Good start, well written, so allow me to point out two weak points: the orderly appearance of No. 4 should hold some appeal to Hermione, whereas Harry's chaos wouldn't be her cup of tea. And Harry is awfully rude about Godric's Hollow. - Just two thoughts, no substantial problems. Looking forward to ch. 2.
I love how you begin this story with Hermione's perspective. I hope we'll see more of what's going on in her head as the story progresses. The fact that she and Ron are able to and do use magic at the Dursleys to make their living arrangements more pleasant is a nice touch, especially when they are discovered by Aunt Petunia and Uncle Vernon. Also, I was encouraged when Harry stood up to them. This is a very nice start to another one of your truly entertaining narratives. I definitely look forward to your next chapters.
Interesting start. I wonder how Harry's going to deal with Kreacher when they move into Grimmauld Place. ...and how much 'Dung has filched from there, too!
I like your Harry so far - he's brooding, but can still function and has a plan (I assume! It sounds like it, anyway).
I've always wondered what it would be like for Hermione, living in 2 worlds as she has been doing. You've worded what I was imagining perfectly and I applaud your talent to do so.
As for the introduction to the rest of the story, it sounds intruiging. Harry sounds like he's grown up a little but he and Ron are still obtuse, ignorant, and immature boys and you've kept them that way.
This chapter has all the setup for intrugue, drama, romance and adventure. My favourite kind of story. I'll look forward to the next chapter!
I cannot begin to tell you how utterly THRILLED, I was to see you back Mr. Intel!!!! I even did a war dance!!!!! I have been waiting anxiously for months to see you writing again, and I have once again not been dissapointed!!!
Hermione leaving her parents....heartbreaking!!! You are just simply amazing at what you do, and the stories you create are high quality! I am enjoying your take on book 7 and I VERY EAGERLY await your next chapter! I hope to one day see some of your other stories finished as well!!! :blushing:
WELCOME BACK, and Brilliant job!!!!!:thumbsup:
Whee! Mr Intel's back! Mr Intel's back!
A very strong start to what looks like quite an interesting story. I enjoyed seeing things from Hermione's point of view (and I loved the lemonade analogy!). I agree with her; this is going to be an interesting year, and I can't wait to see the rest of it.
Welcome back, Michael! You've been missed!
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