kaye
Friday 24th June 2005 05:23 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
| i thought it was great the harry was aurging with him self. |
| Friday 24th June 2005 07:06 | Per Aspera Ad Astra (Author Response) |
| Thank you for saying that. I wanted the reader to know what was going on - an experiment, but so far nobody seems to dislike it. |
harry'sgurl
Wednesday 15th June 2005 13:19 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
| Ah, young love. |
p0tterfan
Friday 20th May 2005 13:19 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
Hmm ... I guess I know what I'm doing wrong now.
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| Tuesday 31st May 2005 01:07 | Per Aspera Ad Astra (Author Response) |
| Always glad to help. |
hamburg2000
Friday 20th May 2005 02:29 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
Hi,
Wonderful start so far. Nice / fluff, I really like it. I hope though that it was your intention for the first chapter being quite superficial, so that you could move things forward to a certain point and will slow down now. Otherwise I would recommend to deepen things a little bit.
Everything else is really great. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. In fact I can hardly wait. |
| Friday 20th May 2005 03:00 | Per Aspera Ad Astra (Author Response) |
| Chapter 1 is the setup, not much more than a prologue. And I think things have slowed down in chapter 2, haven't they? |
p0tterfan
Thursday 19th May 2005 19:52 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
Off to a good start. Some nice H/G moments in there :)
Just one question ...
"Her nails are short, very well-kept. Neither
long claws like those of Lavender Brown's, nor bitten down like, uagh, Millicent Bullstrode's. Today she used a little clear nail polish. She doesn't use much make-up, that's nice too…. "
Do guys notice the finger nails of all the girls they know ... esp. the ones they are not interested in? :)
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| Friday 20th May 2005 02:58 | Per Aspera Ad Astra (Author Response) |
| Um ..., er, ... I do. |
Lulabelle
Thursday 19th May 2005 18:24 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
Awww! Harry & Ginny fluff! I love it! More please! |
| Friday 20th May 2005 02:57 | Per Aspera Ad Astra (Author Response) |
| The correct spell would be "accio chapter 3", I believe. |
roastpuff
Thursday 19th May 2005 16:48 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
I think the translation is "through adversity to the stars." I know
this because it happens to be the Royal Canadian Air Force's motto, and
I'm an RCAF nut.
Cute story, by the way. I can't wait for the next chapter!
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| Friday 20th May 2005 02:54 | Per Aspera Ad Astra (Author Response) |
I'm not a native speaker of either Latin or English, but I think you'll be hard pressed to find the ONE translation.
Lat. "asperum" means something like "roughness", "craggedness", "unevenness", all of which are not a goid choice for a fluent translation. I also found "Through hardships to the stars". I think all those possibilities cover the basic idea: You'll make it, but "it's gonna be a bumpy ride!"
Thanks for r/r. |
sonicdale
Thursday 19th May 2005 13:07 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
Well, well, well.
Your flowing style at the begining of this chapter was hard to follow. It flowed like a jar of molasses. In the winter. On a frozen lake.
But when you got to the dialogue and the party - you hit your stride and it came out great. Great work! I espeically like how this FEELS real, as opposed to some other fics out there. I mean, Harry's 16, not 45. Sometimes fic writers make him sound older. Gin too. But you didn't. Kudos. |
dancinginmagic
Thursday 19th May 2005 12:58 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
| Harry, Harry, Harry! You shouldn't be worrying about what Ron will do to you if you start going out with Ginny! You should be worrying about what will happen to YOU if you DON'T! |
| Friday 20th May 2005 02:36 | Per Aspera Ad Astra (Author Response) |
| There might be another problem! |
emmamoonpotter
Thursday 19th May 2005 12:32 | Per Aspera Ad Astra |
Ha! All that was needed was a little attention! That prat Thomas should
be hung by his toes and force fed to Grindylows. Along with his tart
girlfriend.
I wonder how long the peace between Harry and Ginny will last? Well, if
Harry thinks Ginny is exciting and is fantasizing about her, erm,
attributes it will be interesting.
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