This is a great opening chapter. I do love Lily and James stories so to have them and Harry and Ginny in a story together is brilliant! Onto the next chapter!
This is really good. I like the glimpses we get of Lily and James, and how this reassured Ginny about her own impending motherhood. I thought her concerns and feelings were realistic and I especially enjoyed her conversation with Molly. Can't wait to read more.
Wow! So Ginny is having their first baby and is very curious about Lily. That stands to reason. I think a scrapbook about Lily is an excellent idea. Something for Ginny, Harry and their new baby. Thanks for writing. I look forward to more of this story. p
Just reading this I realized we do not know to much about Lily. I am welling to take the leap and keep reading what your take is on her is. Any Dursley's coming into the picture....
Lady Chi Friday 23rd March 2007 11:31
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Just reading this I realized we do not know to much about Lily. I am welling to take the leap and keep reading what your take is on her is. Any Dursley's coming into the picture....
No, we don't know much about Lily, a fact that always sort of lingered in the back of my mind, but I'm glad you're willing ot see what I think! The presence or lack thereof of the Dursleys I'll keep to myself so you can read and find out!
This is a nice start to your story. You tie narrative and action together well. I have problems in guessing what will occur after "The White Tomb", so extrapolating back to events just prior to "The Boy Who Lived" is more rewarding for me. The touch of Harry unknowingly repeating some of his father's last words was very well done. If the effect you wanted was to chiil the readers blood as much as Ginny's, then you succeded.
Looking forward to chapter 2.
Lady Chi Friday 23rd March 2007 11:34
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This is a nice start to your story. You tie narrative and action together well. I have problems in guessing what will occur after "The White Tomb", so extrapolating back to events just prior to "The Boy Who Lived" is more rewarding for me. The touch of Harry unknowingly repeating some of his father's last words was very well done. If the effect you wanted was to chiil the readers blood as much as Ginny's, then you succeded.
Looking forward to chapter 2.
Thank you very much for your comments! I know what you mean about finding stories concerning the "before" much more interesting than ones who are concerned with "after".
You're very right about Harry's repeating his father's words. I very much wanted the audience to understand that something important is going on... and the chills were a bonus.
Thank you for your review! Hope to see you next chapter!
Wow, this is great! I haven't read a story like this before. Lily Potter from Ginny's point of view...Can't wait for the rest of this. I can already tell that I'm going to ¢¾ and relish each chapter of this!
Lady Chi Friday 23rd March 2007 11:35
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Wow, this is great! I haven't read a story like this before. Lily Potter from Ginny's point of view...Can't wait for the rest of this. I can already tell that I'm going to ¢¾ and relish each chapter of this!
Thanks! I tried to be original with the storyline and did a lot of asking around to see if anyone had done anything like this. I'm grateful for your review and hope you'll keep reading!
Excellent; beautiful. I confess I've not had much exposure to behavoirs of pregnant women (well, as an adult, anyway), but your descriptions seem quite believable to me. Very well-written.
Lady Chi Friday 23rd March 2007 11:38
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Excellent; beautiful. I confess I've not had much exposure to behavoirs of pregnant women (well, as an adult, anyway), but your descriptions seem quite believable to me. Very well-written.
Thank you so much! I did a lot of research into pregnancy (easy because I'm taking a class on it at the collegiate level) and I've spent a great deal of time around pregnant women. I'm glad you enjoyed that portion of the story as I put a lot of thought into it! Thanks for your review.
Quite nice. Your description of how an eight month pregnant woman feels ring true. With Molly as her Mum, forty pounds is expected weight gain. I feel like I gain weight just reading about her cooking.
Lady Chi Friday 23rd March 2007 11:39
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Quite nice. Your description of how an eight month pregnant woman feels ring true. With Molly as her Mum, forty pounds is expected weight gain. I feel like I gain weight just reading about her cooking.
LOL! Don't you just? Thank you for your review! It was exciting to hear from you.
