I decided to read this based on how much I like your short story - and the fact that you have updated recently. I was not sure it would capture my attention based on the main characters, but so far I am quite interested.
Ooh, very intriguing so far! I love the wealth of the history you have painted. Amazing. I've never read anything of the like before. Maybe I should read historical fictions more often...Nah, I'll just stick with yours. I'm going to read the rest, obviously, but I just wanted to get in my review, as I will probably be too engrossed to bother to leave one. I will on the last chapter, though, I promise! Wonderful story.
I don't know what will happen when I submit this if I haven't registered ... this is Jo anyway.
I ca't believe it's taken me so long to get round to this. I love this opening chapter, as you know, the wonderfully evocative descriptions and the snarky dialogue particularly. This sentence made me smile:
to talk of nothing, and to pretend to be absolutely fascinated by it. She thought it would be a thoroughly wretched evening.
I like Lucrezia a lot. The little character details are wonderful - the contrast between the two friends and their attitudes and their closeness and ease with each other despite it.
Lucrezia certainly does seem to have bold and unconventional ideas - I hope this doesn't lead her into making any rash decisions about her future! *gnaws*
Mullvaney Thursday 6th July 2006 14:25
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I don't know what will happen when I submit this if I haven't registered ... this is Jo anyway.
I ca't believe it's taken me so long to get round to this. I love this opening chapter, as you know, the wonderfully evocative descriptions and the snarky dialogue particularly. This sentence made me smile:
to talk of nothing, and to pretend to be absolutely fascinated by it. She thought it would be a thoroughly wretched evening.
I like Lucrezia a lot. The little character details are wonderful - the contrast between the two friends and their attitudes and their closeness and ease with each other despite it.
Lucrezia certainly does seem to have bold and unconventional ideas - I hope this doesn't lead her into making any rash decisions about her future! *gnaws*
Thank you, Jo! I like Lucrezia, too She's pretty clueless about the whole romance thing, though. She and Artemisa will have to stick together.
Aww, this is great. I love how you've fleshed out the ball scene, and all the lovely juicy gossip . And we seem to get more characterisation of Lucrezia's parents too, which I really liked. I notice you use bird related imagery a lot - reminds me of the feast scene in chapter three - is this deliberate - 'cos I think it's quite effective, it somehow creates a faint air of nastiness, in humanity - there's something quite frightening and inhuman about birds, as well as sweet voiced and decorative - a bit like all these young debutantes, a set of birds in gilded cages, but with beaks and claws enough no doubt....
And Romulus Black *rubs hands* whatever will happen next?
Mullvaney Thursday 6th July 2006 14:03
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Aww, this is great. I love how you've fleshed out the ball scene, and all the lovely juicy gossip . And we seem to get more characterisation of Lucrezia's parents too, which I really liked. I notice you use bird related imagery a lot - reminds me of the feast scene in chapter three - is this deliberate - 'cos I think it's quite effective, it somehow creates a faint air of nastiness, in humanity - there's something quite frightening and inhuman about birds, as well as sweet voiced and decorative - a bit like all these young debutantes, a set of birds in gilded cages, but with beaks and claws enough no doubt....
And Romulus Black *rubs hands* whatever will happen next?
Thank you! The bird thing is quite unconcious, I love birds, I feed them outside my kitchen window, and I can always be found standing at the sink and watching them. In my headLucrezia's parents look sort of like my grandparents. Birds in Gilded cages. . . that's excellent!
Ooh, this is quite intriguing. Beautiful descriptions and you've evoked the era brilliantly. I'm quite keen to see what happens from here and how all these various wizarding families will interact. I love all the family cameos and the gossip and most of all Lucrezia's opinions on the whole thing. I'm feeling a bit uneasy though, because I'm not sure if I should like these people or not - given what we know of their families in the generations to come.
Mullvaney Wednesday 7th June 2006 04:08
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Thianks! You may *not* like some of them by the end of the story; evil people don't consider themselves evil, and I don't think the character of the old Wizarding families has changed much since the time of this story
I'm going to read the rest, obviously, but I just wanted to get in my review, as I will probably be too engrossed to bother to leave one. 
I will on the last chapter, though, I promise! Wonderful story. 
She's pretty clueless about the whole romance thing, though. She and Artemisa will have to stick together.
. And we seem to get more characterisation of Lucrezia's parents too, which I really liked. I notice you use bird related imagery a lot - reminds me of the feast scene in chapter three - is this deliberate - 'cos I think it's quite effective, it somehow creates a faint air of nastiness, in humanity - there's something quite frightening and inhuman about birds, as well as sweet voiced and decorative - a bit like all these young debutantes, a set of birds in gilded cages, but with beaks and claws enough no doubt....