MorgainneMoriancumer
Monday 20th November 2006 13:29 | A Different Boy Who Lived |
| Wow, never really thought before about what that would be like, the muggle and wizard friendships before school |
| Monday 20th November 2006 16:45 | A Different Boy Who Lived (Author Response) |
| Thank you for reviewing. I'm not sure I understand what you mean... |
tara_reynolds_2
Saturday 18th November 2006 18:47 | A Different Boy Who Lived |
| i'm really sorry to corect you but in the last chapter wasn't colin's mum named Carla and in this one its Carol. other than that great storry so far |
| Saturday 18th November 2006 21:17 | A Different Boy Who Lived (Author Response) |
Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you are enjoting the story.
I hadn't noticed, but it seems like I've switched back and forth, from one chapter to another. Mrs. Creevey's surname is, in fact, Carla. Thanks for pointing it out. I will get the problem fixed asap. In the mean time, please try to ignore it as best you can.
angelmorph |
GryffindorDragon
Tuesday 25th July 2006 11:29 | A Different Boy Who Lived |
Cute piece with Colin's blurting out the magicalness of the neighbors. But the conversation with the boys comes across to me more like 6 or 7 than 3 and 4.
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| Wednesday 26th July 2006 16:59 | A Different Boy Who Lived (Author Response) |
| Thank you, I'm gld you like. Thanks for pointing out the problem with the boys in this chapter; having them act their age is one of my major concerns for this story. Unfortunately, there's nothing much I can do in this case short of scrpping the entire chapter, but please do continue to point it out if you see the problem recur. |
daniel_r_crazy22
Thursday 29th June 2006 13:14 | A Different Boy Who Lived |
| It's funny how she thinks that Colin, Harry and Neville were just imagining the magic. Oh, how she is in for a big surprise. |
| Thursday 29th June 2006 14:33 | A Different Boy Who Lived (Author Response) |
| Most definitely. it's a scene I look foward to writing. thank you for your review. |
cckeimig
Wednesday 10th May 2006 22:40 | A Different Boy Who Lived |
| I think you've done a great job with the dialogue so far. Especially with Colin's character. |
| Thursday 11th May 2006 04:43 | A Different Boy Who Lived (Author Response) |
Thank you. I find dialouge the funnest part to write. I'm glad you're enjoying Colin's character. I myself find him fun to write.
Angelmorph |
dophingirl79
Friday 3rd June 2005 10:46 | A Different Boy Who Lived |
| keep up the good work, I'll be looking forward to more as soon as it comes. |
| Friday 3rd June 2005 11:41 | A Different Boy Who Lived (Author Response) |
Thank you. |
Arnel
Wednesday 1st June 2005 22:10 | A Different Boy Who Lived |
| Another great chapter...I could see my own four-year-old son in this chapter. You've got child-speak down to a "t" and I love Colin's runaway narrative at the end. Well done, well done! |
| Wednesday 1st June 2005 22:45 | A Different Boy Who Lived (Author Response) |
Why thank you... I do worry about over or underestimating the conversational skills of children when I write scenes like that. Hopefully the dialouge in the coming chapters will be just as successful. I'm glad uou enjoyed the narrative. It wasn't part of the plan for the chapter but Colin insisted on telling his mum about his day...
Thanks again for the review,
Angelmorph |
dibberne
Tuesday 31st May 2005 21:39 | A Different Boy Who Lived |
| The dialogue was just right for a bunch of little guys; it was really cute. I love the image of Padfoot playing hide and seek with H and N. Also, Colin's comparing N and H to a set of twins really illustrates well how close they are. It's quite the foil for Harry's relationship with Dudley in the books. I'm looking forward to the next chapter! |
| Tuesday 31st May 2005 23:54 | A Different Boy Who Lived (Author Response) |
Wow! That was certainly a speedy review... I'm glad you enjoyed the dialouge, especially since I tend to use dialouge pretty frequently. Yes, Neville and Harry are certainly a lot closer than Harry ever was with his cousin. I'm glad you approve.
Thnak you for your review,
Angelmorph |
