hey so far im enjoying what u've written keep it up! I only had one problem in this chapter, i thought that hermione's idea to go to the Blacks house to search for info on RAB was a bit of an easy way to get them there.I also don't think it would just come to her that RAB was apart of the Black family.I just think it would be better if they ended up there unecpectedly and stumbled on to the fact that RAB was in fact Sirius's brother..Im sorry i totally intend this as constructive criticism and hope u take it as such
Leave it to Dudley to get drunk and think he is tough! I'm glad Hermione was able to chase him and his cronies off. I'm glad Tonks is close and giving them some encouragement. Now they are getting set up for their trip. I hope it all goes well. Thanks for writing. p
YelloWitchGrl Thursday 26th April 2007 10:16
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you're welcome and I am glad you enjoyed it. I can easily see Dudley turning to things he shouldn't... but we'll see in a few months.
'eyed them wearily' -- was the woman tired, or do you mean 'warily'?
Nice scene with Dudley. Was that comment just obnoxious or did it imply she was a single mom because she'd played prostitute?
Way to go Hermione
YelloWitchGrl Wednesday 31st January 2007 10:13
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I had two beta's catch that and I actually did mean wearily, as in tired. She's tired of everything plus much more that I didn't go into but yeah, that's a bit funny anyway.
Dudley's talking out his bum, he doesn't know a thing. She's just a typical teenage mom who made a mistake and is making up for it.
Ohhhh, another WIP for me to follow! lol, I'm excited for the next chapter to come out.
YelloWitchGrl Wednesday 31st January 2007 10:05
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Although there are only two chapters here I've actually written 28 so far out of 42, so technically it's almost done. I'm glad you're enjoying it and another chapter should be out this week. :-)
Great story! I'm really looking forward to the rest because there aren't a lot of stories that really go into detail about the three of them doing the hunting. I can really feel Harry getting energetic about starting.
The part with Hermione showing her Gryffindor qualities was fun. We see so much more of Harry's bravery than anyone else that it's fun reading about Ron or Hermione standing up and fighting.
I hope Ginny returns in this story because Harry just won't be the same without her. I'll understand if you don't have time, though Looking forward to the next chapter!
YelloWitchGrl Wednesday 31st January 2007 09:59
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Well good, I hope you enjoy the rest. I think it's fun to have the other characters show themselves more, so I put that in quite a bit. It isn't just Harry's story, afterall. Ginny will be back eventually. It's a rather safe bet as the site requires it but it's not for a loooooong time. So sit tight, it will be a bumpy ride ;-)
Well, that was quick! I leave a review, and a few hours later, here it is! Now I'm even more interested... I love that one by Ron, about all the girls in his life being stronger. And that poor girl - will she appear later?
Anyways, excellent chapter 2.
YelloWitchGrl Monday 29th January 2007 12:26
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Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it. No, the girl won't reappear... it took me a minute to remember who you were talking about.
I only had one problem in this chapter, i thought that hermione's idea to go to the Blacks house to search for info on RAB was a bit of an easy way to get them there.I also don't think it would just come to her that RAB was apart of the Black family.I just think it would be better if they ended up there unecpectedly and stumbled on to the fact that RAB was in fact Sirius's brother..Im sorry i totally intend this as constructive criticism and hope u take it as such
