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lizzierichards
Sunday 12th September 2010 11:08 | The Unknown Power | | Goodness, what a way to start the story. Now I'm hooked! Great job. I can't wait to read more... | Shinzen
Friday 11th April 2008 13:30 | The Unknown Power | | It seems a bit... stilted. I didn't really feel drawn into the whole confession scene, and there wasn't even a big payoff. Did they even kiss this chapter? Besides that one on the cheek? It just seems kind of... bland. | | Saturday 12th April 2008 21:34 | The Unknown Power (Author Response) | Er, what/which confession?
Yes, they kissed. Including on the Express for an "on screen" example. | kateri
Sunday 12th August 2007 04:48 | The Unknown Power | | muggle_born
Wednesday 31st August 2005 13:50 | The Unknown Power | | Oh man. I'm not happy. I haven't even finished this section, but I just had to tell you that you've killed a lot of my free time. Now I have to read this fantastic story. I'm literally giddy about reading this, and that's a sad thing coming from a 30-year-old man. | Macsr71
Tuesday 10th May 2005 16:50 | The Unknown Power | | Well, having read as much as you have up it is about time I shared my thoughts with your most excellent story. I must learn not to read this at work as the times I am found smiling at my computer have my co-workers wondering if I am sane (I’m not, but that’s another message) I love Harry’s attitude towards Dumbledore – the old codger has been keeping him in the dark for far too long. Ginny and Harry’s teasing? Excellent intercourse between the two (yes, the verbal type as that’s all they’ve gotten up to yet anyway) I love the pace you are setting, no use rushing things eh? And, why ruin the excellent Ron-baiting? Adore the Remus/Tonks relationship, Tonks is far too funny as the big corrupting sister, with her in charge of parental oversight we’ll have little Potters popping out before too long. As a parent I did find Molly/Arthur giving in to Ginny moving in with Harry a little too easily given but “Hey Ginny, you’ve just defeated the most evil wizard ever, what are you going to do?” and having her say she’s going to Disneyland just ain’t going to cut it. (Potterland heck yes!) I didn’t understand the whole cup of companionship thing, is that going to be coming back later in the story? Sending the deatheater wanna-bee’s naked into a crowd – too right! And revenge upon the Dursleys – far too long in coming (git em Gin, they messed with your man) Ok, so I could go on but let me close with GREAT STORY, my many thanks for sharing with us | Muggle Witch
Tuesday 10th May 2005 13:11 | The Unknown Power | | What a wonderful story. Well written. I look forward to read this. | p0tterfan
Wednesday 20th April 2005 23:30 | The Unknown Power | | Good start to the story ... let's see what Harry's new power is going to be ...
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