WOW.... That was really brilliant! I loved all the separate
little scenes and the way they were written somewhat vaguely. You
really did a marvelous job of painting a picture with subtle strokes
and gentle nuances. And the way you write is very smart, but also
very pleasing to read. I'm QUITE intrigued! I sense that
this will be another legendary, epic HP fanfic... one of the
greats. Bravo!
This is really interesting. I liked the bitty style and all the extracts were intriguing- I especially liked the part about the Muggle with the charming (wizard brother) who felt as though his pocket had been picked- I know the feeling. I hope you write more, it'll be really interesting to see where you're going with this!
Perfect!!!!So much,but not really,like the opening chapter of HBP.Please tell us you have this fic outlined right to and including the epilog???If you can keep up the quality of the first chapter,you will have my undivided attention.Each and every short paragraph,I,m sure is a chapter in itself,although longer as you write them.Thank you,Jeanne.
put some of that in.
I hope you write more, it'll be really interesting to see where you're going with this!