Nicely written - the dialogue with James in the cupboard, particularly
when Ginny turns up, was funny. Although surely she wouldn't have
thought that Harry would shut Chloe up in the closet for anything other
than a joke - surely she would have played along...
Your description of Monster (" The vicious kitten mewed, and then fell
right on her face...", "she didn't look quite capable of shredding
tulips yet") is also nice and fluffily funny. And the idea of
Ginny bossing Harry around is very plausible, since Molly generally
bossed Arthur around.
I love your stories. I started reading them on Sugar Quill, found them on Fanfiction, and followed your bio here, hoping there would be another chapter up! I can't wait to read more... Really, you are a wonderful author, and I love your work. Keep up the good job!