Interesting start . . . very curious as to what was hidden in the Department of Mysteries -- obviously it had to do with Harry , based on the picture found on the guy who stole the decoy. I also find you assumption about potions not detected intriguing. Perhaps the Ministry does only track wand magic, I suspect that they are able to track any magic done. And from the incident with Dobby in Book 2, it doesn't have to be done with a wand or even by the person themselves, only suspicious magic done on the premises (or vicinity from Book 5). You are also wrong about whatever plot Dursleys had to keep Harry out of school (the actions of the Dursleys indicate that a visit to Aunt Marge is not really on the agenda; at least not in the way they plan, and while Dudley's statement maybe an empty threat, it more likely reveals their actual plans); you seem to have forgot the ending of Book 5, where the order gave a very stern warning to Dursleys to leave Harry alone and backed it up with the need to hear from Harry that he's ok at least every three days (even Hermione's insistence that Harry right letters regularly is based on a different premise). Good start, still; I'm interested in how this develops.
Regarding your comments on the use of horn/ hooter: from a brit picking POV I wouldn't see anything wrong in using horn. Hooter is more likely to be used as slang for nose.
Billie Bowtrunckle Tuesday 11th April 2006 16:58
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It's good to know that no matter if you subscribe to American or British english that the meaning of that sentence will not be lost! Thanks for setting the record straight as I'm hopelessly non-British (but I do like tea in the afternoon and sometimes eat bread without the crust...lol).
> > > Harry’s eyes closed and he fell silent. His labored breaths were the only indication of his struggle.
Poppy continued to work diligently and Molly remained at his side, her hand clasped tightly over his trembling fingers. She held him until it was over.> > > > > >
Wow, this was one of the best and most compelling stories I have found to read in a long time.
I read all eight chapters and I loved it all...I cried and I felt every angst riddled emotion you threw at me...thank you for sharing this story!
I hope you plan to update again soon.
Thanks again!
Sid
Billie Bowtrunckle Tuesday 11th April 2006 16:22
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Reviews like this are really rewarding. Thank you very much. Hopefully the rest will not disappoint.
Great start, BD! I look forward to seeing more and finding out what happens. I can't believe you left such a cliffy in the first chapter. Please update soon.
Billie Bowtrunckle Wednesday 1st March 2006 23:18
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Ninc! Good to see you at a different venue. Thanks for dropping me a very nice "hello". Unfortunately, cliffies are my specialty. *wags eyebrows and grins*
This story had me hooked right from the moment I read the first paragraph. I love your descriptive passages and turn of phrase. Am loooking forward to reading the rest of it here at PS.
Allie
Billie Bowtrunckle Wednesday 1st March 2006 23:15
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Thanks Allie! Such kind and encouraging words, but I guess that's part of your job, eh? *wink* I'm looking forward to posting at PS as well. Cheers!
Oh, I'm so happy to see this wonderful story posted here! I find it much easier to follow in this site. I hope you'll be able to catch up quicly so I can enable my author alert.
To be honest, I'd completely forgotten about he car crash, lol. I remebered as soon as I saw it, but I'd blanked it up This will be a good refresher for me.
Billie Bowtrunckle Wednesday 1st March 2006 23:13
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Hi Melindaleo! Thanks for stopping by to say hello. I'm hoping to have this story updated here sooner than later so I can update on both site as the same time. Passing through this story again is a good refresher for me as well. lol.
, based on the picture found on the guy who stole the decoy. I also find you assumption about potions not detected intriguing. Perhaps the Ministry does only track wand magic, I suspect that they are able to track any magic done. And from the incident with Dobby in Book 2, it doesn't have to be done with a wand or even by the person themselves, only suspicious magic done on the premises (or vicinity from Book 5). You are also wrong about whatever plot Dursleys had to keep Harry out of school (the actions of the Dursleys indicate that a visit to Aunt Marge is not really on the agenda; at least not in the way they plan, and while Dudley's statement maybe an empty threat, it more likely reveals their actual plans); you seem to have forgot the ending of Book 5, where the order gave a very stern warning to Dursleys to leave Harry alone and backed it up with the need to hear from Harry that he's ok at least every three days (even Hermione's 
insistence that Harry right letters regularly is based on a different premise). Good start, still; I'm interested in how this develops.
*runs off to read next chaper*
I'm glad you liked chapter 1. Yay. 
