fairly well done...not exactly what i'd picture Ginny as, but still...u did well, and i laughed on more than one occasion...haha.
one thing tho...the descriptions seemed to move a bit fast...i felt like i was watching some kind of synopsis at the start of a serial TV show or something, u know, where they go, "previously on..." or something.
either that, or i was reading through it too fast...hmm...
I love it!! It's a great story. And for some reason, Ginny is rarely in character. She is soo in character in the fic. Nicely done. I have one critique: "Harry and I going for a walk" "Bill and I will have a long talk" I know you've heard this many times from teachers and whatnot, but it is important. But generally, it was a brilliant chapter.
Gin-Jess
Majick Monday 22nd August 2005 04:47
1: Ginny's Tale (Author Response)
When writing in the first person, I often find myself ignoring the rules of grammar - more often with Ron than others, I must admit
A nice start. I think you have Ginny's voice just right. Are you planning to give us the othe three perspectives as well? Quite a challenge for you to keep them distinct.
One small but important mistake you should fix if possible : when you write " Harry and I went back out to the meadow, and Harry told me things about my second year I didn't know ." You really mean 'my first year' (Ginny's first -- Harry's second).
Looking forward to more ...
j
Majick Monday 22nd August 2005 04:45
1: Ginny's Tale (Author Response)
Um... Whoops
As you can now see, all four characters got to have their say.
This was really funny! I know I shouldn't start a WIP that's Pre-HBP, but when I saw your name on it, I knew it would be good, so I read it anyway, and this is really promising. Looking forward to the rest of it!
Hope you get the same feeling from the other chapters.
