Wow, there were certainly some unexpeced turns in that story!
I was wonderin, why is it that there is always an underscore (_) before the word "expression"?
just wondering.
That was unexpected and very good of Petunia to tell Harry about the real relationship she had with Lily. I liked her advice about Ginny too. Harry really needs to make up with Ginny and not leave her behind. I hope he will choose to do that. Thanks for writing. I look forward to more of this story. Thanks for writing. p
CJS Sunday 6th May 2007 12:26
1: Petunia’s Secret (Author Response)
I'm afraid you may be disappointed with respect to Ginny. I'm very much into the school of thought that Ginny is a dangerous distraction that Harry doesn't need.
Nice chapter. However, I felt that the part about Petunia's love for Lily was a bit unbelievable, because there are just too many things against that in canon. If she really loved Lily, why would she react with such an outburst in the hut on the sea in PS? Her dialogue with Harry seemed a bit forced, too. Basically, Petunia acted very OOC. Also, the letter from the Department of Magical Transportation is a little overdone. While it is believable and well-written, I've seen it in many seventh year fics. If you wanted your fic to stand out more, you could have cancelled that element. I accept, though, that such a move would have unnecessarily complicated the plot. The rest of the chapter, inclusive of grammar, was perfect.
By the way, don't you think Harry would have shown Ron and Hermione his license, if he had received one? You should also have mentioned in the letter that the license was enclosed. Of course, this is only if you think the license is something tangible, like a piece of parchment.
CJS Sunday 6th May 2007 12:28
1: Petunia’s Secret (Author Response)
Well, given that this was my very first foray into fanfiction (in fact into any sort of writing come to that), it was inevitable I was going to miss some details. Hopefuly that'll improve as I go along. If not, keep the advice coming.
I want to say that you have a very well-crafted summary. It was one of the first that had me actually excited to read a story!
Ok, first chapter. Really interesting take on Petunia and I think you pulled it off pretty well. Kind of sort of explained why she had treated him so badly. It is almost surreal to have Petunia telling Harry he should stay with Ginny!
That was a good first chapter. I'm curious though to find out if you explain why Ron and Hermione weren't at Privet Drive with Harry. I'm also intrigued by Petunia's turn-about. I'm assuming that will come into play later in the story. I'm looking forward to reading more.
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