captburke
Wednesday 25th February 2009 18:14 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
This is going to be a very interesting story. Wasn't sure what to expect reading the Prologue. It was very easy to understand Harry's frustration, hurt, anxiety and suicidal tendencies considering he had lost everyone. Dumbledore was very wise, very intelligent, etc., however he did not necessarily take people's lives, loves, and dreams when making his plans. Harry may have survived, but survival isn't worth it if everyone you love is gone.
I can see that your concept of Harry's "first" life was different than in the HP series. Snape was obviously not a good guy in your version. Wonder what else will be different? Guess I'll just have to read on and find out.
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thorn
Monday 19th January 2009 21:47 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| snif i love this grate idea i can wait to see what happens next! keep up the good work. |
danielarrrowsmith
Friday 22nd August 2008 14:49 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
It is in this chapter that I fully realised the task you set yourself: to re-write the whole of the Harry Potter series, giving Harry the same knowledge of future events that we have. That truely is a monstrous task, and one that I imagine wasn't undertaken lightly.
This chapter shows you are up to that task, as you carefully weave future and past Harry together in a delicate yet very fitting way. Harry's confused memories/dreams at the start give more insight into that awful future you invisioned, and the actual conversation between the two Harry Potters is beautiful. You pull out the innocence of Past Harry and the experience of Future Harry very clearly, whilst still showing Harry's nobility first and foremost. All the while, you can't help but empathise with both Harrys, as Past Harry nearly goes into shock, and Future Harry sees hope for the first time.
Hope is definately the theme that prevails over the rest of the chapter, with Harry taking subtle steps to cover his foreknoledge whilst using to to his advantage. I couldn't help but get excited at the prospect of Harry finally having the advantage, and not just being the unfortunate hero that destiny jumps at. Seeing Harry getting prepared at Diagon Alley conveyed to me the sense of a soldier getting equipped for a long war, and was definately a highlight.
With Harry's immediate action, it was hard to see Past Harry's character, but the younger Harry was very much present in the nervousness and doubt before meeting his friends, as well as the nervousness at seeing Ginny. It would have been easy to just eradicate Past Harry, and have Future Harry take over completely, but the mixing of two personalities (albeit two very similar ones!) is one of the more engaging and interesting parts of this story. So it is definately a credit to you that you have begun to do this so well in this chapter.
Finally, the way Harry reacts to meeting his friends again fits very well in the framework, and the idea to bring Ginny more into Book 1's events through writing letters was a stroke of genius.
All in all, Chapter 2 begins the retelling of Harry Potter incredibly well, and really sets yourself a high standard to keep! I look forward to reading the rest of this story once it is written. |
Hihavaniceda
Friday 11th April 2008 18:48 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| I read this story tooooo fast the first time and did not review hardley any chapters .... enjoyed it so much more this second time reading the story ! |
aimless`
Saturday 29th December 2007 06:35 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Ah sorry, so stupid of me . Got it! |
aimless`
Saturday 29th December 2007 06:20 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Anyone who can throw off the Imperius at fourteen would not make this easy. [/qoute]
ehm... I don't remember Harry ever fought Imperius. When it was? |
Augrey07
Sunday 22nd July 2007 11:03 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Normally I can't stand these fics, but this is fantastic. Keep writing, I want to read!
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Narumi
Wednesday 23rd May 2007 17:21 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Again, very well done! I like how much attention to detail you've paid, like in inventing the subtleties of Goblin culture. It was a bit awkward when Harry started meeting people again, though, but I suppose that scene would be a difficult one for any author to pull off. |
Evenstar21
Monday 11th December 2006 21:37 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Another excellent chapter. I love Harry and Ginny's first meeting, so cute. I also like your take on the Weasley twins. “Unless Mister Potter is having us on.” Did Ron think Harry was playing for sympathy with his home life description? That's the only downside I could see about being upfront about the abuse. |
Caleb Nova
Friday 1st December 2006 04:32 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
I especially enjoy the portrayal of the goblins. There's a great deal of hinted at depth to them in the books that I'm glad you've capitalized on.
It's also well done how Harry immediately begins to maneuver around his friends to maximize their potential. Events at first still closely align with the now obsolete future-past, but what's really change is mainly in the persona of his friends. As I recall, it pays off. |
tempesta
Saturday 26th August 2006 03:17 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| I'm usually a bit sceptical about plots involving second chances via time-travel or similar concepts, but your plot-idea really seems to work. A very gripping read so far. I'm looking forward to the rest of the chapters. |
GryffindorDragon
Wednesday 16th August 2006 14:19 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Way to tell off Petunia . Very interesting and creative scene with soul Harry of the future talking with past Harry . Nice scene with Ginny , though I think Harry's overdoing it a little bit .
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crazyredhead
Monday 14th August 2006 20:26 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| i like this so much it is so good |
haphazard1
Saturday 4th February 2006 00:43 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Another great chapter, as Harry begins working to alter this timeline. Loved the setup steps with the goblins, and getting a controlling interest in Grunnings. Can't wait to see how Harry uses that - "leverage" indeed!
Meeting the Weasleys and Hermione again...the emotional overload on Harry's part must be incredible. I like the small ways Harry is trying to head off future problems. Who hasn't wished for the chance to do things over, knowing what they do now? I'm guessing he's going to have to be very careful, though, as it could easily get out of hand and change things in ways he does not anticipate. |
| Monday 13th February 2006 14:23 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
Your second parapgraph sums up about 80% of the conflict in this story.
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siobh007
Wednesday 25th January 2006 08:42 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| nice! |
| Sunday 29th January 2006 04:38 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thanks! |
SillyGillie
Monday 16th January 2006 19:53 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Yay! It was a success. I find it very amusing that Harry went into Gringotts to discuss assests with the goblins! I'm glad that Harry's decided to make friends with Ginny from the start, brilliant. Ron and Harry's relationship looks to be going well. That's a brilliant new twist, Harry joking with Fred and George, nice touch. I wonder what the results will be of that. Will he not get the products tested on him? I was just wondering is this story spanning the whole of Harry's years at Hogwarts. It's a brilliant story. |
| Monday 23rd January 2006 13:16 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| It's all a part of the whole "cheating like Draco Malfoy on a Potions exam" plan!
I've got 4 years outlined, in varying degrees of detail. Five can go one of two ways right now. |
Wooster
Sunday 15th January 2006 12:54 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Oh wow...I had to work so hard not to scream with laughter and freak out my brother. That was hilarious! I love the way you dealt with the Weasleys and Hermione. So fun!!! Just different enough to be interesting and not too different so it screws up history. Fun! |
| Sunday 15th January 2006 14:45 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thank you! I use my wife (and pre-beta) as a joke-test. If she laughs out loud, then I know what I just wrote is okay. If she groans out loud, then I know it's great. |
juliet
Friday 13th January 2006 20:42 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
I can see Harry getting himself into some trouble if he keeps revealing things too much, too soon.
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| Saturday 14th January 2006 01:12 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Yeah, he's got to be careful with the changes he is making. Fortunately, he's starting with a blank slate with most people, so he can try and build up an entirely different image of himself in their minds... |
uchegirl
Friday 13th January 2006 00:37 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Erm, I'm totally hooked now. Please tell me there's a lot more of this story to be had? Pleeeease?? *blinks pathetically* Seriously - I'm also writing a completely AU rendition of Harry's school years, and know how daunting it can be to keep going. Don't give up! Your stuff so far is excellent, and it is soooooooooooo cool to read something that really takes this premise and runs with it, and runs with it well. Good job, pls keep posting. And good job to your beta, as well ;)
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| Friday 13th January 2006 02:37 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
Theres a lot more to come. I've still got four more years outline to varying degrees of detail, and at last count 777 people in my yahoo group ready to string me up if I leave them hanging! |
Lulabelle
Wednesday 11th January 2006 19:20 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| This is great! I love it! Keep it up! |
| Friday 13th January 2006 02:33 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thanks! I will. |
paladin
Wednesday 11th January 2006 18:43 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Great
work! I like the direction you're going in and the path being
layed out. Really nice job on delivering the emotions and
responses during the key parts of the story. The bedroom scene of
the young and old Harry talking to one another was well done. I started
imagining being able to do the same thing; that old adage of, "If I
only knew then, what I know now." Who wouldn't want to do
that? I'm looking forward to Ch. 3.
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| Friday 13th January 2006 02:33 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thanks! I did a lot of RPGs when I was younger, so it makes it a little easier to get inside the character's head at times. (Is there such a thing as method-writing?) I know what you mean about looking back. Is there anyone who doesn't look back at some pieces of their pasts and just cringe? |
C_lala
Wednesday 11th January 2006 13:47 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Okay, my first ever review here at phoenixsong...
I really like the this story, and I think the plot is very interesting... However, I may be totally wrong, but when Harry ventured out in London and Diagon Alley by himself, I found it very simular to the way ( as we've learned from HBP) Tom Riddle used to find his way round when he was a child.... was that on purpose, or...? And a question: Is the 11-year-old Harry's mind completely gone? Anyway... Your story has really captured me and I can't wait to read the next chapters... |
| Friday 13th January 2006 02:30 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
There are some parallels in their behavior as young, precocious, and powerful wizards with hidden agendas. They are a merger, just as future-Harry promised. It's just that the 19 years of additonal memories has made quite an impact, and merged-Harry is very anxious to get some things started before it's too late.
Terminology Note: young-Harry is pre-merger... both Harry's had identical experiences up to that point. Future-Harry is the Canon Harry Potter up through Half Blood Prince, then continuing through the Hogwarts Massacre and the 13 years of hell on earth as Voldemort slowly destroyed the UK. He's mostly seen in chapter 1 and the flashbacks. Merged-Harry is the primary focus of the story, as he tries to change things.
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m4rk6
Wednesday 11th January 2006 09:54 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Greetings S'tarkan!
Er, Viridian rather, I'm glad you posted Nightmares here. Your fic is one of the few reasons why I keep going back to ff.net, hopefully you'll post every chapter in the next few days.
Cheers!
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| Friday 13th January 2006 02:18 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| I was sort of surprised when I got an email about this place, but the set-up is very nice. There is some much-needed beta-izing going on before the chapters are posted here, but I think the results are very worth it. |
Stormdelver
Wednesday 11th January 2006 09:13 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
To both author and harrased Beta: I have read, well I lost count over a year ago, but TONS, and there have been many good stories, many great stories, and several jems, you know the ones that take you on an emotional roller-coaster. Anyway- this is a great story- I can already see it going horribly wrong, but lets hope this fore-knowledge doen't pioson the well too much.
Great story!!!!! |
| Friday 13th January 2006 02:15 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thanks! But what makes you think it will go wrong? It's not like Harry's cursed or anything, right? Er. Let me rephrase that... |
hedwig_edwiges
Wednesday 11th January 2006 03:19 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Well, good work! Just keep us winded with that! And I hope your beta is quick because the tension is building! :)) |
| Friday 13th January 2006 02:13 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Kokopelli is a lot faster than I am. Right now a couple of issues are sort of making me the choke point, but it's getting better. |
zafiro
Tuesday 10th January 2006 15:29 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
*growl*
I give my compliments to the author though, for thinking up such a brilliant story.
Much applause to the author and beta readers! I am truly impressed with this story, and hope that the next chapters come up soon!
I can't wait!
zafiro
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| Friday 13th January 2006 02:10 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
Thanks! (I'll pass that on to my wife as well, who pre-beta-ed the original version.) |
