This is another excellent chapter to this story. Normally, internal narration, where the
character catalogs his thoughts don’t work for me, but Harry is by nature
introspective and often alone. I
believe that he would run through his thoughts this way. You’ve given the reader a glimpse into his
mind, without revealing everything.
I was surprised at how well the conversation between Harry
and Dumbledore went. Would Harry
really exercise his anger towards the headmaster so quickly? That said, I feel the conversation showed
Dumbledore as learning from his mistakes.
Allowing Harry the freedom to leave the Dursleys as soon as possible
can’t help but speed the healing process.
I’m glad that Harry focused on Sirius being cleared. Padfoot deserves to be known as a hero, and
now Harry won’t have to hide how much he meant to him. Just that little smile was a good sign.
Once again, I’m enjoying your work, and look forward to
reading the next chapter. I can’t wait
to see him back with the Weasleys. Thank
you for sharing your creativity.
Pixie or ellie