Very enjoyable. I often get bored silly reading Quidditch matches but this chapter kept me interested. I do worry about Oliver's head now, though! I hope he'll be all right. Loved his little gentlemanly display in the pub.
My first impression wasn't wrong: this is a very enjoyable story! I really like Oliver's relationship with his uncle, and I'm curious about the other team members, how Oliver'll get along with them. Glad he's found a friend already.
But what is that about the coach's daughter? Maybe some ...?
moonette Sunday 1st October 2006 19:56
2: First Impressions (Author Response)
Hi Evelyn,
So...the coach's daughter, huh? Should I give anything away? All right, you give me no choice. Yes. There is a bit of fluff ahead for Oliver. But remember, most of this is from Oliver's POV. (And that's all I'm going to say about that!)
I meant to tell you that I *still* giggle when I read the part where Oliver first gets to Puddlemere Headquarters. I can just see him trying to impress the receptionist--and his reaction when he sees that she's anything but impressed. It reminds me of some of the college guys I see around here.
I like your Oliver more and more each time I read about him. I like that you haven't written him as perfect. He's got flaws -- he's obviously got some issues to deal with (like with his father), and there's still a bit of immature boy in him (as evidenced by the scene I mentioned above), for example--but his flaws make him human. This all makes him a much more interesting character.
Julie
moonette Thursday 28th September 2006 22:42
2: First Impressions (Author Response)
Aggiebell - my beta! After all your hard work, you still left me a review! Thanks so much. Poor Oliver. He does have a bit of growing up to do, but he means well. I so appreciate your help!
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