen with Tonks giving Harry (sisterly?) advice -- fits the clueless teen years about right .
Snooty little know-it-all by the name of… Weasell? Westley? Worstey? Somethin’ like that--Percy something. Ever ‘ear of him? Tall, skinny red-haired ? Reminds me sorta of your friend Ron
-- does Tonks really not know Percy is a Weasley or did she do that on purpose . "Vol--him" -- now Harry has never been one to hesitate to use his name . Only Harry would answer with such self-doubt. Good for Ginny to call him back .
Great start, but your characterizations are a little stiff. Both Harry and Ginny talk/write more formally than would be expected of them from the books. Even simply adding a few more contractions to Harry's speech would make a world of difference. (And on a similar vein, Tonks doesn't mangle the English language as badly as Hagrid in canon.) Otherwise, definitely a good read!
How can a "finished" fic,come after an unficished one? Is RoA complete or what is happening.I should like to know.
I'm
assuming you are referring to the fact that Rampage of Ages is a
prequel (i.e., Year Six) to Philtre of Promise (i.e., Year Seven) -- I
mnerely wrote them out of order...
A great chapter!! I really did like it, none of the characters seemed OOC either which was really good considering how much emotion and fluff you put into this chapter.
I hope to see updates soon!
RdeHwyll Tuesday 9th August 2005 05:01
Chapter One (Author Response)
A great chapter!! I really did like it, none of the characters seemed OOC either which was really good considering how much emotion and fluff you put into this chapter.
I hope to see updates soon!
Thanks for the kind words -- Chapters 2 through 17 are now being BETAed, though I find I'm stuck on Chapter 18... but I WILL finish the story, I promise!
whacking at the grass pretending its Bella, that's the sort of transference one might do in his situation 
. Mrs Figg tells Harry revenge isn't good and then turns around and wants to hex Dudders -- not quite consistent 
. Nice having Dudley turn into a pig 
. I like how you make the colors match the color of ink used 
. Nice seen with Tonks giving Harry (sisterly?) advice -- fits the clueless teen years about right 
does Tonks really not know Percy is a Weasley or did she do that on purpose 
. Only Harry would answer with such self-doubt. Good for Ginny 
to call him back 
