People do the stupidest things in times of stress. Ginny and Harry are meant for each other. Voldemort is the biggest flea in the soup, ever.
Thanks for writing. I look forward to what happens when Ginny goes in to see Harry. p
That was a gut-wrenching chapter. I love Ginny forever but that was a bad choice. I hate seeing these two hurting. Nice twist haveing those three teach DADA, i like it. Nice work with the characters so far.
You are definitely on my email update list now. I hope you write more soon.
I'm thinking this in comparison to many authors. For example, the scene in which Ginny gives Harry her ultimatum...As soon as I saw that coming, I was afraid of another cheesy exchange of professions of love and whatnot.
Instead, I was pleasantly surprised with dialogue that was very believable, and didnt make me feel like my teeth were rotting uncontrollably. Everyone likes fluff, I just happen to not like it particularly when it makes one cringe.
You carried the tenor you built up in the first chapter over to this chapter very well and transitioned nicely into Ginny's reflections. The dialog and scene from the wedding conveyed great emotion to various degrees. Describing facial expressions and body language really helps in trying to imagine yourself in a similar situation; you provided that here. The conflict withing Ginny is great and I am looking forward to what you have in store.
I'm confused...Harry, Ron and Hermione were teaching at Hogwarts while in their 7th year? That doesn't sound like it makes much sense but I like the angst and I like the steadfastness on Harry's part. Keep it up!
valeriean Wednesday 19th April 2006 00:19
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Uh...yeah. It all falls into the category sprung from my imagination. I wanted to build Harry up as a great teacher, but he still needs the help of his friends.
Plus, the level up in status means they can go in and out of Hogwarts as they please to search for the you-know-whats.
Well, that's extremely difficult. The idea is intriguing, of course, but you'll need to explain very carefully why Ginny was so very touched by Harry the one moment and presents him with an ultimatum the next second, PLUS blaming him for the result afterwards. If you don't, she'll come across as a spoilt little girl, because she obviously didn't listen to what he was saying. She could have argued, but she only made things worse by giving him the choice between two extremes. Not a good strategy, if you deal with someone as desperate as Harry, and not one I would have expected from the Ginny we know from the books.
"[...]damning the confining dress robes to purgatory."
Purgatory is not a place/condition of damnation in it's original (Catholic) context - it is, in fact, something yearned for. If you were trying to spice up the tired "damned to hell" cliche with fresh diction, valiant effort, but it's jarring to anybody with more than a passing familiarity with the concept. So, unless you were intentionally expressing Ginny's own somewhat malformed understanding of Christian concepts (and I'm not entirely sure what you would be intending to accomplish in so doing), stick with the cliches you know.
Besides that, I haven't any comments on the story thus far. Nothing much has happened yet except for a lot of angsting that could either lead to a satisfying read or something that just breaks the suspension of disbelief in regards to characterization. Be careful how you write Ginny - we know she's capable of spite and malice, but don't overplay this aspect of her personality just for the sake of driving the conflict/sexual tension between the two characters. There's enough potential with this often-used-but-rarely-realized story archetype as it is without resorting to cheap manipulation of characterization - which I'm not suggesting you have yet done, but am only warning against.
Also - I'm not sure I buy the idea of Harry "using up" his love like so. I'll stick around to see what comes of it, but something just feels a bit... off.
Thank you for writing this story,
valeriean Wednesday 19th April 2006 00:20
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Thank you for putting that 'purgatory' detail into consideration.