I tell you what, this s developing into a really great story, ok this is only the second chapter but the writing is mature, filled with the right level of emotion, angst & humour!! Keep it up!
Your doing good, but could you make your chapter longer. I need more to read
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Asthore Friday 11th July 2008 19:59
2: The Aftermath of the War (Author Response)
Lol, sorry, except for one or two chapters most of them are this length. Glad that it makes you want to have more to read, though. I'll see what I can do.
I love the title and the quote; they are specifically appropriate to Harry's world and individual plight. I love how Ginny is gluing herself to Harry by not letting him out of her sight. I'm also enjoying the fact that Harry is jumpy right now and could be for a while - people who have been through a war-like situation like Harry has often suffer from such nervous behaviourisms - this is very accurate. More than once I have read about Harry being back to normal as soon as he wakes up, and while I sure he's relieved, there have to be some repercussions. I'm enjoying the angst level of this so far - especially Harry's and George's reactions. Very well done. Can't wait for the next update!
Asthore Thursday 10th July 2008 18:55
2: The Aftermath of the War (Author Response)
I'm glad you enjoy the title and quote. When I wrote my first draft of the story, I left the chapters untitled at first and then went back to find quotes or other things that fit with the chapters for titles. As for Harry and Ginny, I figured Ginny was going to be very hesitant to leave Harry's side after being apart from him for a year and after a year of constant dueling, running, and fear Harry would continue to be jumpy as if he's still expecting someone to hurt him. Thanks for your thoughtful review; I like it when people give me something specific that they liked or that I should work on, instead of "Great job" or some other vague comment.
You're off to a good start. Poor Harry's got some PTSD to work through, but I think that seems very reasonable. I liked the unified front he and Ginny instictively used against Bill. I also think having others who need to be cared for is the best way to help Molly get through the loss of Fred.
Asthore Thursday 10th July 2008 18:50
2: The Aftermath of the War (Author Response)
Well, Molly seems like the kind of person who'll try to take care of everyone else before she takes care of herself. Someone is going to get through to her, though. Thanks for your review.
I'm glad you like the quotes. I submitted the next two chapters a couple days ago. They should be up soon.
