This is one of the better harry potter stories I have read. I don't know if all of the characters are spot on, but the Harry Potter you wrote is one of the most real I have seen. Thanks for the enjoyment, and I hope it continues soon
Great , it's really a big history you've got, it's about the third time I read it, but i'm not gettin tired of it, that part, you know, the one of the final battle against Voldemort it was mos likely the best i've heard of, and i think though it was we all wanted, a bloody fight and a great duel between them, though Hermione and Ron's deaths was a low punch i'm at th edge of tears every time i read about it....
keep doing this great fic.....
oh, by the way, when do you think to update? i'ts jus not fast enough....
You do realise this story is incredible, don't you?
After spending more hours than I can count reading through this WIP, reading each chapter several times, I figured the least I could do was to write a review, giving you praise, for each chapter. It also gives me an excuse to read through everything again. So here goes the first of many review that will come in the next few weeks:
A brilliant, heart-wrenching and thoroughly inspired first chapter. For the first time, a fan-written chapter has truely made me empathise with everything Harry is going through. Harry's reaction to the events that have happened seem to fit so well in the dark, alternate future you created; not only do you skillfully convey the torrent of grief that Harry is feeling, but you also show a suicidal side to his character that fits well with what we already know of Harry. We know from canon that Harry's emotions are often strong and expressive, and so to hear him turning more and more suicidal with self loathing fits with his strong feelings of inferiority, anger, and morality. Often, fanfictions have Harry's emotions toned down a lot, and so it's refreshing to see that this isn't the case, particularly bearing in mind the horrors he has experienced in this version of events.
The death of Voldemort is handled well too; the scene was short, not giving many details, but gave the impression of a long fight that was not won easily, though Harry had the upper hand. Voldemort's actual death, being blasted to pieces after having his shoulder ripped apart and his mind assulted, was far more satisfying than JK's expelliarmus-based end.
Injecting small doses of humour into the story is done well, not being too distracting from the mood; in fact, the humour contrasts nicely with the dark theme of the chapter, helping to amplify the negative emotions straight after the humour.
All in all, a very well written, well thought-out chapter, providing a solid foundation to the story that has become my favourite amongst any fanfiction, Harry Potter or otherwise. This story is a rare gem amongst a plethora of mediocre works, and would be well-worth paying for, if payment for your work was necessary. Thankyou for the free gift of the chapters already written, and I look forward to reading each new installment as it is written. You are indeed to be commended on such fine work.
wow, im really excited to read the rest of the story. i hope it all works out well for harry and hope the world doesn't end up as gloomy as it in the prologue. Great writing and cant wait to read more!
There is a statement that Harry was the last remainign member of order and all who he loved died. Though I didn't find a note about Ron's dead, More to it as a tactical force he could really help Harry in his plans. Or he just gone post factum? ^^
from GryffindorDragon's review:
You accounted for the death of most everyone (at least Neville took out Bella ) but not Ron and Hermione .
I really liked the part where Harry carries on a mental discussion with deceased Hermione to be able to carry on research; quite touching.
Actually she died to:
In their last year together, after Hermione died, Ron .....
I was wondering if you're ever going to finish the story, it seems really good judging from the reviews but I really don't like reading unfinished stories because I tend to finish them in a few days and I don't want to go through that torment of not knowing what's going to happen next
I did not realise that it was a WIP before I started .... this is only the second fan fiction I have read here...... I am sooooooo looking forward to further chapters .... I have really enjoyed the story so far ..... amazing job!
One point ..... now that the last JKR book is out .... don't worry if you are a little different .... I rather like the idea of the sorting hat as the last horicux and not harry.....
This story is so intriguing and well written. Who wouldn't want a second chance to make things better? Harry is taking a huge risk (his nobility complex is working again) by attempting to change the past and save the people he loves most.
Please, please finish this story.