Haha. The Hermione and the meatloaf thing. That was great. And yay!!!! Malfoy is going to Azkaban. But, i actually think that it would be pretty funny if Draco was mental...in a car crash sort of way. Hehe Very good chapter.
"A black cloak swirled ahead of her" - Ah, so that was Harry ; a bit confusing for a moment .
Who's that 'lone man' at the Leaky Cauldron? Are you saying they missed getting all the death eaters? Or is that Malfoy's 'dismissed' barrister Mowbrey?
Oh God, the suspense with regard to Draco is killing me! Just *execute* him, already!! He deserves it!!
(It's not going to be that easy, is it?)
Can't have a Harry Potter story without persecution from the media, I guess. Poor Ginny. Nice, pleasant aftermath though, cloud watching and all. Thanks for the chapter!
I hope you'll take this in the best possible way when I tell you that
I'm reminded of "After the End" as I read this. Your writing
style is incredibly creative and distinctive, but the level of
professionalism displayed in your writing skills is something I haven't
witnessed in many stories since I first read "After the End."
I'm very much enjoying your characterizations, particularly
Harry's. I can very much see him struggling in the post-war world
to figure out what his role is in life; who he is. And your
method of handling his relationship with Ginny during Hogwarts was
rather prophetic given what we know now of his post-HBP breakup with
her for "noble" purposes! Well done!
I'm eagerly awaiting more of this story!
GovCampbell Monday 3rd October 2005 19:33
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Wow. Just wow. "After the End" was the first fanfic I ever read, and I've never thought that my work would ever be compared favorable with such a well written work. I'm honored by your comparison.
Harry, at first, was a struggle for me to write. I'm not familiar with Harry's feelings. I relate much better to Ron, and I enjoy writing him. But Harry is a challange, and I'm pleased to think that my writing is actually better because I have to work harder to get him right.
I think this story was a reaction to the idea that Harry and Ginny would get together immeditely. HBP aside, after OotP, I thought that Ron would be the first to get his act together, and that Harry would need to finish what he needed to do before allowing himself to think about himself. And I figured this would take a couple of years. Events have outpaced me now, but I like to think of this as what might have been. I'm trying to give them a sense that things are trying to get back to normal, or as normal as they can be for someone with Harry's fame.
I also have a really spectacular muse, in the form of my fiancee, who feeds me brilliant ideas regularly.
This was very good. I can't believe that Draco is going to be easily executed. I enjoyed Harry's reaction to Ron's blustering and I like the continued progression of the courtship. Thanks for the update!
GovCampbell Monday 3rd October 2005 19:18
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Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it. We'll see about Draco...
Well done! I can certainly see how Harry would be upset at folks
causing Ginny distress. And I certainly don't see any reason for
Draco to cooperate; indeed, even if he had fingered anyone, I'm not
sure of any basis for believing him. (So on that basis, I guess
Penny was pretty desperate.)
Should be interesting to find out about that lone patron of the Leaky Cauldron....
GovCampbell Thursday 29th September 2005 16:16
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Desperation makes you do weird things. Penny's tortured logic was that if he was going to die, there's no point in not talking, but she underestimated his pride.
It also gave us a good look at Penny, a character who's in the backround a lot in this story, but didn't have much development. A lot of this stuff actually came from VinFan's ideas, so as I said in the Note, I've got to share the credit with her.
Ok, I'll stop. But really, you're going to tell us who the "lone man" is, right? Please? Anyway, great chapter! I loved how throughout the speech, you had different people's points of view.
Please update soon!
GovCampbell Thursday 29th September 2005 16:09
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Oh yes, eventually, the lone man will have an identity. Eventually...mwhahaha...
Glad you enjoyed the speech. It was actually surprisingly hard to write, trying to break it down, and weave those other threads through it.
Ooh, spooky ending! Shivers were going up MY spine then. Nice work.
Ah, the pizza. I loved that little bit. Meatloaf isn't very common in England, though, so I can't imagine how Mrs. Weasley got hold of the recipe. Oh, and back garden, not backyard.
I really enjoyed this one, especially Harry's "Disarm first, ask questions later" attitude. I foresee future accidents!
Sarah
GovCampbell Thursday 29th September 2005 16:07
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I think the back garden bit got fixed along the line, and is now correct. Thanks!
Well, I figured, if you assume Harry did any training at all with Mad-Eye, you have to figure the old man didn't spare any compassion for suspected enemies... hehe
Aaaaaahhhh! You just had to add a mystery man at the end, didn't
you? And with a sinister feeling, too. Ouch. Great
chapter, though. I love Harry and Ginny's relationship, and all
the other levels of the story just makes the whole fic more real.
Poor Penny, but I really don't know how she thought she'd be able to
get an answer from Draco, but there you go. Grief can make you
believe a lot of stuff you later dismiss totally.
I second Arthur's "..hope and prayer that peace is now truly upon us,"
but the last paragraph makes me wonder... Please update
soon? And tell you fiancee she's truly wonderfully wicked.
Thanks!
Berte
GovCampbell Thursday 29th September 2005 16:02
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Heh heh. The drama is back! The plot should pick up a little from here. More twists to come.
Penny's struggling with closure, and she's desperate. She wasn't being totally rational, but as you said, greif is like that.
; a bit confusing for a moment 
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