GryffindorDragon
Tuesday 8th August 2006 16:34 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
So the scene in the alley did happen. So who are the dark robes watching him at the beginning of the chapter and the flash of light and pain?? This is interesting but a bit confusing. I guess Harry was "dreaming" at that point as he lay unconscious at Hogwarts. But what about the restraints??
Interesting twist with Harry's musings about Ron and Hermione ; I defintely think you're selling both of them short (especially given how HBP relates their reaction ). What happened to Harry's wand? Why doesn't he have it with him. I think you've got Harry quite right in his reaction to the water balloons. Peeves missing, yeah right! You're doing wandless magic, Harry.
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Believer
Tuesday 1st August 2006 18:38 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
Omg! This story's premise is so great! I'm looking foward to reading more.
I'm a bit confused though with your time sequencing of Harry's capture. The last chapter had Harry transported by portkey, then fading in and out of consiousness being force feed potion. Then he wakes up in his room... eyesight is restored... heads out to Ms. Fig... ducks into alley... fight insues and he is stunned. This chapter opens with Harry being tortured until he is again stunned and then wakes up in the Hospital Wing. With the way you arranged things it seem like Harry awakens to be tortured after the alley fight. But that's not possible because after the alley fight he was taken straight to Hogwarts. You probably had a purpose for arranging the scenes like that, but I just had to point out that it was a bit confusing and forced me to re-read the last chapter in order to try and figure out what was going on. I'm guessing that you tried to do a time overlap... or something... in telling your story? Oh Well... Anyway I really love your story and the awesome powers that Harry is developing. Too Cool that he's also the quidditch captain. This year is gonna rock! |
mcdowella
Sunday 30th July 2006 01:44 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
| Interesting title, and I see Harry no longer needs his glasses (goes green with envy :-)). Severus and Remus are both on the scene too. I know this is a wild guess, but have you ever heard of something called the Severitus Challenge? Regardless, I will be following this with interest. |
| Monday 31st July 2006 17:30 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis (Author Response) |
| I've heard of the Severitus Challenge... but never cared for how any of the stories from it turned out. As for the glasses... more on that later. |
daniel_r_crazy22
Thursday 27th July 2006 20:16 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
| That was a somewhat nice way to get back into a knowable consianceness. (sp?) Very good chapter and all of that other good stuff. LoL. |
| Monday 31st July 2006 17:31 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis (Author Response) |
| Thanks |
crazyredhead
Monday 24th July 2006 23:24 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
| omg this is so good please update soon |
| Monday 31st July 2006 17:31 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis (Author Response) |
| I've got a couple of chapters in the que but I've been stuck for some time once I use up those chapters. |
Wooster
Sunday 30th April 2006 00:51 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
Brilliant, excellent, magnificent, amazing, stupendous and whatever other word for 'awesome' you so please.
Trust me, you deserve it. Excellent story, can't wait to see where it goes! |
Shadow Hider
Friday 28th April 2006 11:20 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
| I haven't been on PheonixSong in a while, but I'm really glad to see this has been updated since I've been here last ^_^ |
Lulabelle
Monday 4th July 2005 00:51 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
| Very interesting. So WHERE was Harry all this time? And Ron & Hermione should be told about the prophecy no matter what Harry thinks. Just my opinion. I'm assuming that Remus will be speaking to Harry about Sirius' will. That will be good I'm sure. And then off to the Burrow for some much needed R & R, right? Yeah, right. Anyway, I'm intrigued by this story. I hope you update it soon! |
hjdevnull
Friday 24th June 2005 07:49 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
I love the monks.
Very interesting... I really like this story so far, it's well-done
and, of course, I'm curious to know who had Harry and what happened to
him. Should be interesting to see how Ron & Hermione respond to him
being back.
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h2o
Thursday 23rd June 2005 16:30 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
| Oh great chapter! Things are really starting to get interesting! I like the way you write as well, and you've managed to keep Harry as himself even if the circumstances are so very different from canon. Keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to the next chapter! |
Cacoethes Scribendi
Thursday 23rd June 2005 14:49 | Harry Potter: Metamorphosis |
| Very intriguing - I can't wait to see where this is going and where Harry has been. Excellent writing. |
