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Reviews For Accidental Witnesses by jedicren

anandrocks
Monday 7th December 2009 04:29
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this is the best one shot ive had the pleasure of reading..this is perfect lily/james...could u please write more or perhaps a sequel???
jrg0715
Sunday 11th October 2009 15:15
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Really good story. It was sweet without being over the top. I like the balance of humor and romance. The charachters also felt true. Thanks for sharing!!
gymnastgal19
Saturday 13th September 2008 19:08
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aww!!! that was so cute!
majolie
Monday 21st April 2008 20:00
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Wow - I was looking for something to cheer me up and this seems to have done the trick - so fun, with such a nice fluffy bit of romance thrown in. Absolutely gorgeous!
chiantiqueen
Monday 14th January 2008 07:40
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I love this! So sweet, any chance of sequel(s)??
Delfino
Tuesday 4th December 2007 17:46
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Absolutely perfect!
gymnastgal19
Thursday 11th October 2007 21:56
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lol. I love this story and the ending is cute
ibelieveintruelove
Thursday 15th March 2007 15:02
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AWWW so cute! I love James and Lily stories, and with the Marauders being witnesses, it made for a wonderful romantic comedy!

Aqua Fountain*
Tuesday 20th February 2007 06:20
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That is so sweet.

The “I... I’m going to kiss you.” part is so cute. That's adorable of him to give Lily a warning.
I thought the Marauders were gonna give James a hard time over it but thankfully they didnt.

What an adorable scene
Evelyn
Sunday 23rd July 2006 16:35
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So sweet! And this is pre-OOTP? I keep forgetting that Lily/James stories are nearly always canon-consistent, so this was a wonderful surprise to read after I'd stumbled upon it.

It's been a great read!
Novera
Sunday 16th July 2006 19:17
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aWONDER FUL STORY
HorseloverPenny
Wednesday 10th May 2006 13:27
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wooo! so good!
MissPenny45
Wednesday 22nd February 2006 15:41
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awww that was really cute!
siobh007
Wednesday 1st February 2006 12:39
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“I... I’m going to kiss you.”
this sentence is unusual, but it works!!!!, this could exaclty be harry and ginny for THEIR first kiss, great one !
62442almystery
Friday 16th September 2005 18:40
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I loved how you portrayed all of them, but Lily and James the most. It was fantastic... and so cute. I thoroughly enjoyed reading every second of it.
Marauder Melanie
Monday 27th June 2005 11:47
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hey this is the first story i have read on this site and i love it x
passionflower89
Monday 16th May 2005 06:07
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ahhh, i loved this soo much!  I've read many James/Lily stories and i've only ever read a handful where the transition from hate to love was this perfect!! Plus the marauders are so funny!
fallenhunter
Monday 9th May 2005 22:31
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*goes to get a mop, and bucket to clean up all the sap around here*
Sappy snippet, now wheres the story?
Great scene for a larger Lily/James fic I think.

Miss Effie
Sunday 8th May 2005 11:32
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That was extremely cute but real too, y'know?  I really like how Lily was scared that she would be bad at snogging...that makes sense, as she probably hasn't had much experience with it before.  I'm glad you put that little part in, because it definitely made Lily and her relationship with James more real.  Everyone was in character--like JRK would have written it!  I love how sincere James was being, and that Lily chided him about getting to bed after their kiss.  So perfect!  Well done.
Miss Effie
Wednesday 6th April 2005 18:12
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That was extremely cute!  You deserve applause for a job well done.  *applauds*
Pineapple Queen
Monday 28th March 2005 22:59
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I love you. Honestly, I do. This is absolutely perfect Lily/James.

He leaned forward a bit, “I’m glad I surprise you.”  His eyes were filled with sincerity.  Every hint of his former self, the arrogance and the insensitivity, were absent in his voice.


*sniff* I love James. I love him so much.



It was James’ turn to take a deep breath.  “Lily,” he breathed, brushing his fingers against her warm cheek.  “I... I’m going to kiss you.” 


It wasn’t a question.


Lily was visibly shaking, “What... what if I’m horrible?” she whispered.


James shook his head and rested his forehead against hers.  “That wouldn’t be possible.”


More beautiful, perfect stuff. You rip at my heartstrings. And I'm listening to "Storybook Love" from The Princess Bride right now, too. Talk about setting the mood.

-Pineapple Queen, who is off to search for a 'favorite stories' option
Pineapple Queen
Monday 28th March 2005 22:57
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I love you. Honestly, I do. This is absolutely perfect Lily/James.

He leaned forward a bit, “I’m glad I surprise you.”  His eyes were filled with sincerity.  Every hint of his former self, the arrogance and the insensitivity, were absent in his voice.


*sniff* I love James. I love him so much.



It was James’ turn to take a deep breath.  “Lily,” he breathed, brushing his fingers against her warm cheek.  “I... I’m going to kiss you.” 


It wasn’t a question.


Lily was visibly shaking, “What... what if I’m horrible?” she whispered.


James shook his head and rested his forehead against hers.  “That wouldn’t be possible.”


More beautiful, perfect stuff. You rip at my heartstrings. And I'm listening to "Storybook Love" from The Princess Bride right now, too. Talk about setting the mood.

-Pineapple Queen, who is off to search for a 'favorite stories' option
DADAGinny
Monday 28th March 2005 09:41
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Very nicely done.  I liked how Lily still was trying to be strict afterwards.


x_Rose_x
Monday 28th March 2005 07:18
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awwww how cute!!!
TigerLily8186
Sunday 27th March 2005 14:06
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This was cute! I practically forgot that the boys were hiding in the corner. I loved the L/J interaction. Utterly realistic.
praesul femella
Saturday 26th March 2005 10:10
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That. Was so. ADORABLE! I love it I love it I love it!
Lulabelle
Friday 25th March 2005 19:54
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Great little fic!  I really liked it.
Delani
Friday 25th March 2005 16:55
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Awww. This was just...awwwww.  Quite swell, Old Bean, I have to say.  Great characterization and dialogue.  Lily was too cute.

 

Delani

Shadow Hider
Friday 25th March 2005 11:32
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Author: jedicren - Add Author To Your Email Update List Story: Accidental Witnesses Part: 1: Accidental Witnesses Rating: PG-13 Setting: Pre-OotP Status: Completed Reviews: 2 Words: 2,415 Updated: March 24, 2005, 12:20am Printer Friendly Format

1: Accidental Witnesses

A/N: Big thanks to my beta, Katieay, for all her helpful comments.

Marauder’s seventh Year: Late October (after the Gryffindor vs. Slytherin Quidditch match)

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The Gryffindor common room was deserted.  Empty butterbeer bottles and candy wrappers littered the floor.  There was a large banner hung above the portrait hole that read ‘We Squashed the Snakes.’  The only noise was the quiet crackle from the logs in the fireplace and the light breathing of Hogwarts’ Head Boy, sleeping soundly on the overstuffed couch.

Suddenly, a door slammed somewhere upstairs; silence followed.

Until... 

“OUCH!  Sirius, you twat!  That was my sodding foot!”

A young man appeared, seemingly pushed out of thin air.  He hurtled down the remaining steps and came to rest, grinning, on the maroon carpet below.

Sirius Black pushed his dark hair out of his eyes and crossed his arms.  “You’re the one who suggested we walk down the stairs underneath the Invisibility Cloak, Moony,” he stated sourly.

“For heaven’s sake, Sirius!” hissed Remus Lupin as he yanked the cloak off his shoulders.  “If you could walk in a straight line, we wouldn’t have a problem!”

The seventh-year boys’ dormitory door opened again; a pudgy, blond-haired young man bounded down the stairs.

“I found it!  I found it!” cried Peter Pettigrew, waving around a large piece of neatly folded parchment.

Remus put his finger to his lips to try and shush him.

“Where was it?” asked Sirius, plucking the Marauder’s map out of the chubby boy’s fingers when he reached the bottom of the steps.

“On your dresser,” Peter answered smugly, obviously feeling extremely proud to have been the one to find it.

“Oh... whoops, didn’t look there.”

Remus rolled his eyes dramatically.  “Let's go before the Head Boy and Girl decide to come back.  They should be done with their rounds any second.”

Peter looked nervous.  “What if James comes back upstairs and realizes we’re gone?”

It was Sirius’ turn to roll his eyes. “He’ll assume I was hungry and dragged the two of you down to the kitchens with me...”

“I don’t think we’ll have to worry about him coming upstairs anytime soon,” Remus interrupted, pointing toward the large sofa near the fireplace.

Sirius and Peter followed him around to the edge of the couch. 

James Potter was fast asleep, his hair was sticking up worse than usual and his glasses had slipped off his face and were lying abandoned on the floor.  He was still in his Quidditch gear.

“Think we should wake him up?” Sirius asked, plucking his best friend’s glasses off the floor and folding them up next to his sleeping form.

Remus seemed to consider it for a minute, “Nah, why deny Lily the chance to yell at him for skiving off on his Head duties?”

The three boys sniggered softly.

They were just about to pick up the Cloak and leave the common room when the portrait hole began to open.  It was too late to run back up the stairs, so instead, Remus, Peter, and Sirius haphazardly threw the Invisibility Cloak over themselves and backed into the corner near the fireplace.  They held their breath as Lily Evans stepped into the room.

It was useful having the Head Boy as your friend; James (had he been awake) wouldn’t have hesitated in joining them on a nighttime stroll about the castle.  The Head Girl, on the other hand, was a completely different story.  She would not have been amused to find them sneaking out of bed to raid the kitchens at midnight.  This is why Sirius, Peter, and Remus stayed tucked away under their cloak, waiting for her to leave.

Lily rubbed her eyes sleepily and pushed her long, ginger hair behind her ears.  Slowly, she walked toward the fireplace to put out the torches that burned above it.  Halfway around the sofa, though, she stopped dead in her tracks.  For a moment, it looked like she was going to leave James lying there.  Then, she did something that surprised the three boys crouched ten feet away.

Lily quietly knelt down and unsnapped James’ wrist-guards, carefully, so as not to wake him. Then, she moved to his legs and tugged the shin-guards off.

James stirred slightly.

Lily pulled a soft maroon blanket over him and stood back up.  Leaning over slightly, she delicately tried to smooth down his hair.

James blinked his hazel eyes a few times, waking up slowly.

“Hi,” he whispered hoarsely.

“Sorry... I didn’t mean to wake you,”she whispered back.

James rubbed his eyes with the back of his hand and fumbled for his glasses.  He thought for sure he had left them on the floor near the couch, but decided Lily had probably moved them.  Pushing them up on his nose, he sat up slightly and leaned back against the cushions.  “What time is it?”

“Almost midnight.”  Lily sat down on the edge of the couch, near his torso.

The three Marauders in the corner tried not to breathe.

James leaned his head back against a pillow and closed his eyes for a second.  “I missed our rounds... I’m sorry.”

Lily smiled, “I let you sleep... you – played a good game today.”  She entwined her fingers and glanced down at them.

Thinking back on the game, James reached up and rubbed his sore neck.  Flying on a broom for three hours (fun or not) wasn’t too comfortable.  “Mmm... you should thank Alwen, he caught the snitch.”

Lily feigned a shocked look.

“What?” he asked, self-consciously running his hand along his jaw line.

Lily grabbed his hand and pulled it away from his face.  “Nothing.  It’s... you’ve—just changed quite a bit.  This year has been different than I expected.”

James smiled. “You thought I’d be a miserable Head Boy.”

“I had my doubts,” she said solemnly.  “A year ago, you’d have taken all the credit for Gryffindor’s win; James Potter was a one-man team.”

James rolled his eyes and scratched the back of his neck (all right, so he was about to mess up his hair, but stopped himself at the last second).  He thought about making a witty remark, but decided against it, not wanting to irritate Lily.

“I might’ve helped a little... scored a goal here and there,” he said casually.

Lily smiled back.  Quickly, she realized she was still holding onto his hand.  She made to let go, but noticed a piece of string knotted around his wrist.  Frowning, she fingered the tail, which ran from his arm, and disappeared over the side of the couch.

“What’s this?” she asked.

James held up his arm for a second before realization hit him.  “I didn’t want my Transfiguration book to get away,” he said, grinning.

Lily raised her eyebrows. “What?”

James tugged on the string.

Lily watched as a large turtle was pulled out from underneath the couch.  The string was tied around its middle.  It looked like a normal snapping turtle, except its shell appeared to be made out of James’ textbook; it read, ‘Advanced Transfiguration.’

“Erm... Peter was having a bit of trouble with our Transfiguration homework... I was going to let him change it back, but it’s late now... might need it tomorrow.”  He lifted the animal off the floor and tapped it with his wand.  Immediately, the turtle’s legs, arms, head, and tail were sucked into the shell, which reverted back to book-form.

“I don’t know how you manage to do so well in that class without paying attention,” Lily commented dryly.  Without thinking, she rested her hand on his chest.  His breathing seemed to quicken and she could feel his heartbeat under his Quidditch robe.  She yanked her hand back and set it in her lap, drumming her fingers slowly across her knee.

James sensed her nervousness and stared into her unfocused green eyes.  He leaned forward a bit, “I’m glad I surprise you.”  His eyes were filled with sincerity.  Every hint of his former self, the arrogance and the insensitivity, were absent in his voice.

Lily chewed on her lower lip.  After a second, she cleared her throat. “Me, too.” She was trying, with great difficulty, to avoid his fixed stare.  This moment had been building for months.  They had finally moved from enemies to friends.  And now?  Lily felt afraid to acknowledge the fact that she was falling (albeit it had been a slow process) for James Potter.

“You’re flustered.”

Her head shot up. “Am not.”

James smiled slightly.  “Am I making you nervous?”

“No,”  she answered, rather unconvincingly.

“All right,” he said, leaning back again.  Anyone that knew James could easily see how much effort he was putting into acting nonchalant about the situation.

Lily looked down at her hands again.  She sighed, “Maybe... maybe a little.”

“Any reason?” he asked quietly.  James sat up straighter.

Lily locked eyes with him for a second, “I’m not sure, exactly.”  She took a calming breath and fiddled with the hem of her skirt.  “I–it’s just that...”

“Lily... do you–do you feel... different?” he asked.  “About me, I mean?”  Reaching out with a hand, he tenderly tucked a loose lock of hair behind her ear.

It seemed to take her hours to gingerly nod her head.

It was James’ turn to take a deep breath.  “Lily,” he breathed, brushing his fingers against her warm cheek.  “I... I’m going to kiss you.” 

It wasn’t a question.

Lily was visibly shaking, “What... what if I’m horrible?” she whispered.

James shook his head and rested his forehead against hers.  “That wouldn’t be possible.”

He leaned in slowly, meeting her lips softly, and giving her plenty of time to back off if she wanted to.

She didn’t.

Lily’s eyes fluttered closed as their lips touched.  She placed one hand on his thigh for support and grasped his shoulder with the other.

James moved his hand from her cheek, into her hair.

Lily let out a small gasp into his mouth.

Pulling back slowly, James took a moment to nuzzle her nose with his own.

In the corner, Remus was doing everything he could to muzzle Sirius, who was trying to let out a whoop of surprise.

Lily opened her eyes.  “That was...” she cleared her throat and started again, “that felt nice.”

James ran a hand through her hair and stared into her eyes, “You have no idea how long I’ve wanted to kiss you.”

Lily smiled shyly, her cheeks were tinged with pink, but James wasn’t sure if it was from embarrassment or from the rough stubble on his face.

James ran his hand down her cheek softly, “Lily,” he whispered.

Peter, Remus, and Sirius had to lean forward to hear what he was saying.

“When you look at me... I feel like I can’t breathe.”

Lily blushed and averted her eyes.  “I should... probably get to bed.  It’s late.”

James nodded and gave her a half smile as she stood up and smoothed her skirt.

“Goodnight,” she said quietly.

James cleared his throat, afraid his voice might fail him. “Night,” he managed throatily.

Lily ascended the stairs slowly.  When James heard the door shut firmly behind her, he leaned his head back against the cushions and let out a long breath.

Sirius didn’t wait another second before ripping the Invisibility Cloak off his head and leaping into the air.  “PRONGS!” he shouted.

James almost fell off the sofa in shock.

Sirius didn’t seem to notice.  He crossed the distance between them in two steps and leapt unconcernedly onto his best friend’s stomach.

James made a loud ‘UMPH’ sound.

“You didn’t tell me that you and Evans were starting to get along!” he said happily, mussing up James’ hair.

“More than getting along, I’d say,” Remus said as he pulled the Cloak off his and Peter’s shoulders.

James rolled his eyes and tried to push Sirius off.  “If I wasn’t thoroughly elated right now, I’d kick your , Padfoot.”

Sirius, for his part, held onto to James as he fell off the couch onto the hearthrug.  James tumbled with him and tried putting Sirius into a headlock.

Remus and Peter exchanged a look and sat down on the empty couch.

“So when did Lily switch from yelling to snogging?” Peter asked.

James, who was laughing as Sirius pinned his arms behind him, shrugged.

Suddenly, a door slammed open upstairs and Lily appeared at the top of the steps.  She was now dressed in her Gryffindor-colored pyjamas, an annoyed expression plastered on her pretty features.  “JAMES!  You should be setting an example!  If the four of you don’t get to bed right NOW, I’m going to take points away!”  Her face twitched for a second, as if she was going to smile, but instead she turned on her heel and disappeared into the dormitory again

James and Sirius stood up and brushed themselves off.

“I reckon I should listen to her or she’ll never let me snog her again,” James announced, heading toward the staircase.

Sirius, Peter, and Remus followed suit, laughing madly and clapping James on the back.

“You’re one lucky man, James,” Remus said, as he pulled open the dormitory door.

“Yeah, I’d have given up long ago,” Peter added.

“And that, Wormtail, is why you’ve never kissed a girl,” Sirius sniggered.

“Sod off, all of you!” James said, rolling his eyes and leaping, face first, into his four poster.

“But it felt brilliant, yeah?” Sirius asked, rolling into his own bed.

James lifted his head to look over at his best friend.  He grinned. “Too right it did!  I won’t be able to sleep for days.”

“She’s quite a girl,” called Remus, from across the room.

“Lucky thing you were able to snag Head Boy, Prongs,” added Peter while he tugged on his maroon colored pyjamas.  “Otherwise, she might still loathe you.”

“You’re a prat, Wormtail,” came Sirius’ voice.

James drifted slowly off to the sound of Sirius explaining the theory of tact to Peter. 

hehehe that's great

Reenie
Friday 25th March 2005 10:33
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That was a wonderfully sweet story thank you for writing it
p0tterfan
Friday 25th March 2005 00:38
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Hehe ... nice one shot :)  Brought a smile to my face!
Wild Magelet
Thursday 24th March 2005 21:22
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This whole fic had me smiling. The interaction between the Marauders was great, and the first kiss between James and Lily was wonderful. I liked how you presented a James with a determination to change, but maybe a few hints of the old arrogance underneath. Loved his last musings before he went to sleep. Great job!