job at catching your audience's attention. This is a very interesting
storyline and I look forward to it unfolding as you post new
chapters. I love the fact that it starts out with something
F&G created. I can just see their faces looking at each other with
and 'oops' look.
Wow! Really great idea, i'm very interested. But the thing you need to make better are characters emotions, thoughts (Harry came to know that Ginny is dead, but he doesn't seem to be very sad ) and maybe you are making plot run a little bit faster than it needs.
Sorting Hat Saturday 24th December 2005 11:58
2: Chapter 2 (Author Response)
Heh. That's because he's being shuffled around too quickly to properly experience anything other than confusion and frustration. He also knows it's not his Ginny, so he's upset but not devastated.
As to why Harry could come to Albus when he's Chancellor of Medicine -- that will probably be revealed as the chapters unfold. Once we hit Derailment, the emotions are going to be a lot more promounced. and just you wait till chapter4, if you want emotions. Heh.
As for the plot moving quickly -- that's the nature of the story. :D
Well other than being just as confused as Harry, all I really want to
know is why Harry could come to Dumbledore whenever he needed...if
Dumbledore is head of St. Mungos. The story is well written and
intriguing, keep up the great work.