Excellent story so far. I looked at the house and floorplan, and think it's a beautiful place to live. Almost too good for the Dursley's unless they do some serious changing while they're in hiding.
Keep writing, you're quite good at it, and thank you for sharing your work.
I'm very much enjoying this so far! I look forward to more. My only (small) quibble is that Dudley's language is a little cutesy when talking about his parents. Not that that will stop me from reading and enjoying! Thanks for posting so regularly, dreadful to have to wait a long time between chapters!!
Bronte Tuesday 20th May 2008 04:00
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Oh and we've (my beta and me) are planning every other day posting. I hate having to wait ages between chapters too, so we waited till I had written so much that there would be no big delays for your reading pleasure
Going quite well, although I have to agree with a reviewer from the previous chapter that Dudley wouldn't speak like a little kid when he's 17 years old. Also, you're doing a lot more telling rather than showing in your writing...let us feel what's going on by using more dialogue and description instead of reporting things...
I look forward to more!
This was a great start to a new story (sorry read chap\'s one and two at once and am just reviewing at one time)! I'm going to add it to my favorites and see where it's going. Can't wait for more!
Bronte Sunday 18th May 2008 09:18
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Thanks! There'll be more in a couple of days
This was a great start to a new story (sorry read chap\'s one and two at once and am just reviewing at one time)! I'm going to add it to my favorites and see where it's going. Can't wait for more!
Excellent so far! Dudley's vague glimmerings of Clue are showing up rather well against his mostly-clueless (and very self-centered) background. :-} Vernon & Petunia's (differing) reactions (both from each other & over time) are making sense to me, as well. Well done.
Bronte Sunday 18th May 2008 07:41
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I love reveiws like yours, Thanks!
For all Petunia bans magic and talk of it, what we know from Snape in DH shows she's not scared of magic itself, but disapproving of abnormality.
Vernon on the other hand is anti-magic. Probably got pranked by James (and Sirius) and had a bad introduction.
Excellent so far! Dudley's vague glimmerings of Clue are showing up rather well against his mostly-clueless (and very self-centered) background. :-} Vernon & Petunia's (differing) reactions (both from each other & over time) are making sense to me, as well. Well done.
Excellent portrayal of how blind, ignorant and arrogant the Dursleys are. They have not yet figured out that they are being treated far better than the way they have treated Harry.
Excellent portrayal of how blind, ignorant and arrogant the Dursleys are. They have not yet figured out that they are being treated far better than the way they have treated Harry.
Ok. First off, I know I sounded harsh in my last review. Sorry about that. Now that I kinda understand where this is coming from, it's a bit easier. I think I'm going to like this story. Keep the updates coming. Unforgivables for not updating are rather painful.
You know that, right?
Bronte Sunday 18th May 2008 01:24
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PLease hold of on the Unforgivables. I promise you we have a plan in place. This will be 10 chapter plus an epilogue, 8 chapters are beta-ed and ready to go. The final two are wiht my pre-beta. We are looking at an every other day posting. I hope that will keep me safe from torture.
Thanks for the review
Ok. First off, I know I sounded harsh in my last review. Sorry about that. Now that I kinda understand where this is coming from, it's a bit easier. I think I'm going to like this story. Keep the updates coming. Unforgivables for not updating are rather painful.
You know that, right?
