Great beginning, really draws you in. Picked it up and couldn't wait for more! So glad I found it again.
Sorry I don't have great insightful writing reviews, I get too caught up in the story to notice any literary mistakes. If it reads great without distracting me... then I think it's perfect!
Sherellyn
girlyswot Saturday 20th October 2007 06:20
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I agree - if you don't get distracted by the writing, then it's doing its job. Thanks so much for all your reviews - it's such an encouragement.
I started this one a long time ago, and was real pleased to see you posting on it again so I'll hold off till the end for the review. Thanks so much for finishing It!!.
girlyswot Friday 28th September 2007 23:34
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Wow - thanks for sticking with it. I hope you like the end...
I started reading this! I love Ben and Zoe and I'm looking forward to finding out how things go with them. I really enjoyed the interaction between Fred and George as well. One nitpick - to me, Fred will never be 'tall' I'm afraid, so that threw me a little. But apart from that, a really enjoyable chapter.
girlyswot Sunday 17th June 2007 02:50
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*waves at Dogstar*
Thanks for taking the time to come and read and to let me know what you're enjoying.
Very impressive. I have a strong sense of the characters' internal lives and their interrelationships, and I care about them already. I care especially about Ben and Zoe, as you intended me to, but I'm worried about Bert too. Your narrative is economical and always adds to the feeling you're trying to create. I'm getting a bit dizzy from all the sequential POVs, and the fact that you borrowed the pairings and the offspring from Roger & Lisa is playing weird games with my head. But I'm amazed that you were able to establish this so well in so few words. Splendid.
I can't promise to review every single chapter, but I will read all of them.
~Ken
girlyswot Friday 2nd February 2007 04:52
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Thanks for such a thoughtful review, Ken. I'm so glad you like my characters. I'm hopeless at trying to stick with one POV - I'm in utter awe of writers who can do it for whole books when I struggle even for a paragraph!
You wright the best summerys of eney auther I've read in the fanfiction world,I would never have started this story with out it .I'm very glad I did Thank's.
girlyswot Friday 6th October 2006 17:02
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Thanks - I tried to make the summary as intriguing as I could. I'm glad you like the story.
