Well, I really like this story already, Joe. It was nice being
able to read all these chapters at once, though I was definitely
msising out by not reading it earlier. Though I know I'll be busy
for the next few months, I'm going to try and keep up with this.
It had been a very good day, and he was not happy to see it coming to
an end, but he knew all too well that nothing lasted forever.
That's such an emotionally charged line. Works well to help start the story off.
an interesting affair to say the least
Oh, I bet it was. Any chance of seeing it in flashbacks?
Harry winced. "No. I can't.” This, the real reason behind his being up
here and not downstairs with the others. "That dress. I can't take
her wearing that dress.” The rumbling creature within Harry thought
there were any number of things he could do with her in that dress...or
witho– Harry stamped on it and came back to himself.
Nicely done there. I love the reference to the rumbling creature within Harry as a throwback to HBP.
"It's my brother's wedding day, Harry. I'm not leaving until he and
Fleur do." Ron glared at him again, turned on his heel, and walked out
of the room
I think that's important, and I'm glad that Ron didn't back down on
it. No matter how difficult it is what the trio are off to do,
family is important, especially in wartimes.
Ginny gave a humourless laugh. "We weren't together over a holiday or anything, how exactly was she to know?"
Oh, interesting thought about Molly not knowing about Harry and
Ginny. This had never occurred to me, just as Harry. but a
nice touch, nonetheless.
And such a bittersweet end to the chapter. I love that they got
the kiss, but at the same time, knowing what has to come now for
Harry... it makes my heart ache for them.
As I've said, I've read all that you have up, but reviews may be slow
in coming. I'm off to bed now, and I've got staff meeting stuff
tomorrow and student teaching starting Tuesday, but I'm going to
attempt to get my reviews up in a timely fashion (though I do know
you'll be happy to see them whenever I get them up).
Annika :)
Faelaern Tuesday 3rd January 2006 08:12
Prologue (Author Response)
Thanks for the review, Annika! :) That you read all of the chapters at
once says something that is a review itself, in a way, though I
certainly look forward to reading your thoughts on the rest of the
chapters.
I doubt I'll be doing any Dursley flashbacks - I've no real use for
them, and nothing that happened while Harry, Ron, and Hermione were
there is really relative to the story I'm trying to tell, beyond what
I've already said.
'Bittersweet' will set the tone for a lot of this story, I think. Well,
one of the tones, I should say. In a story this long, if you've got
only one tone, you'll find yourself sorely lacking, just as in any
tapestry.
Good for him being so frustrated!God that must've been the most annoying thing I read in HBP but you're making Harry pay for his mistake, and very nicely too. Can't wait to read what's in the next chapter.
Nice Ron characterization too, I can see how he wouldn't want to leave before the end of the wedding, even if Harry doesn't understand at first.
You've set up the rest of the story brilliantly. Harry's distress about being away from Ginny/wanting to be with her is palpable and I love the fact that Ron wants to stick around until the happy couple have left the Burrow. That was a very nice touch, giving closure to this part of Ron's life. I'm looking forward to your next chapters. Please post again soon.
Hi, there. I'm a fanfiction reader who basically got fed up with the sites I was frequenting out of habit and so went searching through the wide world of the internet for some new material. I must say I'm really impressed by your writing. It's clean and it flows--and I'm even interested by it! This story definitely has potential, and I'm glad I stumbled onto this site. Good luck with your writing!
Oh, excellent! I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter. I too, am very pleased with how you've portrayed Ginny. She's a very stong girl, especially when it comes to Harry. How long did she wait for him? I don't think she'll give up on him that easily. Nor will Harry be able to push her from his mind. Excellent job. Well done. More!!
what a beginning! you show how ginny understands harry and how the others really don't and you also show how they desire each other.....let the h/g flow......
I know it has to be that way. but it irks me just the same.
Brilliantly done - I appreciate the way you've captured Ginny's approach to the situation.. she's a very smart woman and you've got her down to that in a few lines. Well done!
*sigh*