What an awesome prologue! You've really drawn me in, can't wait to read the rest of the story! I've already added you to my author update list ... brilliant!
What an intense chapter! I hope eveyone is allright. Ron's goodbye sounded kind of final which makes me cringe. Nicely written chapter. I'm looking forward to reading more.
I really enjoyed this chapter. You write action incredibly well. Quotes I loved:
the mouth stretched open beyond the limits of the jaw
Just like now, stuck, imprisoned by a body that wouldn’t work, helpless, helpless, helpless...
His lungs felt like fire.
Ah, what happens next? Update soon, I'm sure this is going to continue to be a great story.
Thanks again for the awesome writing.
hwimsey
Kalarien Thursday 22nd June 2006 16:20
Prologue (Author Response)
I would be remiss if I didn't give musings, my beta, credit for that last one--she added it to help a last minute change to be a little more believable. But I will take credit for the others! Thanks!