Whohoo... if I thought the prologue was good, what should I say
now? This is awsome. Interesting entry of the Helmet - and
it's carrier. Was the carrier the maker, or the last user?
I like the way he treated the Dursleys. Something needed to be
done, but he didn't sink to their level.
Wonderful! Absolutely love it. And I think I'll have to go
to bed late today... One more chapter is indeed in order.
You know? I've dreamed up thousands of apt reprisals at the Dursleys over the years, read quite a few, bu this was one of the best. Making them own up to what they've done, I like it. I don't like fanfics that make the Dursleys into nice people - they'll always be evil in my eyes. Kudos to you for having Harry rise over that and not descend to their level.
I'm also impressed with how Harry got the helm. No extra, extemporaneous explanation, just his acceptance of something new. Maturity, that's what he's finally got.
unique, intriguing chapter. I feel you
capture Harry’s ‘voice quite nicely. The thoughts going through his head sound all too realistic of the young
man he is becoming. Reflecting on his
birthday, and what that will mean in the war to come against Voldemort. Harry seems resigned to his fate here. I can almost picture this scene in cannon.
makes the next transition all the more effective. The ‘helm’ and I guess the spiritual embodiment of the past
creators or wearers arrive. Harry takes
this remarkably well. The calm you have
him display is interesting. I like that
Harry trusts his instincts about it not being dark magic, but is still
wary. This went a long way towards
making the scene believable. I wish we
could have heard the silent exchange though.
another scene shift- this time we get to see both Dudley’s disgusting pack and
Harry’s new alter ego in action. Dudley
deserves every last moment of pain and more. I appreciated that Harry did not strike out in revenge, (well, maybe a
little) but to protect an innocent woman. He wouldn’t be human if he didn’t feel some satisfaction for the
punishment he gave Dudley. I love that
the woman’s fear abates when Harry talks to her. It’s a good sign that the helm won’t make Harry into just a
warrior. I love gentle, soothing
Harry, and it’s not something we get in the HP books. And we get a name- Hunter. Interesting.
Harry is a new man. He even dresses
better. Grin. The Dursleys now know
just how awful their son is, and the neighbors are about to find out as
well. Is it terrible that I took a kind
of dark fun from this scene? Harry
manages to make them both pass out- and not from magic! I would have gone the next step, or at least
tried a few of the twins’ products.
a great ending to this installment- Harry really is free. Now onto his new life.
is a wonderful story and you’re holding my attention. Thank you for taking the time to write and share with the rest of
us. Your grammar and spelling are both
very solid (as if I’m one to talk.) And
interesting chapter title- referring to Harry’s birthday? I can’t wait to read the next section.
Thanks to your betas if you have them, ellie
OK, I'm going to read this whole fic tonight, but I HAD to mention how wonderful this scene was. Perfect. Canon, even; I can see this being the first chapter or so of book 7. Absolutely marvellous, Tarkas.
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