Prongs739 Monday 25th August 2008 17:23 | Consequences of the Heart |
By George, they are getting along quite well! Harry's crying really broke the ice between the two of them, as did Ginny's telling of how Sirius was kind and as much of the family as Harry is.
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ImmortalPhoenix Monday 17th April 2006 17:26 | Consequences of the Heart |
No comments other than I LOVED IT!!!
Kortnee |
pixiellie Saturday 13th November 2004 21:58 | Consequences of the Heart |
This is my favorite chapter to read so far. Interesting that Harry’s first thought in
the morning is for Ginny. Grin. I find
it hard to believe they wouldn’t have a little pity on Harry. A day of painting is hard work out in the
summer heat. He couldn’t have slept
in? (Our boy is getting no love…)
Even more interesting that he doesn’t want Ginny to be
dating Dean. Grin. I laughed at the
exchange over Ron’s level of gitness.
He’s always felt pretty typical boy to me.
Ginny seems much more aware of both her feelings and Harry’s
reactions in this chapter. I like
that. She seems pretty self aware to me
in the books, so that feels real.
I like the setting of the flowers, and it reminded me of
strawberry picking. I don’t know
why…(teasing grin.) A minor quibble,
but I always equate mums for later summer early fall, rather than June. This might be different in England, I don’t
know. (Pretty girly comment, huh?)
I laughed out loud at Ginny’s answer to Harry asking if he’s
about to be hexed. Grin. She didn’t say she didn’t want to,
just that she would never get away with it.. Hee.
You do a nice job of showing the love between Molly and
Ginny. Mother daughter bonding is hard
to write realistically, but I feel that you have done so.
One of the best scenes was, without a doubt your scene where
Ginny realizes that Harry is acting out of emotional pain rather than
physical. In just this short time, she
has learned to think of another person’s feelings. If, as she says it’s not all about Harry, (previous chapter) now
she realizes her feelings can’t always come first.
Harry hearing about the summer, finally was
bittersweet. I hate thinking of all the
stories he’ll never hear from Sirius himself.
But I’m glad he laughed at the idea of Ginny attacking Padfoot, and now
knows that his friends share his pain.
I like the easy friendship shown between Harry and Ginny
when she arrives to study, and typical Weasley kicking him while he’s trying to
avoid his cousin discovering her. After
all, she isn’t the twins’ sister for nothing.
(And you know a boy is falling for a girl when he’s
fascinated by the freckles on her shins for crying out loud! Hee.) Very cute that Harry is now glad to see he
can make her blush. What was even
better, is that she returns the favor!
What a difference in older Ginny from the little girl she was when she
first met him. Best lines (well maybe
not best, but the ones that gave me that girlish squee moment:
“"I haven't even eaten
lunch and here you go giving me dessert."
Heat crept up Harry's face and
he instantly straightened. "Sure, you think it's good now, but what you
don't know is that I usually do this in the buff."
Ginny's mouth went slack and a
glazed look passed over her face for a second before she shook her head clear.
"You can't tease me like that, Harry, unless you're going to make good on
it." Giggle. I can picture their reaction. Don’t blame Ginny one bit…
From these moments of humor, you
lead us to Harry’s pain of being alone.
Alone in a way that’s even worse now.
You made a nice choice having Ginny finish her talk of Sirius then,
while Harry was emotionally vulnerable.
He was able to hear it, and express his own pain seeing someone else
share it. His anger, not just his loss
needed to be expressed. The guilt is
still there I think, but Ginny stopping him from taking so much responsibility
is a good start.
Now for my real favorite
line. (Or, my favorite for less
salacious reasons.) “She smiled and this time, Harry realized that beauty was
something that was not made or bought, but existed in the smile of a
friend.”
What a wonderful way to end,
with for the first time Harry feeling some hope, some joy. Maybe he’ll realize sharing things that
bother you can make the burden lighter.
I can’t wait to see how the two react to each other the next time they
are face to face.
The friendship is evolving nicely. It feels natural, and not rushed. I appreciate the time your taking to craft
this into a multichaptered story. I can
only imagine how tempting it is to rush to the payoff, as it were. Thank you for taking the time to let others
see what you write. Great job. Pixie
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Sunday 14th November 2004 21:42 | Consequences of the Heart (Author Response) |
First of all, I need to tell you how much I appreciate you expressing
the realizations you've had in reading my story. You are able to
find all the little things I've spent so much time carefully implanting
in my story. From the subtle shifts in Harry and Ginny's
relationship, to how they look at each other. It seems real and
natural because John and I spent hours and hours figuring out how to do
it. Having you point it out in a review makes my heart go
pitter-patter like nothing else. You don't know how wonderful it
is to see the work not being lost on at least one reader.
This was the most enjoyable chapter to write (next to chapter seven)
because it had so much emotion in it. Harry getting things off
his chest in a believable way, and without resorting to a pre-mature
Harry/Ginny snogathon was not easy. I'm glad you liked it.
-M
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Cera Wednesday 13th October 2004 20:12 | Consequences of the Heart |
Oh, I forgot to say that I love the reference to Fiddler on the Roof. I adore that show!
Sarah |
Cera Wednesday 13th October 2004 20:10 | Consequences of the Heart |
This was such an emotional chapter. First off, I really like the relationship between Molly and Ginny. I've often wondered what it was like, being that Ginny's the only girl and the yougest. It makes sense that maybe they haven't been as close in previous years.
"Her mother cupped her check and pulled Ginny's gaze up to meet her own. "He needs to heal before he can love. Be there for him through this and then see how things go, all right?""
That is such a great line, and so very true. *sniffle*
Okay, Ginny's relationship with Sirius... love it. There are so many missing moments in OotP that could be written. I think that the ones you've written here are really great. Ginny and Harry's talk at the end was very emotional and heart-wrenching. I often find it unplausable when author's have Harry sobbing and crying all over the place, but I think that the subject of Sirius would do it, especially the things that Ginny explained to him here.
Okay, this review is long enough, so I'll stop here. Lovely chapter.
Sarah |
Sunday 14th November 2004 21:49 | Consequences of the Heart (Author Response) |
I'm sorry for not replying earilier, but I've got a full plate.
Emotion is tough for me to write and so I'm glad that you liked this
chapter. It's especially hard to write Harry's emotions properly.
Maybe it's his normally closed demeanor or his volitility, but I've
always had a tough time with it.
I hope you continue to review, even if I don't reply.
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thejsq Monday 20th September 2004 20:10 | Consequences of the Heart |
I love this story. I'm usually irritated by AU, but this is so close to canon that I could see it happening - Harry and Ginny are perfect. Please update! |
Monday 20th September 2004 20:10 | Consequences of the Heart (Author Response) |
Thank you. You are very gracious for giving my little story a chance, despite it's A/U-ness. :P
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Shadow Hider Monday 20th September 2004 19:46 | Consequences of the Heart |
this is great! can't wait to read more ^_^ |
obsidiana Monday 20th September 2004 16:34 | Consequences of the Heart |
I was so happy when I got my up date and there was more to this fic. I can't wait to read the next little bit....wonderful Thanks!
Obsidiana Get to work on the next part, Please! |
Monday 20th September 2004 16:34 | Consequences of the Heart (Author Response) |
Chapter four is in beta, five is halfway written. I hope that helps calm your nerves. ;)
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obsidiana Monday 20th September 2004 15:48 | Consequences of the Heart |
I was so happy when I got my up date and there was more to this fic. I can't wait to read the next little bit....wonderful Thanks!
Obsidiana Get to work on the next part, Please! |
Bring and Fly Monday 20th September 2004 07:35 | Consequences of the Heart |
Excellent! I have wondered about Ginny's birthday in one of the threads here at PS and I feel as though you filled a gap here brilliantly. Ginny's reollection could almost stand alone as a 'missing moment', in my opinion.
I have no idea where you are taking this story but I'm loving the scenery along the way. |
Monday 20th September 2004 07:35 | Consequences of the Heart (Author Response) |
Funnily enough, I didn't know where it was headed until I was three
chapters in! So we're in synch (no pun intended) with the pacing
of the story. The 'pivotal' chapter is the one I'm writing now,
chapter five. It's all downhill from there, but at least I've got
a destination for this beast, now! Thanks for reading.
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Kelleypen Sunday 19th September 2004 19:41 | Consequences of the Heart |
Brilliant! Two tiny criticisms: I think you have a typo on supposed. Did you mean suppose? And after Harry attempts to sing from Fiddler, wouldn't Ginny have asked him about the musical? --your friend down south |
Sunday 19th September 2004 19:41 | Consequences of the Heart (Author Response) |
Good questions, Kelly. On number one, you'll have to e-mail me
with the specific reference, the chapters are blurring toghther for me
(I'm forcing myself to step away from chapter five for a while to
compensate). As for the Fiddler thing... The author humbly asks
that you, the reader, suspend your disbelief for a moment on that one
and assume that Ginny has seen the play. Perhaps in Muggle
Studies? :D
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Neely61 Sunday 19th September 2004 18:42 | Consequences of the Heart |
I'm really enjoying this one so far. I've always thought that it would take something drastic like a fight to bring and together and you seem to have found the way Great work so far and keep it up! Oh, and post, Post, POST! |