Ladybug
Monday 16th January 2006 02:04 | Justice |
More fabulous stuff! I don't think I've mentioned it before, but I really like the way you are writing from Ginny's point of view - it's very natural and suits her character - and of course the opportunity for her dry humour is great! I thought the conversation between Ginny and Tonks in the pub was really good - great mix of friendship, professionalism, humour, chilling details. I know I said take your time in a previous review, but now I'm impatiently saying 'update, update, update!' (Gee, I hate it when reviews say that! Feel free to tell me to sod off!) |
| Wednesday 18th January 2006 15:18 | Justice (Author Response) |
Huge relief that Ginny's POV is coming across naturally. I'm always worried that I'm writing a character too much like myself and ignoring their canon characterisation. I do prefer writing the female characters though, I have to say! Must be a girl thing!
Because the next chapter is done and ready to be offloaded on my poor beta (and because it would quite rude, hee) I'll hold back on the "sod offs" for now! |
Delani
Saturday 7th January 2006 18:26 | Justice |
*snort* Sadly enough, I think I giggled a little at his comment. Regardless, I would not giggle at your story (unless I'm supposed to because it's funny, and in that case, I do giggle, so no worries and bloody hell I'm off track...moving on) I still love this! The opening scene had that dash of intimate relations and then bam! it's off to work again! I'm gripping the..well, the keyboard, in anticipation! What will happen next? Who is this copy-cat? I'll never know!!! Brilliant, brilliant work.
Delani |
| Sunday 8th January 2006 16:42 | Justice (Author Response) |
| Hee. Don't worry, feel free to giggle away at anything. I suppose it's better to make people laugh than cry, even if it's not intentional! And as far as Seamus goes, I'm sure Ginny was at least smiling inside. Although maybe she's been hardened by Fred and George! The next chapter is written and is almost entirely H/G, as everyone gets a bit of a break for Christmas. Thanks again, Delani! |
KEDme
Friday 6th January 2006 16:37 | Justice |
| Your writing style is very different from the normal fan fiction author and I find that refreshing. This story is shaping up to be a good ride. I loved the scene with Harry in it and hope there'll be plenty more of those. Christmas at the Burrow sounds like it'll be fun and I like the addition of the children into the mix. Sounds like Tonks might get her a family outta the deal. One comment... There must have been a time leap from chapter 2 to chapter 3, which wasn't exactly made clear. In chapter 2 it was still November according to Ginny and in chapter 3 it was seven days till Christmas. Next time it would be nice to have some warning of the time shift. Keep up the good work. |
| Sunday 8th January 2006 16:37 | Justice (Author Response) |
| I hope it's not a bad thing if it reads a bit differently to some other authors! I've pretty much given up on trying to write as closely to canon as possible; I suppose it's impossible for anyone to write exactly like anyone else and I guess that's not really the point of fanfiction, anyway! The next chapter is done and is nearly all H/G, with lots of fluff because I can't help myself. I really appreciate your taking the time to read and comment, especially since I enjoy your own writing so much. I hadn't really taken notice of the time jump, it was one of those things that make sense in your own head but not to other people, but I was watching out for that in chapter 4 so hopefully it won't be so abrupt again. |
Stephanie
Friday 6th January 2006 15:57 | Justice |
The Ice Cream Headache Jinx, brilliant! How do you come up with those things?
Also, I'd be interested in seeing a meeting between Elizabeth and Hermione... how would Hermione take the knowledge that she isn't the smartest witch on the planet?
Your leading up to the David revelation was great, by the way. It really made me gasp.
And I really want to know who the actual murderer is. Can we guess already? Is it the ministry guy who lost the confidential papers ?
Anyway, a happy new year to you (hadn't wished you one yet) and I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
P.S. English is not my native language and I get the feeling that I made some mistakes in my review, so if I accidentaly said something weird or rude: please don't hold it against me . |
| Sunday 8th January 2006 16:31 | Justice (Author Response) |
If English isn't your first language, then I think you write it amazingly well! And Happy New Year to you, too! I really appreciate your reading and commenting and support; writing a multi-chapter fic in this fandom is new to me and it's much harder than I'd thought so I have whole new respect for anyone else who does it. And yes, lol, I'm not sure how Hermione and Elizabeth will get on, yet. I don't think Hermione would quite like being outdone by a teenager, somehow! You can guess if you like, lol, but it would be a bit of a shot in the dark at the moment.
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