captburke
Wednesday 25th February 2009 20:41 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Harry is going to make things worse if he's not careful |
Potter&Granger
Tuesday 25th November 2008 14:58 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Hermione’s face was filthy, smeared with dirt from being dragged, and tracked with tears; Harry didn’t think she’d ever looked quite so beautiful before.
What it's that, it's some sort of premonition or something, about what will come? Hermione And Harry toghether in the end, it woudn't be a bad idea, but to that to happen it would be nessesary that Ron and Ginny dies though, either way its going to be great to know what will happen, nic story by the way
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danielarrrowsmith
Thursday 28th August 2008 18:53 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
By now, the story is no longer at it's very beginning, and events are happening more quickly as a result. Yet despite this, it's good to see that you have taken time to write a few pages of inter-character conversations; it's even better that these conversations are very well done. The banter between Harry and Ron, for example, draws a nice line between the characters reacting according to their original personalities and the characters reacting according to merger-Harry. As such, in dialogues like those at the beginning of this chapter we really see your flair for scripting characters.
This good scripting was seen again in the re-invented troll scene. Not only have you changed things enough so as to make this event your own, but you took a big risk and showed Harry as fallable. Seeing that Harry was initially very confident in his ability to actually stop the troll once he found it, and made no preparation for this fight, meant that his reliance on others, and abject helplessness, were truely inspiring things. As I've said in previous chapter reviews, it's gratifying that you've not gone for a super-human Harry; it's even more gratifying that you allow this Harry to recieve such major injuries, very much showcasing his vunerability. Praise for that is definately deserved. Oh, and it was definately satisfying to see Hermione slap Draco hard.
The Quidditch match was another well-written part; you've captured the essence and feel of one of J.K's Quidditch games, whilst changing enough so that it fits in well with the different themes of your story. Seeing Harry merely get angry at Quirrel's jinx instead of becoming a helpless victim was a nice example of that. Besides all that, the phrase "Slytherin had been crushed" caused a good sense of satisfaction.
All in all, this story is progressing nicely, and is more cause for the praise your work has attracted. |
Narumi
Wednesday 23rd May 2007 17:24 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Another great chapter. It was nice to see Harry just enjoying a little Quidditch again. Hooray for stomping Slytherin! |
rustymotion
Friday 6th April 2007 13:44 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Happy chapter, i love it.. im not gonna write a ton this time around, but god do you make the characters both lovable and enjoyable.. harry's sarcasm and wit are hilarious
till next time. |
Evenstar21
Thursday 14th December 2006 21:15 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Wow, life is much more violent this time around. His arm bone was sticking out? *cringes* Still a good read. I enjoyed the Quidditch match as well. More Hagrid please! |
Caleb Nova
Sunday 3rd December 2006 07:53 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| It's true that most of Harry's visits to Hagrid in the books always seem to concern the main plot in some way or the other. It's a cool touch how Harry wants to make that up to him. |
GryffindorDragon
Wednesday 16th August 2006 16:18 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Nice troll scene, but I think you're letting Snape get away with too much . I guess Harry has decided not to go to the board of governors .
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Wooster
Thursday 23rd February 2006 06:10 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Aw...I really liked the ending. The way this story is written is so clever! It's very believable and the inherent similarities to the first book kind of make me feel...I dunno...nostalgic.
And with that overly formal sounding review, I'll leave you with my favorite, super-clever line of yours.
Nice try, Quirrell, you two-faced
Nice. Very nice. |
| Friday 24th February 2006 12:07 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
Nostalgia, both for childhood, and for the world he lost, is one of the underlying themes of Nightmares of Futures Past.
And yes, I have a weakness for one-liners.
As you can probably tell! |
haphazard1
Saturday 4th February 2006 01:39 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Interesting twists on that first Halloween. I really like that Neville is part of the group. The quidditch match was fun, and storytime with Hagrid was a good scene.
It sounds like Harry is going to confide, at least partially, in Hermione come summer. That could be very interesting...her reaction, and also turning that mind of hers loose on the ramifications.
Great work! |
| Monday 13th February 2006 14:27 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| True, but Harry has to be very careful about this, as you will see... |
dophingirl79
Friday 3rd February 2006 10:59 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Good story, I am glad I found it again, Keep up the great work!
I love it! |
| Monday 13th February 2006 14:16 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Er... Thanks again! |
dophingirl79
Friday 3rd February 2006 10:59 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
Good story, I am glad I found it again, Keep up the great work!
I love it! |
| Monday 13th February 2006 14:16 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thanks! I plan to, as fast as work and life allow. |
MercuryBlue
Tuesday 24th January 2006 17:44 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
According to Hp lexicon: "The juice may be used in Strengthening Solution at some stage (see) and is definitely a potions ingredient. "
From OotP ch. 17:
"Salamander blood, Harry!" Hermione moaned, grabbing his wrist to prevent him adding the wrong ingredient for the third time. "Not pomegranate juice!" |
| Sunday 29th January 2006 04:25 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Ah, but why did they even have it out, unless it was going to be used at some point in the potion? I know from snippets in the books that the order in which ingredients are added is very important, so... |
SillyGillie
Monday 23rd January 2006 15:04 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| The Weasleys have to go to Egypt so that Sirius can steal Fudges newspaper and see Wormtail on the front page and realize that he's at Hogwarts with Harry, and escape prison to rescue Harry and essentially kill Wormtail. |
| Tuesday 24th January 2006 02:17 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Why would I want to exactly mirror the plot of POA? Better yet, why would Harry want to wait that long if he could help it? |
Chromatix
Saturday 21st January 2006 14:53 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Of all the time-travel scenarioes I've encountered so far, yours is one of the more plausible and definitely the best-executed. I particularly like the conflict between Harry's desire to put everything right and his self-imposed need to avoid overplaying his hand. Perhaps he's getting a taste of what it must be like to be Dumbledore. :D
It is, however, truly remarkable that you manage to make each of the really big events during Harry's year happen in a completely different way - and yet have effectively the same final consequences. Are you any good at chess? I feel that Harry will have to draw on Ron's strategic strengths to make things truly happen the way he wants to later, as otherwise he simply can't think far enough ahead - and this is why the consequences so far have mostly been magnified rather than reversed.
As for Snape and Malfoy - well, time will tell about those two. At least it is increasingly clear to other staff that they are Problems of the first order. With some luck, Dumbledore will have to do something about them eventually, and before they can do any lasting harm.
- Chromatix, now writing from the depths of winter in Finland.
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| Tuesday 24th January 2006 02:16 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thanks! You've really hit on the dilemma Harry finds himself in. His 'unnatural' maturity is being put to the test as he finds himself increasingly constrained by circumstances beyond his control... an uncomfortably all too familiar scenario for the Boy Who Lived. |
Jake
Friday 20th January 2006 15:23 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| This story is excellent and I can't wait until it catches up to it's coutnerpart on SIYE. I love the idea of harry going back and changing things and I love the way things are progressing. Keep up the great work!
-Jake |
| Tuesday 24th January 2006 02:12 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thanks. I've had a lot of headaches using the upload script at a couple of other sites. This one doesn't strip out all my italics! |
SillyGillie
Thursday 19th January 2006 14:12 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| What a brilliant chapter! I can't wait to read some more. Nice job. |
| Tuesday 24th January 2006 02:10 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thanks, more is on the way! |
MercuryBlue
Thursday 19th January 2006 10:04 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Fascinating premise, well-written story. Though I feel I really must point out that pomegranate juice is not an ingredient of Strengthening Solution. Harry picked it up because it's red and sloshy, what he wanted is red and sloshy, and he's lucky Hermione saw that he hadn't actually grabbed the salamander blood. |
| Tuesday 24th January 2006 02:10 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| According to Hp lexicon: "The juice may be used in Strengthening Solution at some stage (see) and is definitely a potions ingredient. " |
hedwig_edwiges
Thursday 19th January 2006 04:04 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| I must say that won't be fast enough for this hungry reader here! Your story is just too good! and I wait in stiches for the next chapter! Keep doing this wonderful job! |
| Tuesday 24th January 2006 02:04 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Thanks! The editing process is taking a while, and it may slow down if I get re-hired. But it will continue! |
uchegirl
Thursday 19th January 2006 02:19 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
| Brilliant chapter, as always. I've actually finished it on FF.net (after some judicious snooping), but I almost cannot help reading it here as well when you post a new chapter. Yep - it's definitely that good.
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| Monday 23rd January 2006 13:29 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| As I said, the chapters here have gotten an extra clean-up and polishing... Thanks! |
MrRobertsIII
Wednesday 18th January 2006 19:14 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past |
If fate tried to screw that up, he was going to have words with the .
-that had me laughing
This was a great chapter. I knew the troll was coming, but your take on it made it even more exciting. Nice to see Neville doing so well.
I do enjoy seeing how Harry's meddling has led Draco to be even more cruel.
Well, except for that whole ‘not ducking’ thing.”
-had me laughing again
“Ron said you were almost certain something bad was going to happen on Halloween. How did you know that?”
-Come on! Its time for Harry to confess to having an "inner eye". Hermione might scoff, but Ron and Neville might mutter something in his defense. Besides Divination is in books, so it must have some factual basis.
Wow, I think your Snape hates Harry more with every chapter. Keep it up!
You are doing a very entertaining job with the story being close to but not quite what happened the first time around. I can only think that you are going to have to get even further off as things go on. How many years do you plan to cover? |
| Monday 23rd January 2006 13:28 | Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past (Author Response) |
| Harry's sarcasm and bitterness are defense mechanisms to help him deal with soul-crushing grief. That doesn't make his dialogue any less fun to write.
Harry feels bad enough already with the things he can't tell his friends. Lying by omission is bad enough, but telling deliberate falsehoods is even worse. |
