Great opening chapter! I just flew through TTM this past week, sorry for not reviewing there but I just figured it sould slow me down from getting to the current story. I kept seeing that this was being updated through following PS on facebook, and vaguely remembered having started TTM when it first came out. I was one of the many who was instantly turned off by Scott, expecting a Deus ex Mary Sue. Boy, was I wrong! Glad I've now seen the error of my ways, and looking forward to reading some well written long term fiction. That is entirely too hard to come by in the HPverse these days!!
Caleb Nova Wednesday 13th February 2013 12:41
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Great opening chapter! I just flew through TTM this past week, sorry for not reviewing there but I just figured it sould slow me down from getting to the current story.
That is true. Glad you enjoyed TTM.
I kept seeing that this was being updated through following PS on facebook, and vaguely remembered having started TTM when it first came out. I was one of the many who was instantly turned off by Scott, expecting a Deus ex Mary Sue. Boy, was I wrong!
I'm surprised you gave it a second chance (though obviously pleased that you did). I think the majority are ready enough to stay with their first assumptions.
Glad I've now seen the error of my ways, and looking forward to reading some well written long term fiction. That is entirely too hard to come by in the HPverse these days!!
Re-read this and am reminded what a wonderful chapter this is: the letters are a brilliant change of pace...and the whole thing provides great character development.
Caleb Nova Sunday 8th January 2012 04:37
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I like the letters alright. I don't think I'll be repeating the form at any point, but it works well enough as an opener.
I'm glad you didn't use the plot device of Harry asking Scott for relationship advice. That would sort of be like asking the Borgias for advice on chastity.
Caleb Nova Thursday 15th September 2011 02:45
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While that analogy is more than a little exaggerated, since I think Scott might have some useful advice in that category (assuming Harry could get it out of him), there is some truth to it.
The thing is, you're giving me credit for nonexistent foresight. That scenario never occurred to me at all. I don't think Harry would ever ask Scott for relationship advice, not after all the crap Scott gave him about Ginny, and other things, for that matter. I feel like that would be out of character.
I like the way you set up this separate story as a kind of lynch key off from the The Terrifying Momentum. The series of letters were clever and really told a lot about the POV of a lot of the characters, and the point in place of where they are.
Caleb Nova Thursday 15th September 2011 02:49
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I like the way you set up this separate story as a kind of lynch key off from the The Terrifying Momentum.
You have me at a loss with that expression, I don't think I've ever heard 'lynch key' before. Lynchpin, sure, but that wouldn't make sense in context. Either I'm ignorant, or you've invented a new expression to confound me, you.
The series of letters were clever and really told a lot about the POV of a lot of the characters, and the point in place of where they are.
A very early version of the chapter had the letters with grammar and spelling mistakes. But I think anytime that's done and it's not in dialogue, people will just assume I f'ed up.
Caleb I'm so glad you're writing this story!!! Thank you! I generally don't like prologues, but I like how you did this with the letters and phone calls. Looking forward to more!
Caleb Nova Thursday 15th September 2011 02:50
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What do you have against prologues? Has some other author set you against them?
Good to see this new story! We're certainly all spread out now but look forward to seeing what you do when they're all together. And how much Scott may introduce muggle weaponry into the mix...as part of living in both worlds.
Actually, continuing to take out Death Eaters from time to time (as Scott has been doing) might be a good distraction to keep Voldemort from wondering what they're really up to as opposed to totally disappearing from the wizarding world and being these mysteries that no one hears anything about for a long time.
I miss the quirkiness and sarcastic points of view of your stories. It is refreshing to see that our beloved characters can be as dense as an early morning fog or as randy as your typical teenagers. Love the letters and the input from Scott and Lila.
Caleb Nova Thursday 15th September 2011 02:51
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I miss the quirkiness and sarcastic points of view of your stories.
Meaning that those things were absent from this chapter, or that you missed them during the break between stories?
It is refreshing to see that our beloved characters can be as dense as an early morning fog or as randy as your typical teenagers.
Oh yes, very much so.
Love the letters and the input from Scott and Lila.
I'm glad you liked the whole 'letters' thing, I wasn't sure that was going to work.
Good to see this new story! We're certainly all spread out now but look forward to seeing what you do when they're all together. And how much Scott may introduce muggle weaponry into the mix...as part of living in both worlds.
Actually, continuing to take out Death Eaters from time to time (as Scott has been doing) might be a good distraction to keep Voldemort from wondering what they're really up to as opposed to totally disappearing from the wizarding world and being these mysteries that no one hears anything about for a long time.
Anyway, thanks for the gift.
Caleb Nova Thursday 15th September 2011 02:54
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Good to see this new story! We're certainly all spread out now but look forward to seeing what you do when they're all together. And how much Scott may introduce muggle weaponry into the mix...as part of living in both worlds.
Scott doesn't live in either world, really. He's just familiar with them (and one much more than the other). His world is another place entirely.
Actually, continuing to take out Death Eaters from time to time (as Scott has been doing) might be a good distraction to keep Voldemort from wondering what they're really up to as opposed to totally disappearing from the wizarding world and being these mysteries that no one hears anything about for a long time.
Maybe. Constant attacks invite constant reprisal, and don't forget how outnumbered Harry and company are.
