The_Critic
Saturday 29th September 2007 21:45 | Twelve Months |
Ohmigod... ha this is'nt the best story I have read on P.s.net but its one of them, I love Ginny's thinking
Oh dear, she thought, here it comes. That'll teach you to be too pushy. Can't 'wow' the witches of the world from a broomstick, if you've got a red-haired harpy hanging on the back.
wait, why am i wasting time reveiwing when there is reading to be done *slaps self*
*goes back to reading Fanfic* Now, why dont you stop making your story's soo good, then i wont waste time reveiwing about how great I think your stories are and can read them instead! (Jk I love your stories just the way they are) |
Patches
Sunday 16th September 2007 05:24 | Twelve Months |
| Wow, this is great! Harry actually proposed. I am so surprised. I guess all the second guessing had me guessing. Thanks for writing. I look forward to more of this story. p |
The Boss
Wednesday 11th July 2007 02:16 | Twelve Months |
Wow...marriage for Ginny! That one certainly came out of the blue, I just thought that they would get 'closer' together but not marriage. Get twist there
The Boss |
GryffindorDragon
Friday 13th October 2006 12:14 | Twelve Months |
Very nice second guessing on Ginny's part. We knew she had it all wrong; and now she knows too. Very nicely done.
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Evelyn
Saturday 19th August 2006 04:33 | Twelve Months |
My word, that was a surprise, even though I knew Ginny was expecting the wrong thing.
Great chapter, but I must go on reading now... |
lorgbb
Sunday 11th June 2006 10:09 | Twelve Months |
| well kinda always knew what was coming, poor ginny though very nicely done |
ImmortalPhoenix
Tuesday 18th April 2006 14:58 | Twelve Months |
oOh interesting... I know its a short review but I must keep reading... GREAT JOB!!!
Kortnee |
nuttyfruity
Monday 6th March 2006 16:54 | Twelve Months |
Hello,
couldn't resist sending you a quick comment on this chapter. Your story is well witten so far, few mistakes and interesting plotline. But, as a French speaker and as a translator, I'd like to advise you to be careful with the automatic translation tools you find on the Net. I must admit your translation of "Naturally, step this way. I'll make sure you're not bothered." into "Naturellement, étape de cette façon. Je m'assurerai que tu es aucun dérangé." had me laughing for a while. A more accurate translation of this could be "Naturellement, venez par ici. Je m'assurerai que vous n'êtes pas dérangés." Although I think waiters usually say "Suivez-moi", which means "Follow me". Just goes to say, whenever you write sentences in another language, getting someone who speaks that language to review it is always good . Hope this helps a bit.
Veronika |
| Tuesday 7th March 2006 00:18 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
Thanks for the comments. Most of the French is my rusty O-Level polished(!) by regular trips to France. I'm aware of the pitfalls of the on line translation stuff as my daughter used it once for her home work and didn't get that good a mark *laughs*
I do now have some one in my pre-beta team whose French is better than mine so hopefully chapter 15 onwards will be error free.
I'll speak to my beta about amending this chapter. I'm happy for you to suggest other corrections as well. |
jeanne
Wednesday 22nd June 2005 19:04 | Twelve Months |
| Mr. and Mrs. W. are still so cute. I like it when they get snogging time too. |
Wolf's Scream
Friday 15th April 2005 21:34 | Twelve Months |
| OK; expected, of course -- but Ginny is on a bit of an emotional roller-coaster, I expect. Nice.
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DazedMarauder
Wednesday 2nd February 2005 21:41 | Twelve Months |
*blink*
Yay! I love it when people engagments go slightly off course. I'm just
happy that their married. But you left us with a cliffhanger!
Anywho, I really like this story. It's very different to see harry and
Ginny is a slightly... confused (?) relationship. I mean, they kiss and
stuff, but things are missing. I have to say though, that's one of the
things that drew me in in the first place. Until the next chapter,
Insquequo terminus,
amanda
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| Sunday 6th February 2005 07:43 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
*laughs* they're not married yet, but some very perceptive comments. Thanks for reviewing.
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brios
Sunday 30th January 2005 22:25 | Twelve Months |
| ACK!! A cliffhanger!!! How could you????? LoL! I LOVE IT! |
| Sunday 6th February 2005 07:34 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| Well it seemed like a natural place to stop *grin* Glad you're liking it so far.
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Velvethope
Sunday 30th January 2005 18:24 | Twelve Months |
| Oh, and by the way. I have never once, received 18+ reviews for one
chapter. You must be doing something right that I evidently don't know
how to do.
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| Sunday 6th February 2005 07:33 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| *laughs* nor have I so don't ask me what the secret is. Thanks for taking the time to review.
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Velvethope
Sunday 30th January 2005 18:22 | Twelve Months |
Heh. Very nice chapter. I love having you write Ginny. And I loved the
joking between Harry and the twins - very easy going and natural. I
can't wait to see what Ginny's reaction is going to be.
Bravo, to you my good friend!
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wokka42
Sunday 30th January 2005 17:42 | Twelve Months |
| You are a cruel, cruel author to stop there. Nicely done, though! Given the rather angsty tone so far, I have a sinking feeling that "yes" isn't going to be 's immediate answer... Please don't twist us too tightly around your little finger before you set things right between them! |
| Sunday 6th February 2005 07:30 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| Its all a question of what you consider 'right' to be isn't it ? Thanks for the review.
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Pugpal
Sunday 30th January 2005 15:34 | Twelve Months |
| AAGGHH!! Uh-hem...Please excuse the girlish scream. Way to go Harry! Wow, it seem that almost all of the storys I've read today have ended in Harry proposing! Not that I have a problem with it...*smirks* Great job hope to here more soon! *hint, hint* |
| Sunday 6th February 2005 07:29 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| More is coming, I hope you like Ginny's reaction.
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Waywren Truesong
Sunday 30th January 2005 14:46 | Twelve Months |
| Oh, lawks, and there's poor Ginny all in a ruffle, certain sure he's going to dump her, when out comes the ring... Brilliant!
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| Sunday 6th February 2005 07:28 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| Glad you enjoyed it. I've never had a "lawks" before !
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brad
Sunday 30th January 2005 00:24 | Twelve Months |
Awww. Can't wait to read of Ginny's reaction in the next chapter!
I thought your description of their 'platonic' relationship over the
course of the war in the first chapter was very well done, nice and
'warm'. Certainly set things up nicely for Harry's (predictable)
proposal. Brad.
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| Sunday 6th February 2005 07:27 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
Thanks for the review. It seems you are one of the few that saw the proposal coming
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meb_au04
Saturday 29th January 2005 21:42 | Twelve Months |
I hope Ginny says yes. I loved the tension in this chapter and Ginny second guessing Harry's feelings for her. Wonder what the family's reaction is going to be to the news (they really haven't officially dated yet).
I loved the teasing of Ron by Ginny - brilliant stuff.
Margaret (LJ elsa241967) |
| Sunday 30th January 2005 00:18 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| Well, Ron asked for it didn't he? He should know better than take his sister on like that. I'm glad you're liking it.
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Treck
Saturday 29th January 2005 13:34 | Twelve Months |
/me grabs wand...
Abra Kadabra. No wait thats not it...
Oh well update soon!
Treck |
| Saturday 29th January 2005 13:53 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
It would be nice to be able to wave my wand and have it all written out wouldn't it?
Thanks for taking the time to review.
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rdprice29
Saturday 29th January 2005 12:44 | Twelve Months |
Awwww! This was adorable! I can't wait to see what she says!
Great job, I'm really enjoying the story so far! |
| Saturday 29th January 2005 13:02 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| Thank you. You're too kind.
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Cera
Saturday 29th January 2005 11:49 | Twelve Months |
I think that my fabourite part of this chapter (aside from the proposal, of course) is Molly. She's so perfect, and just how I would expect her to be. I love it when she suggests that Ginny wear a dress to go for lunch. It's so cute, and motherly.
I love your grasp of the characters, it's obvious that you've thought about their reactions a great deal. Ginny is great... spunky, yet just a little unsure of herself.
I agree with the Auror decision. I can see Harry wanting to escape from fighting after the war is over. He needs to do something for himself, and Quidditch is perfect.
I'm loving it, Parakletos. But you already knew that.
Sarah |
| Saturday 29th January 2005 13:01 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| Thanks for taking the extra time to review
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Mrs.HarryPotter12
Saturday 29th January 2005 10:39 | Twelve Months |
bloodyhell!!! lol didn't see that one comming! hahaha I LOVED IT! It's very rare that I'm really suprised by a fic and you suprised me! UPDATE SOON!
-lain += |
| Saturday 29th January 2005 13:00 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
Well, I'm pleased that I managed to pull that one off. Thanks for the review.
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BabyRuth
Saturday 29th January 2005 10:34 | Twelve Months |
| OH, what a place to end the chapter! |
| Saturday 29th January 2005 12:57 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| Seemed the obvious place to me .... *grin*
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dreamertash
Saturday 29th January 2005 10:32 | Twelve Months |
Now THIS kind of cliffhanger I can live with. I mean, if Harry can survive Voldemort, the least he can do is have the bravery to propose....right? heh heh. I'm sure what follows will be more than a simple yes and it's that I'm looking forward to most.
I love Ginny's inner monologue and especially her wicked exchange with Ron. I believe you are channeling JKR when you write Ginny, for me you keep her so IC. She's exceptional.
I really enjoyed the rapid fire ending between her and Harry, too. Poor Ginny! So intent on protecting herself she almost misses the forest for the trees.
I was so glad to see Harry deciding NOT to go through Auror training. Your reason is exactly what goes through my mind. His entire life has been about the fight against evil. He beat the big-bad-one and now it's time he actually lived. I hope JKR's ultimate goal is to give Harry a real life (even if it is back from the brink of death). Great job and looking forward to more! |
| Saturday 29th January 2005 12:56 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| I find it hard to see Harry wanting to carry on fighting. I'm sure by
the end of book seven, he'll have had a belly full of it. Thanks
for taking the time to review. |
saugart
Saturday 29th January 2005 08:51 | Twelve Months |
Now, THAT was a stunning end to the chapter. Based on your
build-up, I'd expected him to ask her out -- but to propose to
her? Nicely done.
You have my attention for the rest of the story, if there even needs to be a rest of the story.
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| Saturday 29th January 2005 12:50 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| You get more back ground to Harry and Ginny over the next few chapters;
I can't say too much, but they are a little more involved than just
friends. *grin* |
denaumo
Saturday 29th January 2005 05:53 | Twelve Months |
Loved how you ended this part!!! more please!!!! |
Jaquelyne
Saturday 29th January 2005 04:56 | Twelve Months |
That's why Molly was giving Gin hell for her combat boots and jeans. Cute Chapter!
~J~ |
| Saturday 29th January 2005 12:48 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
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Well I wouldn't call DMs combat boots, but
Molly is very conservative when it comes to her daughter’s clothes. My friend
Mel is the inspiration for Ginny’s clothes here; now she wears paratrooper boots!
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Aberforth's Avatar
Saturday 29th January 2005 03:53 | Twelve Months |
I'm enjoying this story very much. I think you have a good feel for the dynamic between Harry and Ginny, and the scenes between Ginny and Molly were very well done.
Poor Harry. Just because he's decided to do something is no guarantee he'll do it well. He might have wanted to avoid forgetting to tell Ginny that he loved her. |
| Saturday 29th January 2005 12:41 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| Well, Harry has done a lot of thinking, but he doesn't always think things through. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
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juliet
Saturday 29th January 2005 03:26 | Twelve Months |
Oh...too good! I loved the interactions between Ron/Ginny and
then the twins/Ginny and Harry. Gave me a good laugh. And
then the cliffhanger proprosal!
Keep it up
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| Saturday 29th January 2005 12:35 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| I'm pleased you liked it. They are a great set of characters to work with.
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Antosha
Friday 28th January 2005 23:53 | Twelve Months |
| Hee! One of the many joys of the Harry/Ginny 'ship is wonderful misdirection like this.... |
| Saturday 29th January 2005 12:33 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| and there are many joys aren't there *grin*
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Mr. Intel
Friday 28th January 2005 18:37 | Twelve Months |
I haven't read the first chapter, but read most of this one when I
validated it. Good job on the proposal. Another one in the
same day!
You have a great gift for writing Ginny, and I found myself agreeing
with her in-head commentary until the end, when I knew what was about
to happen. The only thing I would work on is at the end.
There was a rapid-fire set of dialog that desperately needed some
sentence tags.
Other than that, great job!
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| Saturday 29th January 2005 12:32 | Twelve Months (Author Response) |
| I appreciate the feedback, thanks for the review.
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