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Ladybug
Thursday 18th January 2007 12:36


Hogwarts alumni
Num. of Reviews: 375

Chapter 1
Hey DaisyFlo!

Originally I deferred reading this story because it's a WIP (my limited brain-space has trouble remembering plots!) but now I have the great pleasure of betaing for you, I'm really enjoying it. You strike the perfect balance between humour and drama, much as JKR does - I love the conversation in the train ("Not Dean, you idiot! VOLDEMORT!" ) and the image of Harry lying against the door trying to listen in and Vernon stepping on his face! LOL! A super opening chapter - I look forward to this story unfolding.
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Delani
Saturday 8th October 2005 07:43


7th year
Num. of Reviews: 319

Chapter 1

Hah. That quote you have is unfortunately too true, but I only hope it doesn't apply to this story...  Well done, and I like the title.

 

Delani

DaisyFlo
Saturday 15th October 2005 23:24
Chapter 1 (Author Response)

Thanks Delani!

Well you'll have to wait to find out whether the quote applies to this story...

The next chapter's on its way...

Daisyflo xxxxxx

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Dalf
Friday 7th October 2005 19:08


Chapter 1
"... averting Harry’s eyes, muttered she would be spending the journey with some friends who had asked her to sit with them ‘ages ago.’"

  You want avoiding not averting.  Or perhaps Averting HER eyes form looking at Harry or whatever.  But, I don't think she can avert someone else's eyes.


  Other than that and the rather over done and OOC "petuna change of heart" it was a pretty good start.  I am happy you did not have Hermione and ROn tell him he was being stupid about Ginny. 


DaisyFlo
Saturday 15th October 2005 23:30
Chapter 1 (Author Response)

Hey,

Thanks for the tips, it could be avoiding, as when I was writing the chapter, my pre-betas and I weren't sure what to put and decided on averting.

Thanks,

Daisyflo xxx 

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Cherry
Thursday 6th October 2005 18:47


4th year
Num. of Reviews: 179

Chapter 1

Brill, so emotional. I love it! next one please!

Cherry xxx

DaisyFlo
Friday 7th October 2005 05:04
Chapter 1 (Author Response)

Hey Cherry,

Thanks for the review! It's so encouraging and don't worry, the next chapters on it's way soon!

Flo xxx

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COUSIN
Thursday 6th October 2005 09:19


Chapter 1

hey cuz might be biased because of being a blood relative and all but i think it rocks my socks.

love n kisses

DaisyFlo
Saturday 15th October 2005 23:32
Chapter 1 (Author Response)

Hey COUSIN!

You're too cute, I couldn't of written it without you... (sob, sob...)

See ya soon,

Flo xxxxxxxxxx

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Bucktavius
Thursday 6th October 2005 03:53


2nd year
Num. of Reviews: 73

Chapter 1
very good start. It should be interesting to see where you go with it. Hasn't angry Harry kind of been done though, with all of the post Ootp fics? just a thought
DaisyFlo
Friday 7th October 2005 05:06
Chapter 1 (Author Response)

Hey,

Thanks for your review, and i suppose angry Harry has been done, but angry Harry is so fun to write! Next chapter coming soon...

Flo xxx

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aschowin
Wednesday 5th October 2005 14:01


3rd year
Num. of Reviews: 136

Chapter 1
Good start.  This chapter is very well written.  I can't wait to see where your plot goes.  Keep up the good writing.
DaisyFlo
Saturday 15th October 2005 23:26
Chapter 1 (Author Response)

Hey,

Thanks, I've got some plot twists which should interest you, Next chapter your way soon.

Daisyflo xxx

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PadfootLives12
Wednesday 5th October 2005 13:57


1st year
Num. of Reviews: 16

Chapter 1
Very good, very good! I loved Harry's "Erm...resting?" line!  I hope to see more of this story!

-Padfoot Lives
DaisyFlo
Friday 7th October 2005 05:09
Chapter 1 (Author Response)

Hey, Padfoot Lives!

Thanks or the review, I promise there'll be nore lines like that to come! The next chapter will be on it's way to you very soon!

Flo xxx

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