TangoCharlie
Thursday 18th September 2008 08:23 | New Year, New Hope |
I like the way the dialogue between Harry and Ginny is becoming more natural (more 'as it would be spoken'), even when they're discussing the really big, important things as they've done before.
Congrats also on a really well written romantic scene. I'm impressed that it could be so sweet and tender without becoming over the top : ) |
| Thursday 18th September 2008 23:46 | New Year, New Hope (Author Response) |
Writing dialogue has become a lot easier for me over the last several stories and I'm really glad you think I'm doing a good job at it.
The romantic scene, especially the kiss, was an entirely new experience for me. My goal was to make it feel real and not to sound as if I were writing for a steamy romance novel! Thanks for letting me know I've been successful. |
bookish327
Sunday 7th October 2007 11:52 | New Year, New Hope |
| This story is SO WONDERFUL! I haven't been reviewing individual chapters of this story so far, because I've been impatient to go on to the next chapter, but I had to write some sort of review here. Your writing is so great. The angst is there without being depressing. I don't like stories where Harry feels completely alone, and no one can help him stop feeling that way. (Some other angst-y stories are EVEN MORE dark and depressing than that, and that's not good for me. I need some fluff and romance mixed in with a little angst, or it's just not good for me.) Since this is written from Ginny's POV and since she is doing all she possibly can to help him, it's wonderful for there to be more hope for Harry and less "gloom & doom," even if he still succumbs to it sometimes. Also, even though he wasn't allowing Ron and Hermione in on what the prophecy meant for his future earlier in the story, we still knew how much they worried about him, despite not knowing how to help. Most especially, I love the bond that Harry and Ginny have in this story. Their romantic relationship is still so new, and I have many hopes that it will deepen and intensify into an even more profound bond. Excellent story, so far! |
| Sunday 7th October 2007 13:18 | New Year, New Hope (Author Response) |
| I'm glad you are enjoying my story and I think that the further you get into it the more you'll see Ginny and Harry's relationship develop. There are still some bumps in the road, but be assured that with Ginny's support and that of his other friends, Harry's depression decreases as the story progresses. I look forward to reading your next review. Thanks for taking the time to let me know what you like about it. |
The Boss
Wednesday 4th July 2007 00:57 | New Year, New Hope |
Now that is interesting to see about the classes first thing in the morning - I like how Harry and Ron got their morning 'sleep in'.
Oh dear I hope Harry hasnt done anything to major in the potions lessons...looks like I will have to wait and see
The Boss |
| Thursday 5th July 2007 01:42 | New Year, New Hope (Author Response) |
Everyone deserves a lie-in every once in a while and I think Harry was definitely over due for one. As for the Potions lab, well, just keep reading to find out.
Thank you for your review. |
The Boss
Tuesday 3rd July 2007 05:39 | New Year, New Hope |
Aww, now that is a good ending to this chapter! At least Harry and Ginny are going to get a good nights sleep (we hope)
Their little fight frightened me that something bad was going to happen, but it didnt, so I was very relieved!
The Boss |
daniel_r_crazy22
Friday 13th April 2007 11:45 | New Year, New Hope |
| I love it. I am so glad that Ginny finally got into Harry's head and made him see that he is not alone. And the ending was perfect. |
| Friday 13th April 2007 12:32 | New Year, New Hope (Author Response) |
I'm glad you like this chapter. Harry's a rather stubborn bloke when it comes to his self-image and it took an act as selfless as Ginny's to finally make him feel he has self-worth and people who really do care about him. And it *definitely* was time for Harry to *really* kiss Ginny!
Thanks for your review. I hope to read more of your reviews very soon. |
Patches
Friday 30th March 2007 03:22 | New Year, New Hope |
| Wow! This is great. I'm glad Hermione helped Ginny brew the potion. That was a great way for Ginny and Harry to bring up the subject of the necKlace and the potion. I thought for a while that Harry was going to reject them both. I'm glad he finally realized they were gifts of love. That is a great way to describe the necklace. A part of Ginny is always with Harry. That and Ginny will always know when he needs her. I'm glad the potion worked like it was supposed too. That was great. Thanks for writing. I really like this story. It was nice too that Harry was finally relaxed enough to kiss Ginny properly. p |
| Friday 30th March 2007 08:39 | New Year, New Hope (Author Response) |
| With all the love that Ginny has poured into her projects it was time a lightbulb went off in Harry's head that friends are willing to help just because they care about one another. Harry's time at the Dursleys deprived him of so many things and he's still having a hard time accepting the fact that there's a whole different side to life; one filled with acceptance and love. It was definitely time for him to show Ginny the depth of his feelings for her. Thanks for reading and reviewing. |
levotatingT
Friday 22nd April 2005 12:51 | New Year, New Hope |
OMG, that was Brilliant!!!!! I liked how you waited to have them kiss intamitly at the very end, great ending. Bravo I really wish you'd write more, it would be cool to see how Harry does with his lessons and more about the pendents! :) I also, really liked how was incorpreated in this.
Awsome Job, can't wait to read more.
levotatingT |
| Friday 22nd April 2005 21:41 | New Year, New Hope (Author Response) |
Thanks for the nice review. I'm having fun writing this story because I've chosen to explore not only Harry and Ginny's relationship, but the dynamics between Ginny and Hermione, too. We get to see how Ron and Harry relate in canon, but JKR doesn't spend much time talking about what sort of friendship has developed between the two girls. They're rather fun to write together.
As for the kiss...it's more fun to end an arguement when there's the opportunity to kiss and make up. Right? Also, the pendants will be taking a big part in future chapters as Harry begins to accept that he is a person worthy of all the time and love that Ginny gives to him.
Chapter Six is well under way. Arnel |
juliet
Wednesday 13th April 2005 06:28 | New Year, New Hope |
Exceptional "fluffy, mushy stuff", and just the right mix with all the angst.
Well done
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| Wednesday 13th April 2005 08:25 | New Year, New Hope (Author Response) |
| I'm so glad you think this chapter is balanced...that was actually one of my goals for it along with finally getting to the "fluffy, mushy stuff"! Thanks for reviewing. |
sonicdale
Wednesday 13th April 2005 05:40 | New Year, New Hope |
The pendant - the Phoenix Pendant. Nice name.
Seamus understands woman's intuition? good for him. Maybe he can tell me....
Val N. Tino. Heh. Must be cousins with Tara N. Tino, the famous Muggle film director.
When Ginny tells Harry what's what - that was good. Gin sounded a bit too Hermione at the end, but then again Gin's growing into such a smart woman that I guess she has the right to be that way. Good work.
Still waiting for the martial arts -- one of the things one of my friends told me when he got his 4th or 5th level black belt - once the physical forms of martial arts are mastered, the higher levels are all mental forms. Maybe you can use that - As Bruce Lee once said (in one of my most favorite quotes:
"Be like water making its way through cracks. Do not be assertive, but adjust to the object, and you shall find a way round or through it. If nothing within you stays rigid, outward things will disclose themselves. Empty your mind, be formless. Shapeless, like water. If you put water into a cup, it becomes the cup. You put water into a bottle and it becomes the bottle. You put it in a teapot it becomes the teapot. Now, water can flow or it can crash. Be water my friend."
That sounds like a tall order for Harry - who is used to reacting and being assertive all the time - but maybe some good form of martial arts will help.
Good luck. Looking forward to more!
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| Wednesday 13th April 2005 08:41 | New Year, New Hope (Author Response) |
I decided to have Ginny give Harry her phoenix pendant because the phoenix symbolizes hope and rebirth. "Hope" is one of the main themes for this story, hence the title, even though the dark days of war are looming on the horizon. Ginny's gift is a small hope for the young man who has become the "hope" of the Wizarding world.
I chuckled at your comment about Ginny sounding like Hermione. It seems to me that since the two girls are spending a considerable amount of time together, so it just follows that a little of each rubs off on the other. I was hoping for a little of Molly in this chapter's Ginny, but I'll take Hermione any day!
Finally, I really like your Bruce Lee quote. Thanks for sharing it; I'm planning on working it into chapter seven or eight in some way...don't know exactly how just yet, but it'll be in there somehow.
I always enjoy your reviews. They are quite helpful. |
Wild Magelet
Wednesday 13th April 2005 00:32 | New Year, New Hope |
All I can think to say is "Wow", which doesn't exactly make for a helpful, informative review, but expresses how I feel pretty well! Awesome chapter, amazing writing...basically any compliment you can think of, I'll give! =)
I like that he was such a prat about what she'd done at first, strange as that sounds! I just think that the anger Harry's showing in canon (which is understandable, but more than a little annoying, I've got to say it!) won't go away quickly, and he'll still be liable to be short-tempered and resentful about things.
You so make Ginny the perfect foil for him in this story. She comes off as being mature and capable, and someone I'd definitely feel good about having on my side, so I hope Harry appreciates it! =) I'm also hoping that JKR's Ginny starts to develop into a character like you've written. I think she's capable of it.
Great job! |
| Wednesday 13th April 2005 08:54 | New Year, New Hope (Author Response) |
Thanks for the compliments. Reviewers like you are what keep writers like me continuing to spin our tales.
When I first wrote "suspicious Harry" into this chapter, I was a little surprised at first. However, the more I looked over the chapter the better I liked it and thought it fit with the various events from canon. Believe me, Harry's not over being short-tempered over things...
I'm glad you like my Ginny. I wanted to show how she's maturing and incorporating the guidance she gets from the other women in her life; Molly and to some extent Hermione. I see Ginny as a strong young woman who knows what she wants out of life and who provides a refuge for the troubled young man who is expected to save the Wizarding world. I, too, hope that Ginny takes a more prominent role in the last two books as someone Harry can lean on. |
